Reviewer: Red and Gold
Date: 06/17/07 10:36
Chapter: Chapter 1: The Mirage

Vorona~

Having completed a Gantlet myself, I know how incredibly difficult it is to write blindly, so to speak. As I was taken through both chapteres, I became more and more impressed with your ability to write such descriptive, in-depth passages that melded into each other so incredibly well.

You went from prompt to prompt to prompt adding more and more elements from the books and from logical deductions of your own. All the herbs, for example. I loved all the names you came up with for Aconite that Snape wrote in the book; every ingredient necessary for the antidote to Veritaserum and why it was necessary just astounded me; the boggart that showed Snape killing Dumbledore, leaving Snape shaken and trembling was a masterful touch, as well.

This leads me to your logical deductions of what made Snape turn to the Order - his killing of the Muggle woman to put her out of her pain and torture from the Cruciatus Curse of Malfoy's. I feel it's entirely possible, seeing as how no matter how angry or frustrated he got with Harry Potter, Snape would stoop to verbal flicks on the raw, but never inflicted real physical pain.

Also, I find it perfectly answers the question of why the hatred on Snape's face when killing Dumbledore, if killing Dumbledore is exactly what he did not wish to do, and was afraid of ever having to do.

Again, I loved the details in your story, and I appreciated the room with the painting of the Death Eaters and the different forms of pain and torture shown. It made me think of Hieronymous Bosch's paintings, such as The Last Judgement.

All in all, I thought this was incredibly done and it's obvious you put so much thought and hard work into these two chapters. I was completely enthralled the entire time.

Excellent job, Vorona!
~Andrea

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the wonderful review! This is probably my favorite story so far, and I'm so happy you were "completely enthralled the entire time". Of course, that's what any writer likes to hear, but in this story in particular, I was really going for that sort of deep immersion. I should note, however, that I did NOT make up the names of aconite. They come from Cunningham's Encyclopedia of Magical Herbs, by Scott Cunningham... and shoot -- a website I can't seem to find again. Talk about being a bad academic! *goes to update Author's Note* Thanks again!

Reviewer: Amaya Tsukiko Ookami
Date: 06/23/06 3:37
Chapter: Chapter 2: The Prize

awwww! i love the inside look on book 6, it explains a lot and JKR would be absolutly mad not to use your ideas! i love snape....i love reading whole stories about snape, where in the books stupid harry is the stupid main stupid character. so i love it that you can write good snape stories and keep him canon. great job, keep this up!!! ^-^

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really glad you like it, and that you think he's in character.

Reviewer: Amaya Tsukiko Ookami
Date: 06/23/06 3:15
Chapter: Chapter 1: The Mirage

oh wow, i really like this! i love where you went with his mother, i have seen several different takes on it, and i would have to say that your's is the best. i love that spell, its very handy, and i like the variation, it makes sense. I usually dont like maze type-stories, im not sure why, just something about them, but this is very intruiging and good! its very real, i feel like i am actually there, very good attention to detail! :D and snape and the other's mentioned, is, as always, very in-character. i love the animangus form he takes. good job, keep this up!

Author's Response: I am really glad you like it, especially since you don't normally like maze stories. I'm also glad you like his Animagus form (of course *grins*)

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