Reviews For Fan Girl
Reviewer: lunaselenia
Date: 05/23/08 20:22
Chapter: One-Shot

Beautiful story. Funny and yet heart breaking. And I really like the part when Tonks is trying to gent attention from Snape.

Reviewer: BertieBotsBeans741
Date: 04/30/08 19:29
Chapter: One-Shot

Admittedly, the thought alone is disturbing. At various points I cringed, wondering how Tonks could fall for the cruel and cynical Professor Snape, kudos to you for making it work. I found Tonks to be very awkward and that’s what made it so believable. The incorporation of the lyrics was fantastic. I think the song went along well with this one-shot and gave it an extra push.

“What did you do to your hair?” he asked in an equally crotchety voice, the smallest hint of curiosity lacing his tone. Her blush darkened, but she maintained eye contact.

Those lines were highly convincing. I found myself being sucked in, reluctant as I was. Your description is quite fair too. You could have been bland and just written the minimum to get by, but you can tell that there was an effort to make this more enjoyable and interesting. I think that description truly pushes a story along and I also think you’ve done a fine job of accomplishing that.

“Because I know you are merely trying to torture me in the way your cousin, Sirius Black, the murdering scum, would have wanted you to. Now leave me alone,” he barked, glaring at her.

Now, this is just brilliant. I think you have portrayed Snape wonderfully. He’s so gloomy and hateful; it’s just exciting to see an author write him spot on.

“Severus, I understand that you wish me to return the bracelet, but why in the name of Merlin do you have it in your pocket five days after the incident? Does she not take your NEWTs class?”

This is the line where I became hysterical. I wasn’t sure if I should be disgusted or burst into laughter. I became so immersed in the story, taking everything in. I also like his reaction when Professor Sprout confronts him and explains to Snape about Tonks. He is in such utter disbelief. It’s amazing how cold he can be, I think it was all rather swell. Clearly, Snape had no idea how he should handle the situation, who doesn’t love to see Snape clueless?

Snape said in a deadly whisper, his black eyes scanning the room.

I can just picture that so clearly. I swear, this should be under humour, not other pairings. XD

“You think I hate you and want to torture you? No, actually, you’re the most attractive person I have ever met, and you insist on torturing me!”

I found this line to be a little too melodramatic for Tonks. I picture her stumbling over her words, running out and tripping over something.

He lent forward and kissed her roughly on the lips. She almost collapsed into him, her hands gripping the front of his robes as he stole her mouth with his own. He broke the kiss, looking scornfully down at her. “Is that what you wanted? Get out of my sight this instant, you little whore” he ordered. She took a step away from him, her retort caught in her throat. “And if you tell anyone, you will lose more than just house points.”

However, when it came to those lines, I just felt my heart crumple for poor Tonks. Severus was harsh and handled the situation in an incorrect manner, in my opinion. But I congratulate you for keeping him perfectly in character throughout this one-shot.

There were a few grammatical errors, nothing too serious. Overall, I think this flowed nicely and you kept the momentum going. You certainly kept me on edge, wondering what in Godric’s name was going to happen.

Fabulous job!

Brittany

Reviewer: butter_beer_drinker
Date: 04/30/08 10:13
Chapter: One-Shot

The thought that anyone would think Snape as well let me quote -"No, actually, you’re the most attractive person I have ever met, and you insist on torturing me!"

Is a little creepy, the story was great.  I love that song and heard it just theother day and beleive it or not a story with Snape in it was what popped into my head.  Of course I had just read the next chapter of another Snape story, but still the song seems to fit him somehow.  Good job.

~Kristy

Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 01/06/08 1:31
Chapter: One-Shot

That was so, so sad. Poor Tonks.

But I really liked the way you portrayed Snape. He is really grouchy and even though knows Tonks fancies him; he also knows that it is not right. It is so sweet of him to be the bad guy in this situation and not give Tonks any false hope.

It was a pleasure reading and reviewing this fic and this ship. Now of we keep this fic in mind it seems perfectly ok to see how she fell for Remus later. I guess Tonks likes her man older and wiser.

