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Name: My Wicked Quill (Signed) · Date: 09/15/09 19:31 · For: Chocolate Kisses
lol heather was like um yea no thats deffinetly not wat im feeling for this guy. lol of course not because wat harry and giny have...its magic literally

Name: ginnypotter_89 (Signed) · Date: 09/28/08 15:38 · For: Chocolate Kisses
nice. you need to tell su what her name is tho. i was wondering what it was during th ewhole thing. but good writing!

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 04/15/08 18:43 · For: Chocolate Kisses
I loved this, it's nice to see some normality in their lives. I'm never sure if thats the best thing to impress upon a child, true love, I mean what if it's not real and they hold out for that feeling forever. On the other hand, I really want to believe in it, even if it doesn't happen for everyone. Wouldn't it be weird to watch your parents first kiss though?

Name: JazPotter07 (Signed) · Date: 12/18/07 10:50 · For: Chocolate Kisses
I loved your story!!!! It was terrific!!!

Name: Ginny H Potter (Signed) · Date: 09/16/07 6:50 · For: Chocolate Kisses
very sweet but why is harry and ginny's daubhter in ravenclaw?

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm pleased you liked it. I put her in Ravenclaw, because I thought Gryffindor would be too cliche.

Name: GinnyPottergirl (Signed) · Date: 01/14/07 2:05 · For: Chocolate Kisses
So cute! I love it!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Name: Hp_4_eva (Signed) · Date: 08/06/06 12:04 · For: Chocolate Kisses
It's so sweet! i love the fanfics that are one chapter about love.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm pleased you liked it.

Name: harry_fan14 (Signed) · Date: 07/15/06 1:38 · For: Chocolate Kisses
i thought that was very cute and sweet SEQUEL LMAO again very sweet

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm pleased you enjoyed it. I have no plans for a sequel sadly, however I am working on a chaptered fan fiction about the Malfoys, their niece Amelia and Regulus Black. The prologue is with my beta, so I should be submitting it soon.

Name: comewhatmay (Signed) · Date: 07/05/06 15:29 · For: Chocolate Kisses
I liked it, but the memory could have been
a little more stretched out?
It should have been a little more detailed.
But I loved it!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I'm glad you liked it. I agree it could have been more longer and detailed, but as this is one of my first attempts at fan fiction, I'll just have to reember it for the future and hope it helps me improve my writing.

Name: The_Dark_Lord (Signed) · Date: 06/29/06 13:15 · For: Chocolate Kisses
THIS IS................BUETIFUL

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

Name: SIRIUS WILL NOT DIE (Anonymous) · Date: 06/23/06 4:50 · For: Chocolate Kisses

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked it. I'm pleased I got you into romance stories. I'll be sure to check out yours and I'll be submitting a chaptered fic soon if you want to read it.

Name: SIRIUS WILL NOT DIE (Anonymous) · Date: 06/23/06 4:43 · For: Chocolate Kisses

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Name: bookworm247 (Anonymous) · Date: 06/21/06 0:48 · For: Chocolate Kisses
awwwww... so sweet and cute and fluffy and fuzzy and wonderful, it gave me that warm feeling inside! am i sounding/reading crazy??? anyway it was a very nice story! oh, why d'you say that ginny was homily? or do you mean homely like a good mother? keep writing please!

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments, I'm glad you liked it. i'm pleased you liked the fluffy romance, it was a lot of fun to write. Yes, I did mean homely. I mussed of missed the incorrect spelling, thanks for pointing it out. I'm currently working on a chaptered story and wil let you know when I post it.

Name: RedheadedWeasley (Signed) · Date: 06/18/06 20:54 · For: Chocolate Kisses
This was really excellent! I could feel the emotion of a first kiss. How exciting and scary it is. I love the idea of this memory coming out as Ginny gives advice to her daughter. A really great idea! One thing that stuck out to me was the fact that Heather didn't know Harry owned anything from Dumbledore. I think that the children would know a lot, especially after starting Hogwarts. The ending also seemed a bit abrupt. I think it would have been nice to seeing mother and daughter continue to talk and reminisce. I really enjoyed this story! It is going in my favorites. You did a great job! Mom-Ginny is exactly how I would picture her being.

