That was horrible! Poor Myrtle. Then poor Hagrid.
"Yes, you. You fascinate me.” He smiled even more."
That line, for me was really creepy. A boy told me I was fascinating and I didn't know how to respond. Now it's just like. Tom is a murderer!
Poor Hagrid! Myrtle and Hagrid, did they like each other? Oh! The deception. She was smitten with Tom. He was so suave, and she was just so young and oh that's so sad! Poor Myrtle!
An original fic, that’s for sure! It portrayed the most important steps in Myrtle’s life sufficiently. Besides a small Americanism - “Oh, Tom. I’m sorry,” she apologized,” Where you can just change the ‘z’ to and ‘s’, I picked up on Myrtle and Hagrid characterisation and speech. Myrtle at times seemed a lot more secure and grown up about herself than she does in the books. She’s a bit of a baby, and the line “Sod off, Olive,” really got me. It doesn’t sound like something Myrtle would say. I did, though, find it cute you paired Myrtle (Oh! You gave her a last name!) with ‘Rubeus’. It’s strange calling Hagrid that, but it fits in with the character. A few small things to work on, but a cute fic!
Myrtle reminds me of myself.
dis was awsome, i luv it! plz sum how add sum more 2 dis chapter!!!!!
That's so sad! Oh well, it was still very well written. Very unique and I like it a lot. I like how you made Myrtle and Rubeus friends. That was cool. Good story and keep up the good work! ~HStarRunner23
I can't believe it! Myrtle's soo nice! I imagined her to be some brat, but she's really kind. Good story, anyway.
good history i'd have to say