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Reviews For Lily's Love

Name: JeeviS (Signed) · Date: 03/01/08 0:17 · For: James Crazy
hey great story.. i like it.. erm... when will u update becoz i cant wait to read it...

Name: A_Pink_lady (Signed) · Date: 09/06/06 13:03 · For: James Crazy
very good. I liked the last line in particular. Brill

Name: A_Pink_lady (Signed) · Date: 09/06/06 13:02 · For: James Crazy
very good. I liked the last line in particular. Brill

Name: lilyevans91 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/06 9:29 · For: James Crazy
well, this story, in my opinion, needs some work. the sentences are all just about the same length and they don't flow together very well, and they are lacking in description. also, you have your tenses mixed up in a lot of places, switching from "is" to "was" and back again, which makes it kind of confusing to read. one other thing is this: when james, sirius, remus and peter walk into the compartment, you say "at that exact moment james potter and three other boys waltzed right through the door." how did they know right away who james was and not the other boys? and then, when james introduces himself, he says "hi" right after you descrbe peter, so it seems like peter is introducing himself as james. anyway, i don't mean to be really mean or anything, cause i know that no one likes to have their story corrected, but i know i want reviews even from people who don't like my story. so, keep up the good work, i'd suggest a beta reader, but until then, keep on writing!

Author's Response: thanks, i'll try to be more careful

Name: MrGibenz (Signed) · Date: 06/08/06 15:00 · For: James Crazy
Thats a great twist on things. I love that Lily's in love with James instead of vice versa.

Author's Response: Thanks, it just came to mind reading about all those stories that James always likes lily first and i thought i'd do something different

Name: Her_mi_o_ne 16 (Anonymous) · Date: 06/04/06 21:52 · For: James Crazy
lol. I love the subtext. this is very good. I wonder when she'll start hating him.

Author's Response: thanx, it means alot that you reviewed. you'll find out when she starts hating him, but i'm not gonna say when

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