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Name: hokiesis (Signed) · Date: 04/14/07 1:34 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
You had me up all night reading this story! It is very well written, and I love how original it is. I also like how the characters are all very distinct and how everyone stays in character. I can't wait to read more!

Name: Freaque (Signed) · Date: 04/03/07 3:16 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
This is an excellent story! You write so well and it is so easy to be empathetic towards your characters. Keep up the great work!

Name: MorganRay (Signed) · Date: 03/31/07 23:46 · For: Chapter Two: A contract of ashes and blood
I really liked how you changed the POV to James in this chapter. Iíve seen Marieís POV, and now, when you change the perspective to James, it was interesting and it added to the narrative. I also like the tenseness in this story and how you use the Marie-Antoinette name to build an entire story. Also, I feel Marieís character is very well done, and she seems like an average girl who was born to the wrong people at the wrong time, which strengthens her connection to the Queen. I thought that the attitudes of the new Ministry officials also helped me identify with the desperation and injustice that both Marie and James are feeling.

I liked the connection you made between Sirius and Marie. In that small moment, you made Sirius totally in character, and I believed him entirely to be the younger, pre-Azkaban Sirius that weíve heard about in the series. It was really disheartening to have Marie and James walk into the Ministerís office. It was also really suspenseful how you had Marie finally realize that James was who she would marry, but he didnít know that she would be his wife.

Name: Dumbledore Prince (Signed) · Date: 03/30/07 8:15 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
Wow! Even though it was a long gap between two chapters, this one is amazing! For a non-native speaker of English, your usage is excellent. I particularly enjoyed the exquisite descriptions, and I shall quote the most outstanding one in this chapter:

Someone had lit the torches of the north corridor; the usually bare walls were alive with dancing shadows, cast there by the flickering flames that attempted, without much success, to give some cheerfulness to the white and bare loneliness of the corridor. I was soon in sight of the double door that led to the small office, and upon catching a high-pitched voice filtering through this door, I slowed down and paused to listen.

The interactions between Marie and James are very well written. Even though the fog of suspicion and enmity is still thick between them, it's good to know that they're behaving civilly towards each other - or rather, as polite as the circumstances allow.

I like the allusions you've made to the chilling contrast between Gryffindor and Slytherin's house colours. It's pretty obvious why Voldemort hates the red and gold combination ...

And there's a lot to be said about Pomy and Lali. They are complete polar opposites, judging from Pomy's hostile and uncaring nature towards Marie and Lali's unswerving obedience. I'm sure we'll get to see different sides of their personalities; they're showing signs of morphing into well-developed characters like Marie herself. Well, I'm hoping that Lali's plan against Pomy succeeds, whatever it is. I'm eagerly looking forward to the next installment, no matter when it gets into the queue. Good luck!

- Mini.

Name: i love prongs (Signed) · Date: 03/28/07 11:09 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
is lily gonna come back? u no 2 stir things up a bit

Author's Response: Okay, I'm getting a little tired of this.

I write my stories and answer my reviews in correct English, and I would be extremely happy if you could return the favour. Netspeak is not only tiring, it's also hard to understand for a non-native English speaker.

Thank you. Oh, and you'll hear more about Lily soon.

Name: Reader4ever (Signed) · Date: 03/26/07 14:05 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
Great chapter!!
Awesome :)
I love the James/Marie-Antoinette conversations & Lali.
I CAN'T wait for the next chapter, but i understand that school work must (unfortuently) come first :(
Update a.s.a.p.!

Author's Response: Yes, you're right about school... Be assured I won't abandon the story though. Thanks for the review.

Name: NevilleIsMyHomeboy (Signed) · Date: 03/25/07 20:58 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
hey, we need something to wait for while waiting for DH...

Author's Response: The comparison is flattering :). Thanks, and I hope next chapter will be worth the wait.

Name: ligiligirl (Signed) · Date: 03/24/07 16:16 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
You're back! Whoot! I've been AWOL for a while too, a TON of stuff, including taking the ACTs. (An American college admissions test.) All of my study did pay off, tho. I scored in the 99th percentile on most categories! Still willing to beta?

