I really like you poem. I can feel Fred's agony. Great job!
Fred is one of my favorite characters, and I feel really sorry for him! I'd never thought of Fred and Hermione, but it works for this. My only thoughts are that I can't imagine Fred this serious... I guess everyone has a soft side...
Wow. Poor Fred.
Author's Response: you said u needed a beta reader i'd be happy to be urs. don't worry i do in fact have past expirence in writting besides poetry.
Oh, this is so sad. The poem flows so nicely. I think that in the third to last line, you could do without the first word. You can keep it if you like, but I thin it sounds better without it.
Author's Response: thankxs it does sound better