Reviewer: FaunaCaritas
Date: 12/25/06 19:21
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

Not as good as some of your other poems, but I still liked it. My main criticism is that it doesn't flow very well. Maybe it was your intent to have it a bit jerky-- none of us are eloquent when we are in the depths of misery. Is that what you were going for?

Keep writing. I like your work.

Pax.

Author's Response: Yes, the poem is sort of jerky, but that was what I was going for. I think her thought processes would not have been organized and eloquent in this time of distress, so this is how the poem can out. thanks for the review!

Reviewer: TOMROHT
Date: 07/12/06 15:23
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

Nice job! I've never been all that good at poetry...

TOMROHT

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: T o n k s
Date: 05/21/06 14:41
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

I mean..*cough cough*
Very nice. *cough*

Author's Response: Thanks. You might want to go to the doctor and get that cold checked out.

Reviewer: T o n k s
Date: 05/21/06 14:38
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

Errr....intresting. *gives thumbs up and flashes a grin*

Author's Response: Errr... thanks! *flashes winning smile*

Reviewer: Courtney Black
Date: 05/17/06 19:38
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

Aw! That's soooo sweet!

Author's Response: Thanks.

Reviewer: HStarRunner23
Date: 05/17/06 16:14
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

That's really sad and touching. Nicely done and I loved it! Good job and keep putting up poems and stories! Nice job! ~HStarRunner23

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback.

Reviewer: hpgirlbizarre
Date: 05/17/06 14:16
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

how adorable u rok! that is lyk s000000o cute!

Author's Response: Thanx for the great review!

Reviewer: AstroFire
Date: 05/17/06 10:09
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

Oops. Sorry for leaving the code open. closing now.

Author's Response: ok.

Reviewer: AstroFire
Date: 05/17/06 10:08
Chapter: The Unmendable Broken Heart

Short and yet very deep! I liked it very much, more because It has normal vocabulary and it is easy to read. My part would be: "The pain will never end. The tears will always come.">i> Very good job :D

Author's Response: Thank you!

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