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Name: Dissendio (Signed) · Date: 12/11/07 12:53 · For: One shot
I loved reading this from Sirius' perspective! Could have been longer though. You should write more of what hppened to Sirius this year. One of the best I've read in a while!

Name: Samuri Rose (Signed) · Date: 09/25/06 11:19 · For: One shot
This is fab!
I love fics that elaborate on missing parts of J.Ks stories
Samuri Rose xxx

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: Purplemage (Signed) · Date: 08/04/06 18:59 · For: One shot
Interesting fic. There are not many fics out there that have a dog Sirius POV and also that you explored how he felt about Harry before they met. That's a nice touch and refreshing as you said it yourself.

I love your descriptions at the beginning of the fic. How you explained what Sirius had been doing and how he looked. "he farther away his destination became, like the sun on the horizon - never getting closer." I think this was my favorite line, very sad and beautiful at the same time.

It was sad after he saw Harry and it was for such a short time, poor Sirius. It was very well described how he regreted not having transformed and not having talked to him.

I love a good Sirius story and this one was diferent. Kudos to you.

Author's Response: Thank you so much Harald! *huggles* I'm glad you liked it, because it means so much coming from you -- I know that Sirius is one of your favorite characters. Million squees and thanks!

Name: Sirius_Rulezs (Signed) · Date: 07/07/06 19:39 · For: One shot
that was so good. i luv it. i really hope u make more stories of Sirius. He's just so hot.

Author's Response: Lol, thanks for that review!

Name: StellaSirius (Signed) · Date: 07/06/06 10:32 · For: One shot
That was a great story! I've wondered what Sirius thought that night, and I'm glad that someone portrayed it. However, was there a stream next to where the Knight Bus landed? Remember, it was a street. However, overall it was a really good story.

Author's Response: Thanks for your lovely review! Let me go check on that...

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 06/23/06 12:39 · For: One shot
Very nice! There were some things I liked a lot and a couple I didn't. For example:

Time seemed to stop still. Everything became motionless. He was only slightly alert of the blood rushing through his veins, his heart pumping wildly, the medley of emotions that captured him. He didn't even breathe. An odd shiver raced up his spine, enveloping him, freezing him. Seeing him brought back painful memories - ones he had vowed to forget. But they came rushing back with such strength, his legs wobbled under the emotional pressure they evoked.

Except for the world "alert," which is used a bit oddly here, it's a good bit of emotional writing.

It would have seemed that seeing Harry would diminish his passion to get to Hogwarts. On the contrary, it only fueled it and he was more determined than ever to get there. The suffering that would come along with it was insignificant now.

I like the last sentence of this a lot. The first two don't quite seem to fit the rhythm of most of the story. I think I don't get why seeing Harry might have diminished his desire to get to Hogwarts. After all, he's going to Hogwarts to save his godson, James and Lily's son, from Peter Pettigrew.

Anyway, great job. I like the slightly simpler feel that comes with Snuffles' voice. Also, nice bit of originality. I haven't seen one of these before.

Author's Response: Thanks Katie, I do enjoy getting reviews from you! I'll look over those sentences you mentioned, and I might change them a bit, to fit into the story. Thanks for the lovely review, dear!

Name: hogwartswannabe (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 22:59 · For: One shot
i really liked this story! i never thought that sirius might have accidently run into harry that night, instead of planning it. i definitely would give it 10/10 stars!

Author's Response: Thank you! ;)

Name: Dory_the_Fishie (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 17:34 · For: One shot
*loves* Anna, you are amazing, darling, and I love you lots. But I am going to review properly and not shower you with squees like I really want to. So. Ahem.

This is so great that I don't know where to start. Once again you have proven that you are a wonderful writer, especially for your age! I know I've said that before, and it's probably annoying, but really, you write better than most thirteen year olds and I can only see even more amazing things from you in the future. You are on a brilliant track, keep it up!

Your writing evokes so much emotion and feeling that I can really feel for the character. This is just so Sirius, you characterized him so well. I can really feel Sirius's hope at seeing Harry, and it then it pains me when he leaves, regretting not showing himself. You also captured really nicely how Sirius has been affected by his years in Azkaban; he's so...unsure, almost. He's not really quite sure what to do with himself, and seeing Harry sort of throws everything into perspective.

I think my favorite line was: The various clacks and whistles of the city droned into his ragged ears - he was unused to hearing anything else except iron bars closing, keys jingling and the reeking odor of them. Shows so well how Azkaban has been his life for so many years, and now he's unused to the world outside of prison.

Overall, this was amazing and I love you for dedicating it to me as a birthday present. I couldn't have asked for anything better and more wonderful. You've got me smiling, girl! *loves*

Author's Response: You can't possibly know how happy I am after reading your review! *glowers* I'm glad that you loved your birthday present, because I did want it to be perfect for you. Thank you for your lovely comments, because they made ME squee...a lot. *blushes* I'm afraid all those compliments are going to go to my head. *hugs* Thank you, dear! :D

Name: Dory_the_Fishie (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 17:33 · For: One shot
*loves* Anna, you are amazing, darling, and I love you lots.

Edit: Ok, that got messed up. My real review is up there...^^ Sorry :o

Author's Response: *loves back* I love you even more! :P

Name: Gryffinpuff (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 15:44 · For: One shot
Nicely written!

Author's Response: :D Thanks very much!

Name: Khrys (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 15:32 · For: One shot
This was a wonderfully refreshing look at Sirius. You did a great job with the imagery and emotions he felt in his Animagus form. Way to go!

Author's Response: *blushes* Thank you so much for your kind comments!

Name: Leahr (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 15:03 · For: One shot
Wow. Beautifully written. That is Sirius, all over, and how he feels, and it is really well done. One thing you might want to edit-"How grim and impoverished he appeared. How pitiful!"
you could change to "...he appeared; how pitiful." or something else without the exclamation mark. Could you make a second shapter of this story, with more of Sirius' perspective?

Author's Response: Thank you for your comments, I'll take your suggestions to mind. No, this is only a one shot, sorry. =) Thanks!

Name: aintcrazy4you (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 14:42 · For: One shot
It sooo beautiful!! Sirius does seem to be in character so good job. I like how it corresponds with the book. G.R.E.A.T. job! And yeah I'm the first to review. Yay! ={)

Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely review! I'm flattered and delighted that you liked it! =)

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