Not completely canon but still a lovely story. Thank you.
I am Literally in rears at this very moment.....this story....knowing that they DID end up losing their lives for their only son. Even though it really didn`t happen this way, I felt in the story that it had......Please...keep it up.
Author's Response: thanks! i wrote this forever ago, so i don't really know how accurate it is to the books...i think i need to go reread them now.
cried so hard, james and lily dying was so tragic, so unfair, *sobs*, that was beautiful..
Author's Response: It was tragic... Thanks for the review!
Sad but sweet. Great story!
Author's Response: thanks for the review! even the little ones like this mean so much!
Noooooooooo!! this is really sad but still really good
Author's Response: thanks! it is sad; i mean, who wants to die? but, that's the way the canon went, so i unfortunately have to follow it. sorry. ~adrienne
I just wanted to drop by and tell you that I liked very much this story. Ironically, I don't too many songfics because the lyrics distract me from the story (I always start trying to imagine the music :o ). However, I was amazed of how fitting the lyrics were for the story. They reflect James' feelings and thoughts so perfectly!
As some have said, I think that one little thing that you could have put in better words was James statement of:
"He’d only find us again. And no, I’m not sure, but…I’ve just got this gut feeling."
I know you wanted to show that they knew they had little time left, instead of suddenly having to face their end. However, I think you could have used a better way to put it (despite the difficulty), because it sounds a little bit strange that if James knows/has the feeling that Voldemort has found them, he would simply "He'd find us anyway." Because in the end, it's better to run than to die (in such case when you family's life is at stake).
But now I'm sounding like a critic when I really enjoyed your story. What I liked the most is how realistic where their dialogues (not minding the one problem I already pointed out), and how they reflect so much the love they shared.
The ending was specially powerful. At first you think that Voldemort has arrived when it's nothing more than baby Harry. But then, he does arrive, but there's such a feeling of peace and communion amongst them that you cannot help but think that they were one.
Well, I just wanted to share all this, and thank you for a wonderful read. Thanks!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much! This was a wonderful review! Yes, that little part of the dialogue bugs me, as I've never really liked it either, but I couldn't find any other way to make it express exactly what I was going to say... Maybe I should point something out - many people have stated that this might not have been how it would have worked out, because when Voldemort came, he was shouting at Lily to run and take Harry. However, I sort of imagined James as the smart type. He knows that they won't really have a chance of winning (which is why he doesn't tell Lily they should leave in this story), so when he tells them that in JKR's version, I always imagined him as panicking. So, there you have it. My logic on the matter. But, yes, again, thank you so much for the review. It makes me happy.
Ohh, that made me cry. I loved it. Wonderful job.
Author's Response: Thanks! Evidently I have a talent for making people cry...*ponders* Well, thanks for the review! Sometimes I just need little ego-boosters like this to keep me going.
Wow. This was beautiful. And sad. I love that song and now it has a new story. Poor Potters!
-The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: *squee* Yay! Thank you for the review! *feels all warm and fuzzy* Yes, I love this song, and every time I hear it, I think of these two. I have a new song fic in the works, but I won't get to work on it until break, so I don't know when I'll get it up.
This is a very good story. You told what could have happened very well
Author's Response: thanks! wow...i've gotten three reviews in the past two days! *squeeness* now i'm happy... -adrienne, empress of lupin and loconess (for explanation, see the insomniac's club thread on the forums)
Hey, it's me!! Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww, that's sad!!!! Thanks for making me nearly cry, that was so sweet!!!!!!!!! Well done though, 100000000000/10, your work is awesome!!! :D
Author's Response: ah, thanks! that makes me soooooooo happy to hear that from you, babe! *huggles all around*
OMG. I almost cried! Wow. That was really good! *tear*
Author's Response: thank u hannah! the review is much appreciated...i almost feel like this story is dead, because i don't know if people read it anymore (how can you tell how many reads a story has?!) and i haven't gotten very many reviews, so this makes me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. thanks! -adrienne
Oh my gosh. I got so choked up at that. ::wipes tears away:: That was so good. I really like how you portrayed J/L in this. Yay! Again, awesome job. -Hannah
Author's Response: thanks! these characters just seemed so natural, and in love, when i wrote this...they fit the song so perfectly, so they came out onto the paper beautifully. thanks for the review, Hannah!
Beautiful! I almost cried... good work!
Author's Response: well, thanks! it's nice to know that people think this is actually worth something, and it's not just a load of crap...but author's are always critical of their own work, aren't they?
aw... i swear i almost cried.. and i never cry at stories :'(... poor lily and james.. so sad.. and poor harry too.... stupid voldemort
Author's Response: i completely agree! voldemort is evil! Grrr.... thanks for the review!
that was terribly wonderful!!!!!
Author's Response: thanks, i didn't think it was as great as you say it was, but hey, i'm glad to be proven wrong!
I love the way you wrote that! It was so sad and heart felt. When Lily said "can i say the same to you?" there were tears in my eyes ... aww... i really loved it!
Author's Response: well, thanks. thank you a bunch. that line actually meant a lot to me. i was surprised to find that it actually moved someone to tears (almost). i thought most people would just read it in passing, but....i guess not. thanks for taking the time to review!
Oh my goodness that was incredible! That has to be one of the best L/J fics i've read. The song adds a nice touch to the fic and it makes the mood seem more in place. The way you described things were excellent, especially this being their last moments. I just think that James would have been a little more eager to leave. According to PoA, he had told Lily to leave. But other than that. It was excellent. I really like it and you wrote it so that the readers could feel what was going on. It was like watching a movie and getting ready to see their last moments - I could feel the tears coming...great job!
Author's Response: well, thanks. that meant a lot to hear. i tried really hard to desribe things, and i still felt i needed more, but hey, i'm glad people like it. yes, and about him telling lily to leave, that all happens after my fic ends. i just wanted to reiterate the fact that they knew they wouldn't live. in my mind, when james told lily to run, i thought he was panicking, because he knew they'd never get away.
Author's Response: thanks.
OmG. So sad.. and so sweet....
Gawd, I'm gonna cry!!!!!
Author's Response: really?
hey, i thought this was cool! you can review yourself! funny. anyway, i thought this could use some work. it seems a little choppy. other than that, good story.
Author's Response: i know. this is a rough sketch, but i wanted to submit it anyway. besides, i'm so modest. (hee hee)