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Name: Monster Book of Monsters (Signed) · Date: 05/16/06 21:11 · For: Chapter 3: Routine
Wow... best bit yet! It was a freakin' LOOOONG chapter but really, very well written. And a cliff-hanger to boot. ROCK ON, BROTHA. *two thumbs up*

Author's Response: Okay, you haven't said anything negative, who are you and what did you do with MBoM? the *two thumbs up* bit was a little much, I can't help but think of you lickin' your chops behind those thumbs.

Name: Hope_543 (Signed) · Date: 05/16/06 3:43 · For: Chapter 5: Vows
Yep. You're best yet! WHY hasn't the 2nd part of chapter 5 been validated yet?? WHY??!!! cant cope, here. Loved all the imagery and the subtlelty, it's sooooo good!

Author's Response: Thank you so much again. I really love it when one of my stories gets someone to go and read them all, and I can't thank you enough for that. The imagery in this chapter regarding the wedding, well the wedding itself, all of it, was probably the first thing I wrote in my head regarding fanfiction stuff. Long before I even considered actually writing fanfiction, I think I started planning out this wedding, complete with the designs that lifted off of the robes and everything. I remember also wanting to describe Hermione as being "out of a storybook". I think the only big problem I really had was color. The weasley's having red hair makes colors difficult because so many colors clash easily with their hair. But anyway, I really appreciate you loving the imagery and stuff. Chapter 6 is in queue, so hopefully it won't be to much longer until it's posted. Thanks, and I hope to see you again not only for the last chapter, but also for Everybody Does It, which is already up and available.

Name: weasleys_and_potters (Signed) · Date: 05/15/06 9:32 · For: Chapter 5: Vows
i love it. i love so so so much...i think this is a brilliant epilogue so far, and i can't wait to read the next and last chapter...your a wonderful writer, keep it up!! - zoe

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I truly appreciate it. I'm going to upload the last chapter right now! Now, keep in mind, this is only the first part to what I expect will be a three part series. It's also the smallest for as far as I can figure. Thanks again.

Name: KatharineK (Signed) · Date: 05/14/06 20:01 · For: Chapter 3: Routine
I love your story. This chapter made me cry. You are a wonderful writer!

Author's Response: thank you so much, I hope you'll check back for the last chapter, and I would love for you to check out my other stories as well.

Name: ahattab33 (Signed) · Date: 05/14/06 14:54 · For: Chapter 5: Vows
I almost cried....you're very good and I love your stories!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I really appreciate it! Don't forget though, there is still one last chapter to go before we're done here! Hope to see you for chapter 6: Home

Name: mrrlyn (Signed) · Date: 05/14/06 14:49 · For: Chapter 5: Vows
I want more!

Author's Response: AYE AYE! Well, okay, yes, there will be more... One more chapter, and I'll either put it in queue tonight or tomorrow, but sheesh. I've never had a site move this fast. I mean they've been turning around a couple of chapters in a matter of HOURS! So, that's pretty fast. This is the only time I can think of in which I was having a hard time keeping up with the moderator. So yeah, at the rate things are going, i would hope that the latest chapter 6 is up will be Tuesday. Then we're done, and I have to really focus on Part II, which i can already tell will be like pulling teeth (much like writing this one was). So, I'm really glad you're that into it, and I hope to get the last chapter to you as soon as I can.

Name: Jane Bilus (Signed) · Date: 05/14/06 11:52 · For: Chapter 5: Vows
wow! you have got to be the quickest updater in the world. just one thing though - i don't know what incident you mean when Hermione's talking about the damsel in distress part. totally brillinat, can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Well, the story's been written for about a month now, so all it is is a matter of getting it through the queue, and the moderator has been kicking some serious butt in that regard. So really, the moderator deserves all the credit there. As for the incident, the frst damsel in distress reference was the troll incident in book one, and the second incident was when she was petrified in CoS. Thank you so much for sticking around, I really appreciate it, and I wouldn't expect it to take too much longer before the next chapter is up and ready for you.

