Wonderful story. Fantastically written.
I LOVE this story! I put it on my favorites!
I find this entire thing somewhat enticing and rather befuddling. For some reason it's like your being overly obtuse for my level of brain functionality.
I've read your story I few times, and I think it's absolutely brilliant. I've been looking for some stories with Remus/Lily bits in them, and yours was a wonderful read! Lovely writing style and great character development. I had to reread the last chapter, however, before I completely understood how much James knew about the situation, so perhaps that could be a bit clearer. Overall, one of my favorite stories to date, and I've read a good many. It's on my favs list!
I really like the idea of a Remus/Lily romance. People have objected to seeing references to it in the movie, but I ask, Why? After all, they had been Prefects together and Lily had been portrayed as a passionate person. Why shouldn't something happen between them? I would expect it.
Some quibbles: Lily saw them and only her. This line makes it seem like she only saw them and herself. Do you mean that only she saw them? In his opinion, as affectionate as they were and as brotherly, I quibble with the way this sentence is phrased. It seems the "and as brotherly" part should go where "as they were" is. Much to their remorse, nothing worked. I don't think remorse is the right word here. Do they feel guilty about it? Or parhaps they feel dismay or bewilderment.“You will?! Oh, thank you, Remus! Thank you! I don’t know how I’ll ever repay you!” This seems...sort of girly for James to say. I almost picture him jumping up and down in Remus's arms, smothering him with kisses... Tee hee. Not quite the image I think you want.
...the placement of Head boy, a position that rightfully belonged to Remus.Kudos to you for showing that Remus wasn't exactly thrilled with losing the Head Boy position. Why shouldn't he be upset about that? Each time he realized this, he felt that much worse because he knew Lily deserved better, not some prankster turned prince. Then he remembered that she didn’t deserve a werewolf either. Aw... But he's a good werewolf. They could make it work, couldn't they? But I agree with Remus about James, really. Lily doesn't need a prankster turned prince. Sirius sniffed, stretched back in his chair and yawned, his tongue lolling about just like a dog. Tee hee. I always like seeing the references to Sirius's dog-like personality. “— He’s too persuasive! What? Oh.” Foreshadowing?
Remus instantly knew a brotherly conversation was about to commence that he would not be a part of. Once again, aw... I think it's sad that Remus feels this kind of distance, especially when his future without any of his friends is near. Rather sad.This chapter, overall, is pretty good. You've done a really good job developing Remus's character. Writing him as being a bit resentful of his Head Boy position being taken away, acknowledging that he isn't as close to James and Sirius are good ways to bring Remus's personality across. He feels much more real here than in other fics. Good job.
This is the best written story I have read in a long time. So much emotion it makes actually feel the pain that Remus feels and I believe that this talent that you posses does not belong to everyone. You have something other writer's don't, even famous ones, have and that is bringing everything that the character feels into yourself and if the character feels pain you feel the pain, it the character feels happiness you feel the happiness and I hope that if one day you write your own story so to feel the same way like I did about this story. Believe me you have talent and I hope you keep writting. This is a wonderful story and I hope you make more. The best of wishes to you.
This is such a lovely and beautiful written chapter. You are a very talented writer, you really are. It is so sad that this story is over, but it was definitely the best ending ever. It was so beautiful and the epilogue (it was an epilogue, right?) fitted very well to the end and...yes, I don't know what to say. It was just such an amazing and wonderful story, definitely one of the very best stories written in here.. :-)
Its beautifully written, and I'm so glad that you were finally able to finish it! I know you've bene working on this for a while! Bravo! I'll also be recomending this to anyone looking for a good mauraders fic! Well done my dear!
Stunning... I've read other Lupin/Lily stories, well, ok, only one, but this one is WAYWAYWAY better!
"Lose it and you lose everything. Keep it and the world is yours." Wow, that's so beautiful! This is a wonderful final chapter, instead of just ending it really brings the story to a close. Many tearful bravos from me, and I'll be putting in a good word for this story whenever I can. ^^;
Okay dear, you know I love your work but this has to be the icing on the cake. I absolutely loved this story, and I've read it more than twice. Keep up the good work, and if you ever need some ideas you know where I am! :-)
Amarisa-- thank you for writing this story. ^^; I'm reviewing now because I didn't last time, and I can't read a fic twice and love it this much without dropping a note to thank the author. I first read your story back when there were only one or two chapters, and I forgot to come back and check for updates, but tonight I stumbled upon it a second time, and, well, I read all six chapters straight through-- it's just that good! I love your portrayal of Remus, and the descriptive style is very powerful: it made me tear up more than once, and I read most of it with my heart in my throat. Keep up the good work and please update soon! I can't wait to see what happens next. ^^;
Author's Response: You read it twice??? ...wow.... Ok then. Thank you!! ^-^ I am trying desperately to think of a way to write chapter 7 and have it be up to par with the other chapters. With the way things are going, it'll be the last chapter and that means that everything has to end with a bang. Either that or leave the reader feeling satisfied, but I'm sure all of you already knew that. I have but one request: to all of you who read it, would you please put in the good word for me on the forums? If you don't know where it is, look around a bit on this site and you'll find the link for it. Please? Other people said how not enough people read it, and I think that'll help. Anyway, thank you so much for all your kind words. They really help out when I'm in a bind. You all are so sweet.
Such a sweet story, I love Remus, the poor little guy.
It was a very fascinating chapter, a bit confusing sometimes in the "fighting scenes", but then again, fights are usualy confusing themselves, so.... Very sweet ending too, update soon:-)
Remus is so sweet...I love this story.
Oh my God. Just...oh my...Like someone else said, this story should have WAY more than 14 reviews and should be a Featured story. It just...plucks the heartstrings, if you will. This is such a wrenching pain for Remus to have to go through, but he's doing it for his friend. That sums up Remus Lupin. I...wow, I'm almost completely speechless. Well, here's a ten for you, and if I could give more, you would have it. Keep writing, please! (Oh, and that bit about the writer's block thing is sad. Writer's block = evil, doesn't it?)
I think this is just so brilliant, I just read through the whole story and found myself stating "Aww..." every few sentances, this is possibly the most touching story I have ever read. I found myself saying no also, I hate it when Remus considers him not good enough for anyone. I love so much Remus right now, I'll be his girlfriend, he is soo sweet, giving up his one true love for James....or is he? This truely is beautiful, and in someway, I felt Remus's pain right along with him. Please keep writing, this is a most wonderful story. I think this is a great story.
Oh my God, I'm totally speechless, it was so beautiful.... The way you describe everything, the emotions, both James' and Remus', are so amazing and I really love it. I simply cannot wait for more of this wonderful story...Please update soon:-)
Not enough people read this story. EXCELLENT! Goodness...poor Remus...JUST TEAR HIS HEART OUT, JAMES, OKAY? I absolutely love it.
Author's Response: "Not enough people read this story." There are times when I seriously love the people who actually read my work. You are all so sweet. And LupinLover, there is a twist coming that you don't seem to realize. Unless you did and you just didn't touch on it, I'm not sure which. Did anyone catch it? And yes, much much strength. Thanks to you both for commenting so quickly, I greatly appreciated and loved it. ~.-
Oh, I'm about to cry! Poor Remus...alone, forgotten, and unloved...I love him, even if Lily doesn't! This is a great story, and it must have taken a lot of strength on Remus's and James part to do this. Poor Remus...I feel this is a very sad story, and yet a wonderful one. Please do keep writing, I want to hear of Remus's reaction, the pitiful guy. This story definately gets a 10, you made me feel the suspense, unhappines and hope, right along with Remus, it takes a good author to do that.