This was a fantastic idea. I love analysing characters and simetimes you don't get the chance when an author doesn't focus on them too much. We're told by JKR that Rita has the personality of a quick quotes quill but not why. It's amazing when you think about not who someone is now but who they were and how they changed and I hope to read more pieces like this.
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I love delving into the characters that JKR only barely introduces to us - luckily, there are SO MANY characters like that!! :D Maybe I'll write some more like that in the future... Thanks for reviewing, though!! <3
That was rather intriguing to read. I'm surprised at how well you characterize Rita Skeeter as a young woman. I'm slightly alarmed that she was so willing to throw her 'morals' out the window when the opportunity to write rubbish came to her feet.
But then again, this is Skeeter, right? It was fascinating reading how she was...'corrupted' by the lies that Lockhart created for himself as well.
It's almost instantaneous the decision
for her to bury the truth, and writer a lie in lieu. You can literally see Rita Skeeter becoming the manipulative writer she became later. You also did a good job with Lockhart and I can almost say confidently that you made a good job of writing the moment at which the 'fame' went to his head.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed this story - I wrote it so long ago, I can barely remember it anymore. :P I do love both Rita and Lockhart, and it's good to know I've done them justice. :D <3
all i could say is wow. the story is so cute in a way and i love the ending. sad, yet heart moving. good job!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks for taking the time to let me know! :D
I really like Alana's reaction to Rita's good fortune. That deliciously spiteful nature just leaks onto the page and creates a clever, interesting character.
One itty-bitty bit of con. crit.: “You wouldn’t mind to, er… to sign this for me?”
That sentence was rather confusing, "You wouldn't mind to sign this for me?" I don't know... I feel it might be better rewritten in this manner,
"You wouldn't mind, er ... signing this for me?
It just flows better, that's all.
Really nice chapter. Can't wait to read more, :)
Author's Response: Thanks, again, for the review and the criticism! I agree - that sentence does sound confusing. I hadn't thought about it before! Thanks for reading my story so carefully. That really means a lot to me! <3
Interesting. Quite a clever look at Rita's background. I especially loved the picture of her rushing through the crowded streets of London; she was so naive, so innocent...
I have never liked Gilderoy Lockhart and he keeps his odious manner in this story very well. Marvelous job!
I don't think I found any mistakes (maybe a touch of grammar here and there) but nothing that I can recall at the moment. I'm miserably tired, hee! :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked this chapter. And isn't Gilderoy just so fun to hate? :D
I love this story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It really means a lot to me that you enjoyed this fic!
Thanks for reviewing! :D
I really like your idea of Rita and Lockhart working together so they both can become celebritieds, although I'm not quite sure this is something which suits the young Rita as you portray her. Sure, she's ambitious, but she also seems to be very naive and her heart is in the right place. And then playing Gilderoy Lockhart's little game seems a bit strange. But maybe she likes his good looks a bit too much? For the rest, it's well written and a good ýet still canon plot! Well done! I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm really glad that you liked the story! And that you picked up that Rita wasn't quite "herself" as we know her - the point of the story is really how Rita's experience with Gilderoy changes her. I hope you enjoy the next chapter! Let me know how you like it! :)