Reviewer: Octopus
Date: 06/29/06 3:45
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

That is good.I always wondered why the hat did not put Hermione in Ravenclaw. I never thought about her being descended from a Gryffendor.

Reviewer: Mistletoe
Date: 06/24/06 18:05
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

This is good, a little bit odd to have Harry and Hermione related, howere distantly. But whatever, artistic license. I like fics that are behind the scenes, and I have never seen one like this before! Props for originality. I like hoe the Hat gave reasons for her to be in Gryffindor, very good idea. I always wondered why Hermione wasn't put into Ravenclaw originally. Good writing, keep it up!

Reviewer: Khrys
Date: 06/19/06 12:35
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

What a great idea! I have never seen anything like this. I loved it. I'm going to pop over and check out your other stuff!

Reviewer: KenTuck
Date: 06/09/06 17:51
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

I liked this a lot. I am actually very interested in stuff that happened from a different point of view. It totally changes around the whole scene, well done

One thing I found odd was that she was not surprised at anything or fascinated. There is a difference between reading about it in a book and seeing the real thing.

When she immediately assumes Hagrid is half-giant, I don't think she would think it through that much. Yes, she is bright but it is her first day in the wizarding world so I think she would just assume that he was a giant and leave it at that.

"Hermione was eager to see the castle, having read about it in all the books she had brought from Diagon Alley" This works but it might sound better to say 'bought' from Diagon alley.

"Then she was shuffled through the door and in front of the whole school. She stopped for a second and looked up at the enchanted ceiling. It was a clear night out, and you could see every star imaginable. The sky actually looked larger on the ceiling than it did outside. She noticed a shooting star streak through the sky. She decided to make a wish silently. I wish to be Sorted into a good house, she thought.

“It’s bewitched to look like the sky outside. I read it in Hogwarts: A History,” she said absently to no one in particular, even though the red-haired boy looked at her like she was mental." Within these two paragraphs, you used 'mental' twice. Maybe change one of them to a synonym.

When she talks about not transfiguring large objects until the sixth year, wouldn't she just say later on? She wouldn't know the exact syllabus of all her years yet.

"Then McGonagall moved out of her line of vision, then Hermione saw it" Try 'When' instead of the first 'Then' and just delete the second then. There are too many thens in that whole paragraph.

"Then the hat started to jerk, and a rip formed into the in brim." What is an 'in' brim? Also I think you should call the sorting hat an it rather than a he.

During the song, since that is the same as canon, why don't you try to add Hermione's thought inbetween lines. It would add interest to all of us who have read these lines over and over again.

"Finally, Seamus Finnigan was Sorted into Gryffindor" Sorted does not need to be capitalized.

The part about the Band-Aid I loved. It was very Hermione-ish.

"[You] never backed down or cower into the corner.” That might sound better as 'cowered before her' or something.

"Your great-great-great-great-great-great-great grandmother was in Gryffindor. " It should be 'was'.

"They had Muggle children, that is why you aren't a pureblood" This makes it sound like she is half-blood or something. She is not even close. Maybe you could say 'that is why your line did not know of its magical powers (or vestiges)'

Even though I had all these comments, over all I really did like it and I think you did a great job with Hermione's character.

Reviewer: bookworm2011
Date: 05/25/06 21:18
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

As awesome as your other story! Write more stories, it would make me soooo happy(puppy dog eyes).

Reviewer: Malika Potter
Date: 05/23/06 15:21
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

This is an excellent story! I love how Hermione is related to Harry. Keep writing!

-Malika Potter

Reviewer: T o n k s
Date: 05/22/06 19:58
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

Creepy how you put that her great [x7] grandmother was related to Harry. That's really creepy, but I still loved it sooo much.
Write more, I'll be back when you have written more great storys. *winks*

Reviewer: T o n k s
Date: 05/22/06 19:57
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

Creepy how you put that her great [x7] grandmother was related to Harry. That's really creepy, but I still loved it sooo much.
Write more, I'll be back when you have written more great storys. *winks*

Reviewer: sweeterthanhunny
Date: 05/22/06 6:33
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

HARRY AND HERMIONE, RELATED? Im nnot angry, just surprised(and delighted) at the twist. Nice story. Good read.

Reviewer: connieewing
Date: 05/18/06 12:45
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

wow

Reviewer: nikster
Date: 05/18/06 11:28
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

Really good one shot!! It would be great if you continued it on it would be interesting to see if Harry ever found out the truth!

Reviewer: JC_Cainstone
Date: 05/18/06 11:16
Chapter: Sorting Hat's Decision

Yay! I'm the first one to review!! Lol. That was very interesting seeing the arrival at Hogwarts from Hermione's point of view, and having ancestors in Gryffindor explains a lot and was also very original! I take my hat off to you!

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