Name: Hamm On Wry (Signed) · Date: 05/14/06 9:22 · For: Chapter 5: Vows
This is the best one yet! I found myself getting wet eyed during the vows...

Author's Response: Thanks a lot. The last chapter is finished, I'm just not sure when I want to update yet. Those vows... you have no idea how hard it was to write them. I had totally different vows written in the beginning, and they didn't feel right. To be honest, I nearly wrote an entire different story just to get enough into character with Ron and Hermione to write them. The ones that are here, though, I think I got right. I mean, Hermione overdoes it (for those who got that impression, that's exactly what I was going for... touching, but a little overdone), and Ron, yeah, I'm really happy with how his went. So I'm glad you enjoyed it, I'm not sure when the next chapter will be up, but I don't expect it'll be too terribly long from now. Thanks for the review.

Name: Jane Bilus (Signed) · Date: 05/14/06 6:07 · For: Chapter 4: Conversations With Dead People
wow totally briliant i love it update asap!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I most definitely will. I wanted to especially thank you for reading this one every step of the way, you have no idea how much that means to me. I'll get the next chapter up as soon as I can!

Name: mrrlyn (Signed) · Date: 05/14/06 3:35 · For: Chapter 4: Conversations With Dead People
awesome story.... i cant wait for the next chpt

Author's Response: WOW! I wake up and there are all kinds of new reviews to answer, that's so awesome. I'm really happy that you are enjoying the story thus far. There are only two more chapters to go! I'll put the remaining ones up very soon, so please keep your eyes peeled. Now for those who love angst, there's still plenty left, but I think the final two chapters aren't nearly as dark as the first four... Still, I hope you enjoy them. Thanks for the review.

Name: Jane Bilus (Signed) · Date: 05/13/06 15:42 · For: Chapter 3: Routine
wow i can't wait to find out more. please send in the next chapter as fast as you did all of the others.

Author's Response: It's in queue! Thanks for your continued reviews!

Author's Response: Done... Chapter 4 is up.

Name: Jane Bilus (Signed) · Date: 05/13/06 15:42 · For: Chapter 3: Routine
wow i can't wait to find out more. please send in the next chapter as fast as you did all of the tohers.

Name: Monster Book of Monsters (Signed) · Date: 05/12/06 21:38 · For: Chapter 2: Boxes
Dude there's a typo in there. "Cursing himself the, only thing..." And I had a couple of other things. You're the master of description, but I notice every once in awhile you'll leap from one "scene" to anohter with no explanation. It's basically like... you're holding the reader's hand and we're walking along just fine, and then BAM - you're across the room. For example, "Well, I uh... I did have something to do early tomorrow, but if I can... I'll see if I can make it, sir. Thanks."

When Harry met back up with Ernie, Ernie asked him, "So, did old man Jacobs lay into ya?" I was like, "what the?" Seemed like there should have been a ** there or some sort of segway. You did it again when you said ...Harry nodded and thanked Ernie for the lift before making his way back up to his flat.

Opening his icebox, he frowned at the emptiness of it. ...Again I did a doubletake. Okay, enough with the griping. Other than all of that (chuckles) it's a really good begining to a really interesting story concept. I felt myself wondering WHAT THE HECK IS GOING ON HERE? And that's a good thing. :)

Author's Response: I find it incredibly ironic that you are my biggest critic! heh. But you're also becoming my most faithful reviewer,so I ain't hatin' on you. As for the narrative breaks, well, I don't know, I usually only use narrative breaks when I'm significantly changing the scene. Like with Ernie, that was like a minute later, and really all I was skipping was having Harry walk down the steps. But I guess I'll rethink that. As for the typo, damn! I hate that, it really annoys me when I miss a typo (note this chapter was written technically before i started using hpmaniac666 as a beta, and of the three betas I use, she's the pickiest on grammar). But yeah, that really annoys me. Only, in chapter 1, I found something, and went to go fix it, and for some reason it put in like five or six return breaks in between each paragraph and it took me twenty minutes to remove them all because it formats everything in tags when you edit. So I'm really leery about fixing it. Ah, anyway, I'm glad I got you intrigued despite my obvious shortcomings. I think the next chapter is where I really crank things up a bit, so hopefully you'll like that (and someone other than you will leave a review!)

