Wow! This is a beautiful poem. I think you really captured Dumbledore's inner struggle and his emotions. I especially love the last stanze. That is simply wonderful! You are an amazing writer!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for all your compliments, the last stanza is one of my favorites as well!
Great job! I really like this poem, I think it captures Dumbledore's thoughts perfectly. It is very strong and moving. I love how it builds to the third stanza, "Absalom, O Absalom," and the final line is great. Wonderful poem, I hope you write more! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. The third stanza was really the root of inspiration for the poes, which explains the build up. I really appreciate the review!
Beautiful poem. Shows the work of a master poet. I give it a perfect. You should write more poetry. I'm going to put this in my favorites. Perhaps we could do a joint poem - no, I'm kidding myself. You're probably busy. Good work, though. I don't have anything to comment on except to keep it up!
Author's Response: Wow- thanks for all the praise. I do love writing poetry- I just can't post most of it since it is not HP related. A joint poem could be fun- but it would have to wait for a while. I have an internship and large paper this summer that are eating up all of my time. Maybe after that sometime. And thanks again!
I like your poem. I give it a 7/10.
I bet you could hove made it longer and better tjough.
Author's Response: Thank you for your opinion. What could I have done to make it better? What parts bothered you or didn't sound right? I appreciate the criticism.
Hey! I don't usually review poems, so you're going to have to try to bear with me while I try to sound like I know what I'm talkiing about. ;D
First off, beautfiul start. The first stanza is simply wonderful. "He forgot to mention how the bitterness of knowledge
sours your mouth." That was an inspired line(s). I think it might have been better to say "sours the mouth" instead, because if you say "your" it seems almost as if DD is saying the knowledge sours Harry's mouth when Harry doesn't even know yet.
I was a bit confused by the second stanza, if truth be told. I'll say what I thought, and you can correct me if you wish. "a life you held too dear"...is that referring to Harry holding Sirius too dear? And if so, is DD implying that Harry shouldn't have loved Sirius that much? Or is it that he's just stating that Harry's love for Sirius was what caused him to lose him in the end? I think I had more questions, but now I can't recall them.
"Absalom" is a biblical reference, is it not? The author Orson Scott Card used it in his book Ender's Game, I believe. I think this third stanza is brilliant, too.
I would have just titled this "Absalom" because it sounds more approachable, but that's trivial.
Umm...otherwise, I have nothing to say. Fantastic job.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review, and you did a wonderful job. Absalom is a biblical reference, from Joab I believe but it has been a while since I looked it up (definatley old testament though). And I am a fan of Orson Scott Card, but I believe he used it in Ender's Shadow, not Ender's Game. Faulkner also wrote a book called Absalom, Absalom. I appreciate the critiques and I will definatley think them over!