The only mistake I found was that Sirius is kinda like Tonk's uncle and not second cousin (at least in my mind) and I've seen loads of writers say it the same way so you might want to just ignore that.

Anyways, great job fellow Gryff *waves red and gold pom poms*=Sammy

Reviewer: DeathEater Suha
Date: 09/27/07 3:40
Chapter: One-Shot

Snape is not that bad in the inside, is he. he is really kind. did u read Deathly Hallows. He has done all those things coz he luved lily.

Reviewer: Voldemort45
Date: 08/04/07 8:21
Chapter: One-Shot

Disturbing concept this Tonks/Snape thing.

Reviewer: Voldemort45
Date: 08/04/07 8:21
Chapter: One-Shot

Disturbing concept this Tonks/Snape thing.

Reviewer: Voldemort45
Date: 08/04/07 8:21
Chapter: One-Shot

Disturbing concept this Tonks/Snape thing.

Reviewer: Sarkastik101
Date: 11/13/06 1:40
Chapter: One-Shot

You should definately write more on this pair . i totally luv it.Great Fic

Reviewer: JC_Cainstone
Date: 08/29/06 16:10
Chapter: One-Shot

Oooh, Snape is mean! But cool, you gotta admit, Snape rules in a weird, twisted way! Anyways, very interesting and the whole thing with Tonks and Snape was, well, interesting!

Reviewer: THE_wOrms
Date: 07/27/06 17:01
Chapter: One-Shot

sad. I love the pairing, quite inventive. I hope inventive is a word. But I cannot for the life of me see how woman could not find Snape attractive! I would probably drop dead from the sight of the greasy little git, sexy bastard

Reviewer: THE_wOrms
Date: 07/27/06 16:58
Chapter: One-Shot

sad. I love the pairing, quite inventive. I hope inventive is a word. But I cannot for the life of me see how woman could not find Snape attractive! I would probably drop dead from the sight of the greasy little git, sexy bastard

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 07/03/06 0:30
Chapter: One-Shot

Awww...poor Tonks. This was really fun to read. But I really did feel bad for Tonks.

Reviewer: kumydabookworm
Date: 06/27/06 21:36
Chapter: One-Shot

Oh...that was rather nice, actually. I didn't expect to like it - the ship doesn't seem very lovable, does it? :) You pulled off the bitter crankiness of Snape very, very well.

I didn't like Tonks so much. Usually she's quite forward with these things, and I can't see her being afraid of Snape like most of the other students. I also would have liked to see her clumsiness displayed in the Potions classroom. I think that would've a) shown her trademark characteristic and b) added something to Severus' interaction with her.

Nice work.

Kumy

Reviewer: Pure
Date: 06/19/06 11:08
Chapter: One-Shot

Oh, I love this one-shot!!!! I really like the ending, I mean that they don't end up together because that's so original, not like the majority of other ffs in which 'they lived happily ever after' ;) Here is my favorite line: "At least now she’d hate him for breaking her heart".I certainly was surprised when I saw that it was Tonks who was the fan girl * jaw drops* I didn't expect that!
Great job!

Reviewer: geroffme
Date: 06/13/06 22:42
Chapter: One-Shot

Ohhhh....so mean. But well written. Good stuff.

Reviewer: wandaXmaximoff
Date: 06/12/06 9:55
Chapter: One-Shot

Unusual pairing, and not something I would normally read, but fantastic never the less. Well done!

Reviewer: Sekhmet
Date: 06/10/06 21:19
Chapter: One-Shot

What a strange, and yet, thoroughly fascinating piece this stoy is! The writing and characterization are excellent. An extremely good read! Though, I wish it were longer.

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 06/10/06 17:27
Chapter: One-Shot

intresting... tonks seemed a bit ooc, but i guess it was the crush on sanpe... definately a worth while read!!

Reviewer: relichunter18
Date: 06/09/06 22:23
Chapter: One-Shot

so sad, but so well written!!

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