Reviewer: Fauna
Date: 07/27/06 16:24
Chapter: Severus

Again, totally wierd setting, but you make it work. now, about the chapter on the wedding...

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment, I think.

Reviewer: Fauna
Date: 07/27/06 15:45
Chapter: Hermione

For a completely absurb topic, and plot that we know would never happen in a million years due to it's absurdity, you pulled that off rather nicely.

Reviewer: Shdwcat27
Date: 07/26/06 21:46
Chapter: Severus

Thank you so much for the update. I was just thinking of this fic yesterday, and here's an update. Awesome. Thank you for sharing.

Author's Response: I'm glad it worked out so well for you. I'm working on the last chapter - the wedding now. Hopefully it won't take as long to post this time. Thanks for the support.

Reviewer: Accio_Brain
Date: 07/12/06 4:24
Chapter: Hermione

Well, I liked that Severus was nervous when he went to meet her parents. That was cute. Ok, well, I know you said in your author's note that there is some OOC-ness, but I personally felt that it was too much. Hermione was a little too giggly and emotional. And Severus was not really recognizable in parts. While I think that it's possible for him to cry, I don't see him breaking down like that in front of anyone. Plus, I don't think he would endure countless Crucios just to hear Hermione say she loves him. And although Hermione really loved him and wanted him, a person's first time is not going to perfect and wonderful. Also, the proposal was not something Snape would ever do, in my opinion. He would not want to embarass himself like that in front of everyone and the words he used were very sappy. Also, I just don't think it's plausible that Snape could have been fighting in battle against the Death Eaters for years without any of them noticing. Finally, I don't see the Ministry giving Snape a slap on the wrist just because he wrote a letter explaining the Unbreakable Vow. These are the same people that locked up Sirius for 12 years with no trial. That being said, your spelling and grammar is good, with a few minor exceptions. Also, there are parts of the story that could work, but the characters need to be in character for it to be believable.

Author's Response: I thank you for your honesty. I'm sorry that there was so much of the story that you didn't enjoy, but I appreciate your critism. Unfortunately, the second chapter (which is currently in the queue) is simply the same events from Severus' point of view, so I doubt you'll enjoy it either. Regardless, thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: Accio_Brain
Date: 07/12/06 4:23
Chapter: Hermione

Well, I liked that Severus was nervous when he went to meet her parents. That was cute. Ok, well, I know you said in your author's note that there is some OOC-ness, but I personally felt that it was too much. Hermione was a little too giggly and emotional. And Severus was not really recognizable in parts. While I think that it's possible for him to cry, I don't see him breaking down like that in front of anyone. Plus, I don't think he would endure countless Crucios just to hear Hermione say she loves him. And although Hermione really loved him and wanted him, a person's first time is not going to perfect and wonderful. Also, the proposal was not something Snape would ever do, in my opinion. He would not want to embarass himself like that in front of everyone and the words he used were very sappy. Also, I just don't think it's plausible that Snape could have been fighting in battle against the Death Eaters for years without any of them noticing. Finally, I don't see the Ministry giving Snape a slap on the wrist just because he wrote a letter explaining the Unbreakable Vow. These are the same people that locked up Sirius for 12 years with no trial. That being said, your spelling and grammar is good, with a few minor exceptions. Also, there are parts of the story that could work, but the characters need to be in character for it to be believable.

Reviewer: farnsworth
Date: 06/18/06 1:36
Chapter: Hermione

so far this is good! I'd love to read more.

Author's Response: Thanks! I had some problems uploading Chapter 2. I'm hoping to have them resolved soon and the next chapter on its way :)

Reviewer: Serenity R
Date: 06/16/06 23:51
Chapter: Hermione

Wow, thats really nice and well put together. I like it a lot. Its very nice

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like it. This is my first fanfiction so encouragement is most definitely appreciated.

Reviewer: lifluvanime
Date: 06/16/06 9:15
Chapter: Hermione

squee! that's so cute! i especially loved the kissing under the mistletoe! are you gonna write the wedding? i hope you do it soon! update soon please. good luck!
muchlove, amber

Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement. I haven't decided yet whether I'll write the actual wedding scene or not. If I do, it'll probably be an epilogy...we'll see I guess. Chapter 2 will be Severus' trip down memory lane. I'm revising it now.

Reviewer: TangleWood
Date: 06/13/06 17:45
Chapter: Hermione

I LOVE IT!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: surely not i
Date: 06/07/06 20:08
Chapter: Hermione

First off, let me say that I loved your use of the present tense for Hermioneís musings. I always use past tense myself, but you separated them well and it caused the story to flow rather well, in my opinion. Snape was a bit OOC, but you did have that warning in the summary, and he fit the overall tone of the story. It would have been nice to see a bit more of his courtship with Hermione, but that excellent, cute engagement scene made up for it. There were a couple of punctuation errors, nothing major, and certainly nothing to detract from this story. I especially loved your diction and word usage, and the descriptive words used were fantastic. Once more, I would have liked to see a bit more dialogue on Mr. And Mrs. Grangerís part, though it didnít adversely affect anything. Overall, an excellent fic, and Iíll be continuing to read this! XD --Jessica

Reviewer: qwerty83
Date: 06/02/06 18:18
Chapter: Hermione

This was WONDERFUL!!! I absolutely loved it, so touching! Grrr now I've got to wait until my bloomin computer will let me read the next chapter!!

Reviewer: Shdwcat27
Date: 06/02/06 12:23
Chapter: Hermione

Found my way here from your post on WIKTT. Brilliant story. I loved that he got fidgety when going to meet her parents. The only thing I would nitpick about would be some of the tenses. Like I would have put Hermione tried to relax in the bath tub. But that's just personal preference. I'm anal that way. LOL. Anyhoo. A really well though out and executed fic. I'm looking forward to seeing things from Severus' point of view. Cheers!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for responding to my post and for your input. The idea of present versus memories was very difficult for me as you noticed. Second chapter is the same though.

Reviewer: i_luv_snape
Date: 05/28/06 20:39
Chapter: Hermione

i love it it is genius. *claps* for you . write more and other storys. if you ever want a little help you can IM me at .cutiecaq13

Author's Response: Thanks for your enthusiastic words! The second chapter is in the queue now.

Reviewer: Cynthia_Snape
Date: 05/22/06 20:46
Chapter: Hermione

i love this story its sooo good i hope you write another chapter

Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement! This is my first fanfic so I'm very relieved to hear that you like it. The second chapter has been sent to my beta, so as soon as I receive it back from her, I'll submit it here. Thanks again!

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