Name: Jane Bilus (Signed) · Date: 05/12/06 13:04 · For: Chapter 1: Run
ooh wow i had forgotten some of the parts of One Good Day but then when i read them in here i was thinking "oh yeah!" and i didn't have a clue what the small lump was until it actually said it was a ring. then i remembered. one more thing - is One Good Day a sequel to Riight Here because on the summary to this it says sequel to right here and Obne Good Day.

Author's Response: Well, I'm really glad you left the review, and I truly hope you're enjoying it so far. I got chapter 2 in queue, so hopefully it won't be too long. The mod for this category has been rocking, so let's all keep our fingers crossed. Here's the deal about Right Here. All my stories take place in the same unvierse. So Right Here is the first one, then One Good Day, then Epilogues parts I, II, and III (I only have one chapter of part II done so far), and finally Everybody Does It. They all feed off of each other. Is Right Here technically in the prequel/sequel deal? Sort of. It is, but I don't really reference it too much. Instead, that's just what I used to put Ron and Hermione together. I do have Ron reference it a little bit in the end of One Good Day, and there is some VERY subtle imagery that goes back to Right Here in the last chapter of this story, but for the most part it's kind of stand alone. Now, two more things. The stories I listed above are not the only stories to take place in this universe I "created." I do have a series of eight novels I would like to write, but I don't know if I'm going to do it or not yet. There are a lot of factors there, so we'll just have to see. The final thing i want to do is plug my live journal. One fo these days I'll put it in my bio but for now, I'm just asking people to check out grimmrook.livejournal.com . Right now I only have one reader, and I love her to death, but it's a little lonely over there. Again, thanks for the review and I really hope you'll come back for the rest of the story (there are a total of six chapters in this one). Thanks.

Name: Jane Bilus (Signed) · Date: 05/12/06 13:04 · For: Chapter 1: Run
ooh wow i had forgotten some of the parts of One Good Day but then when i read them in here i was thinking "oh yeah!" and i didn't have a clue what the small lump was until it actually said it was a ring. then i remembered. one more thing - is One Good Day a sequel to Riight Here because on the summary to this it says sequel to right here and Obne Good Day.

Name: Hamm On Wry (Signed) · Date: 05/11/06 23:36 · For: Chapter 1: Run
Ooooh! This one looks like it is going to be a winnert right out of the box. Is the voice Harry's concience or something darker? Can't wait for chapter 2!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you're intrigued. I think that's an answer I can give you. The voice is definitely Harry... And don't worry, you shouldn't have long to wait for chapter 2... The whole story is written, it's just a matter of pushing it through the queue, and if the rest of the chapters go as fast as this one, the whole thing should be done by the middle of next week... There are six chapters in toto. Thanks for the review.

Author's Response: Oh, and while you're waiting for chapter 2, you may wanna give my other story, Everybody Does It a look. I really appreciate you reading Right Here and One Good Day.

Name: Monster Book of Monsters (Signed) · Date: 05/11/06 22:57 · For: Chapter 1: Run
"their clasped hands were sandwiched tightly between their heaving chests. Together their hands closed around the small lump through Hermione's shirt, and the look they shared was more intense than any kiss they had snuck in during the past year." ........UM DUDE... Okay, I have to admit, my mind went STRAIGHT in the gutter here. I found myself wondering if Hermione had lost one of her breasts in the war. Seriously. And Harry... I dunno. I kept thinking of Gollum. But you are the Master of description, I'll give you that. I read both of the other stories and I just forgot about the ring I guess. :(

Author's Response: How can your mind GO to the gutter when it never leaves? Perv. Wow, I'm the master of something, that's awesome, and how in the hell did you get Gollum from Harry?... Well, Okay, i can see it now... Just reread what you have, and thanks a lot, I will never be able to think about that scene without imagining Hermione having a floating nipple ever again! God you suck... Just kidding, thanks for the review!

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