Author's Response: Err... Congrats I guess. I can't beta anything at the moment since I already have trouble updating my own stories, but contact me again in June.

Name: FuNnYcIdE (Signed) · Date: 03/24/07 13:26 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
Joyous! I was muchos excited as soon as I saw this chapter was posted! It is glorious!!!

Keep On Writing;)

Author's Response: Thanks, and I will!

Name: Linda_Carrig (Signed) · Date: 03/24/07 10:58 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
This chapter is fabulous with the two elves... Can hardly wait for the next one. Poor girl not having anything to eat! I hope you write a fine elf battle for pay back.

Name: Linda_Carrig (Signed) · Date: 03/24/07 10:54 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
This chapter is fabulous with the two elves... Can hardly wait for the next one. Poor girl not having anything to eat! I hope you write a fine elf battle for pay back.

Author's Response: Don't worry, payback is on its way :). Thanks for the review.

Name: izzyblue24 (Signed) · Date: 03/24/07 10:06 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
YAY! Great chapter! Lali is so cool I thinnk she may be my favorite charcter! THANK YOU for updating!!!!


Author's Response: Haha! Lali is as narrow-minded as Pomy in a way, but I like both house-elves too. You're welcome, I liked writing this chapter.

Name: Valentinia (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 18:48 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
Well the wait was long... but, as you said, our patience was definitely rewarded! :D This was a long, great chapter! I really enjoyed seeing the interactions between her and James, even though they were far from pleasant. Plus, I love Lali, and Marie's evil plan! :D This story is so original, I've never read anything remotely similar, and I love it! :D I hope the next update comes a little sooner than this one though, what do you say? :)

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad to know it was worth the wait. However, I'm in medicine and really, it's a wonder I can update at all. Thanks for being patient with me.

Name: Hansolohpfrk (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 18:26 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
OMG! Yay! This is so good!


Author's Response: OMG thanks!

Name: primagirl89 (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 18:21 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
This has to be one of the best fanfics I have read. I love her spirit.

Author's Response: Wow, that's... great.

Name: lily rose (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 17:38 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
As usual the standard of writing was amazing. Your skill is just so impressive and you seem to be a natural writer. I avidly await your next chapter!

Lily Rose x

Author's Response: Thanks a lot!

Name: Wicked Wench (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 16:58 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
It was worth the wait. I cannot wait to read more. I really liked the house elf drama at the end.

Author's Response: Thank you, I'm very happy to hear it.

Name: electronicquillster (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 14:04 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
This is such a great story, and I was so surprised to see you update! Such a fabulous thing to wake up to. A new chapter from a story I new had to be hiatus-ing until you could spare some time.

This chapter showed us so much about Marie. I especially enjoy the last section. Yay for Lali and Marie!

I would like to see more Sirius (and James, except that he's being a git, and....I guess that's understandable) really soon. I'm intrigued just as to how he will fit into Marie's life. Is it bad that I'm definitely rooting for Sirius and Marie to fall in love?

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I somehow found the time to update, although it wasn't without a fight ;). I do try to develop Marie-Antoinette's character through the chapter, as well as give a glimpse of James'. As for Lali, she's a treat to write.

Sirius will show up again in a couple of chapters; James will be present, of course, but his personality won't be very visible so... I should stop talking.

Sirius and Marie-Antoinette? *cackles evilly* That is part of my machinations as an author...

Name: dreamer478 (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 13:52 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
yay! i'm glad you found time to update. i really liked the conversation between marie-antoinette and james. it was interesting and i liked it. i can't wait for the next chapter and i would like to maybe read about what happened to lily and harry. i hope you have time to update again!

Author's Response: Thanks, and I'm happy you mentioned the conversation between Marie-Antoinette and James. It *was* interesting, wasn't it?... I liked writing it, although it wasn't the easiest part of the chapter. You should hear about Lily in the next chapter, when I find the time to write it.

Name: Mrs ginnypotter108 (Signed) · Date: 03/23/07 13:16 · For: Chapter Five: Two Elves
Wow!! i love the idea of making a modern day Marie Antoinette!! I love this story!!!!!

Author's Response: It's not *quite* about making a modern Marie-Antoinette, but there are parallelisms :). Thanks for the review.

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