Wow that was so amazing. The writing was so..oh I don't even know what to call it. It was just amazing.
That's incredible. And scary all at the same time.
This is great.
I was curious when I saw this in the BA challenge for this month, so I came to read, and, well, I was completely floored.
To be more specific, I really loved the way you developed the story from Ginny's hopelessness to her slight burst of anger at Ron and Hermione to her final comfort at the end. I was, to be perfectly honest, left completely breathless.
She stood among the white chairs, her eyes scanning the crowd that had gathered on the lakeshore for her brother's wedding. She saw many eyes staring back at her, brown, blue and hazel and even a few black, but no green. The way you use colours to show what Ginny is feeling and what she can actually see is amazing. Also, using eyes to represent the people is a good idea, as well, because it's still, successful and easy to know who everyone is and how overwhelmed Ginny feels by everything around her that isn't right.
And then, amidst the blurred colors and flowing robes, there was blue This is just an example, but the syntax of this story is stunning. It's really impressive how you can make Ginny seem so withdrawn and confused.
So cold and striking it was like staring into icicles, a frosty exterior she was beginning to break. It doesn't seem to throw off the cadence of the story at all that this sentence is fragmented and starts with 'so'; in fact, it adds to the effect. The only suggestion I would have for this part is to clarify how she's breaking the frosty exterior. Otherwise, it seems kind of like you're switching to Draco's PoV. You could say "a frosty exterior she was beginning to [notice, understand, see beyond, etc]" Just a word that doesn't involve something Ginny wouldn't know she was doing.
Excellent work, really. Like I said, it left me completely breathless and was entrancingly well-written.
ILOVE IT could you´please update soon!
AWESOME DESCRIPTIONS!!!! love it !!! keep writing!!! you're very talented!!
is there another chapter?
what? i totally dont get it. but if u added a few for details it would be super great.
I enjoyed this story. I think the way you write is amazing and has mystery that I haveb't seen in many other pieces.
I'm not a Ginny/Draco shipper, but it was very well written. You should put your talents to something worthwile - like a Ginny/Harry and Ron/Hermione FanFic. But - all in all - very well written.
Hmm...Not bad, not bad. I liked it. The vague atmosphere leaves much to the imagination, which is good. It encourages creativity in the reader, which is always a positive. Kinda confusing at first, but it got stronger towards the end. I especially loved how rarely you used the character names. It added a certain sense of ethereality (is that even a word?) that was a nice touch.
DRACO AND GINNY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WHAT DRUG ARE YOU On????!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Mmm. Thanks for the review. Perhaps next time you could be a bit more specific than "you suck". I don't ship D/G, by the way. I'm supportive of Harry/Ginny, but sometimes I like to dabble in different things. Perhaps you should try it sometime.
Uhhh, Ummmmmmmmm, okaaaaaaaay. It was a bit short. Bye.
Author's Response: Maybe next time you could offer me some actual suggestions for improvement.
OMG!!! This is such a touching, moving story. It brought tears to my eyes, literally. You describe the story with such passion . . . "sighs and daydreams". You have a great talent at writing, definitely.
This story is going on my favourites list, by the way!!!
x x x long live the fairies x x x
Author's Response: Thank you very much, dear. I really appreciate it. I feel so honored that you put my story on your favorites list. *grins like an idiot*
Oh my gosh. Tears! Tears in my eyes... and an abundance of goosebumps. I've seriously never read anything like this!
Your style is amazing... the description in this fic portrays every feeling and evokes such emotion that I feel my heart ache for Ginny. It is so beautiful, how you wrote it all... you never actually said 'Harry died' or 'Draco held her hand', but it was clear what you were talking about, and when you introduced Draco the symboloism and description was even better than spelling it out.
You put it together perfectly. This was just long enough to portray how Ginny was feeling and catch my interest, but short enough so that it doesn't drag on and ruin the intensity of her emotions. It was simple, yet the words were intricately woven together to create a stunning masterpiece.
Unbelievable. There is so much more I love about this fic, but cannot find the right words to say. Beautiful. Poetic. Powerful. Awesome job. This is going on my favorites for sure!! I will definitely look into your other fics and/or keep an eye out for more.
Author's Response: *blushes like mad* Wow. That's all I can honestly say at the moment. Thank you so much. I'm so glad that you enjoyed this. I've been trying my hand at Draco/Ginny lately, because I've recently become fascinated with the pairing. I'm mostly a H/G shipper, but the angst and emotion that is evident between D/G is unbelievable. I felt I had to explore it. :) Again, thank you for your lovely review. I hope to hear from you again in future stories!
Awww. I just loved that it was so...perfect. I assume that was malfoy at the end. I love the way you described everything that matters so well and u never have anything unecessary in your story. 9/10 at least!
Author's Response: You assumed correctly - it was Draco at the end. Thanks very much for your review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!