Author's Response: Thank your for your comments, I'm glad you liked it. I never concidered the idea that the children would know about Harry/Dumbledore's relationship, my bad, maybe it's something I should have thought about more. I'm pleased you like Mom-Ginny though.

Name: Monkeyboy (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 20:35 · For: Chocolate Kisses
very good, I liked the school trunk with all of the initials of the couples. very well written

Author's Response: Thank you for your comment, I'm glad you liked it. I'm also pleased you picked up on the trunk with all of the initials of the couples, I though it was a nice little touch to add.

Name: amy4rupert (Signed) · Date: 06/13/06 13:54 · For: Chocolate Kisses
tselling linkin imps !!!!!!!!!!s is very sweet haha but i love Heathers comment at the end.iIt probably wasnt meant as a joke but its funny.well done,love it.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you liked it. Yes, Heather's comment at the end was meant as a joke, I'm glad you found it amusing.

Name: Periwinkle (Signed) · Date: 06/12/06 16:09 · For: Chocolate Kisses
Very nice, refreshing story!
I remember commenting on it in the Excerpt section of the forums a while back. I'm happy to see it whole now.

Ginny Potter sat on her double bed; she’d only gone upstairs to put away some fresh laundry, but then a certain photo had suddenly caught her eye. She looked at the moving picture of a couple on their wedding day.

Great intro - you introduce what is going on in the story without extending it and including details that are not needed. It got to the point quickly.

The man in the picture was, of course, Harry Potter, saviour of the wizarding world.

I didn't particularly like this sentence. It seemed cliched - so many people already view him as such, so there's no need to say it again. It seemed artificial. Harry wouldn't admit that he's the 'saviour' of the Wizarding world. However, Ginny might. He was the one, who ultimately saved them all from Voldemort. So through Ginny, the sentence is justified and less cliche.

In today's modern world, many teenagers wouldn't dare to come out and venture a question so personal to them. This just shows Heather's and Ginny's relationship is quite open, and it appears that they have gotten along well. I like how you write your story and without mentioning it, little details creep up. For example - Ginny and Heather's relationship. You didn't come up front and say it, but we can use clues to figure out that it's quite a good relationship. A nice strength to have when writing.

Moving onto the characters - Heather seems very flat. She doesn't have any spirit to her...it's like she's just another character with no real importance. We both know that isn't the case. She is very important to this story - without her it wouldn't have taken place. I wish you would have spent more time on her. For a one shot, it's ok - it's not so prominent, but it's still there.

This is a very light fic - it doesn't go too deeply into the details. I'm not sure whether that's a good or a bad thing. Some more description here and there would have helped us imagine the characters and their conflicts. The detail was lacking here and there, but the rest of the story balanced it out a bit.

Heather looked at her mother in quiet wonder. To have found and kept a love that special was real magic, and she was so happy she’d been brought into a family of such love and contentment.

I love this sentence. It furthers the mother-daughter relationship, and gives us a peek into Ginny's past.

Lovely job!

Author's Response: Thank you for your comments. I never really noticed it before, but now that you point it out, I see that a lot of the things you said were true. Heather does seem kind of flat and I realise now, I could have added more detail. hopfully this will improve with my chaptered story though. Again, thank you for your review. It was nice to see positive comments along with good constructive criticism and I hope it will unable me to improve my writing.

Name: orangemnmz14 (Signed) · Date: 06/11/06 17:00 · For: Chocolate Kisses
Awwww! Good Job, very cute!

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

Name: ValorOrgulloso (Signed) · Date: 06/11/06 13:38 · For: Chocolate Kisses
That was really good! Write other fics! You're talented!

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment. I am intending on writing other fics.I am currently working on a chaptered fic about an O.C who is Lucius Malfoy's niece, she develops a relationship with Regulus Black. I've written five chapters so far, and am just waiting for the first few to be beta'ed, so hopfully it should be up soon.

Name: lovingu4ever (Signed) · Date: 06/11/06 12:27 · For: Chocolate Kisses
way cute but where's harry during all this? i luv the way it ended it was cool i think i'd feel kinda weird about seeing my parents first kiss though you did it very well.

Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment. I hadn't really though about where Harry was during the story, as it isn't really important. yeah, I think I'd freaked out seeing my parents first kiss too.

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