I totally agree with the last line. Great job - very funny!
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Author's Response: Mary Sue has 'fearful symmetry' (if I'm remembering the poem correctly, lol) Thank you!
Well, I wouldn't quite say poison, exactly.. Maybe a sedative.
Excellent, again - You should write some on her soul mate, Gary Sue. xD
Author's Response: Non veleno- sedativo? (you've got me hooked on an italian translator from other reviews, :D) I think the range of Sues varies from harmless to toxic depending on the story and reaction of the reader, heh. Gary Stu only makes me curl a lip, though, not bare teeth...or claws...LOL
That last line rocked.
A definite 10/10.
Author's Response: Merci beaucoup! (and thanks in every other language too! ^_^)
nice poem...and i know good poems!!! keep it up!!
Author's Response: Grazie infinite! You have a magical way of encouraging. ^_^
"Sugar coated poison is Mary Sue." There's nothing else to say ...
Author's Response: You start reading, think it isn't sooo bad- then you keel over, LOL. Thanks for reviewing! ^_^
I love this poem so much! It's better than the stuff I've read in books! Ever thought of being a poet/writer?
Author's Response: Writer, yes (if you get a chance to look at my profile page, there are loads of stories and a variety of ships to choose from, lol) Poet, no- too hard, lol- it doesn't flow trippingly from the tongue, or keyboard, heh, like prose. Thank you so much for asking! ^_^
It was Wonderful !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you, kind lady! ^_^
That was a great poem. It is strue, and beautiful. I think your a grwt poet, really.
Author's Response: You're s'marvellous to say so. :) Thanks!
very nice poem, and much more to the poiunt than shakespeare's poems!
Author's Response: If less poetic and less filled with iambic pentameter goodness, lol. I'm thrilled you liked it! :)
That's pretty darn good. I'm always impressed by anyone who can make this format work. I can't to save my life. Great Job.
Author's Response: Thank you! For some odd reason, I heard James Earl Jones' voice in my head when I read your review, lol. *happy shiver* Thanks for that too! :D
LOL! Just like the other two stories in this series, your sonnet is hilarious! It's also good, how you actually made it a real sonnet, with the rhyme scheme and everything!
Author's Response: Thanks! I failed to uphold iambic pentameter, but since I'm not being graded on form, lol, I'm grateful you liked the content! :D
Sugar coated poison is Mary Sue.
I couldn't agree more. :D Great job again, kerichi!
Author's Response: Ta, Thanks! I've become fixated on Mary Sue as a arsenic sprinkled sugar coated donut. Beware the donut! :D
Author's Response: Hmmm....how to respond to an ambiguous review....er.... O_o
Yup. That pretty much sums up Mary Sue. *coughevillouthsomecreaturesheiscough*
Sorry, must have had something caught in my throut.
Author's Response: Mary Sue would hand you some water, but her nails are wet, snicker. What interesting sounding coughs you have! ^_~
Sugar coated poisen. Nice. Now I wonder about Mary Sue. I see her more often as the blonde chick, despite your saying she's black haired. I can't see it. Sorry. Great sonnet by the way. :-)
Author's Response: I'm Bard-lite, hitting iambic pentameter when lucky, sticking to rhyming scheme and ten syllables when not, lol. I have a lot of respect for poets getting all that stressed/unstressed meter stuff down. I much prefer prose, which flows trippingly from the tongue, or pen, or keyboard, whatever, heh. I'm sure there's a Sue for every hair color- she could be a Loreal spokesmodel "Because I'm worth it!" LOL. Thanks!
Sugar coated poison indeed! Good metaphors by the way.
I have to warn you author dearest, I’m getting really sick of Mary Sue… I DON’T mean that in a bad way, just her character is making me wanna kill…If I see a not humor Mary Sue fic, in the next five months, I will rip apart my favorite book with my teeth. (Actually I’d have to find a favorite book first. And NO, it would NOT be Harry Potter!)
Author's Response: I have to admit that I'm sick of her myself, even though I laugh at her, so I'm sending her off to gaze raptly into a mirror while I write other things. :D I will eventually return to Sue-parody, because I haven't written Mary Sue, Founders love you! yet, but it won't be anytime soon....takes awhile for poison to leave your system, heh. Very emphatic, that no and not. :D
sweet! i liked the "sugar coated poison"!
Author's Response: It's like 'hey, this is a little too sweet, a little sticky, a little...AHHHH!!!' =)
that was really good.
good use of metaphors
Author's Response: Thank you! Mary Sue is an apple with a razor blade hidden inside, isn't she? :D
Mary Sue's very lehtal that's for sure. I would NOT want her as a friend. She'd steal my guy.
Author's Response: She'd steal your guy...until your guy's best friend looked her way, and she realized...hey, wait, maybe he's my soulmate! LOL Then your guy would become a better person for having known her...before you killed him. :D
* sporfle *
Only one criticism, and it's exceedingly nitpicky, and it only comes from the fact that I just spent three days writing Iambic Pentameter myself: it's not just the ten syllables that make up the meter, it's also the rhythym. "Who MASters COMplex MAGic FROM the START" is perfect, but "ALways SAVES the DAY SMELLing like FLOWers" loses the groove. That's the real challenge of writing to the meter, right, you're not allowed to just use whatever words you want to get your point across, like you can in prose. Every word has to A) say what you want it to say, B) fit the rhyme, and C) fit the meter, so your choices are severely restricted. I had to consult a thesaurus at least twice on every line when I was writing it.
Here's an example that just came to me before I hit "submit"--"Glossy black with ruby glintings shines" would scan better than "glimmers it shines." It's tricky stuff!! Anyway, I hope this is constructive.
Author's Response: I'm happy you reviewed and sad you had to spend three days writing Iambic Pentameter. :D I was going for content over form, which is why I put (my version of one) in the summary. I have no pretensions, I'm very Bard-lite, heh. I like your re-wording, though it needs an 'it' to make it 10 syllables...or maybe 'shineth' would be good....hmmm...thanks for the feedback!