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Reviews For Senses

Name: Rowan Weasley (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 21:27 · For: Epilogue
The beginning was heartwrenching. I truly felt for the characters and Mr. Weasley.

I am so relieved that Hermione is not dead. She and Ron are perfect for one another. Thank you for writing such a wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it.

Name: h3art0f1nk (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 20:39 · For: Epilogue
That was a brilliantly written chapter, and I'm so sorry to know that it's the end! It was a great ending though. I thought it was the slightest bit abrupt at the very end, but that last sentence completely made up for it. In fact, I enjoyed that whole last paragraph. It was perfect how you reminded us exactly why the title of your story is Senses. It's easy to forget when you're all caught up in the plot.
Anyway, thank you for writing this and sharing it with the rest of us. It was easily one of the best pieces I've read on MNFF or anywhere else.

Name: emmaholloway (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 15:23 · For: Epilogue
OH MY GOD. I THOUGHT YOU HAD KILLED HERMIONE. I had to read that beginning bit about twelve times to make sure you I had read it right. I loved the ending. Its just so sweet and loving.
This has been my favourite story I've read on here. The writing was incredible and the plot was so unique and almost unbareably gripping.
It's hard to think that it's really over, I'm going to miss how happy i got when a new chapter was posted.
emma x x x

Name: oldshortsnout (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 4:32 · For: Epilogue
Any suggestions for your future writing? That would be to continue write!

I have just finished reading the epilogue and find it hard to express all strong emotions in words. I fight back a desire to fill the review with capital letters and triple exclamaion marks, and just give you two simple words, that come from a very sincere heart:

thank you.

Name: Silver Whisper (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 2:40 · For: Epilogue
oh my god...your story was so powerful! well done!

You should write some stories after the trio beats voldemort...you know...their lives after all this heartache? that would be so amazing,

of course, its up to you! but i can dream cant i?

Well done!
Love Sarah

Name: loonymagic (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 2:37 · For: Epilogue
it was wonderful! loved the last line "They basked in it greedily, knowing that all too soon reality would bring them crashing back to their senses." you should write some more! like a sequel! just so we know what happens!

Name: Colli (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 2:22 · For: Epilogue
Oh my god that was sooo sad!

Name: dramaqueen88 (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 1:47 · For: Epilogue
OMG! Loved your story...I think you should make a sequel.

Name: Chamelion (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 0:58 · For: Epilogue
Hey! You faked me out there at the beginning; I thought Hermione was dead. I almost cried twice anyway reading this chapter, and it takes a lot to make me cry.

Name: muggleclaw (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 23:38 · For: Epilogue
Since you posted the very first chapter, this is the one story I've *really* looked forward to updates of, and this was a really lovely conclusion (thank you for not killing Hermione)! I'm kind of sad that it's all over, though. I guess I'll just have to hope that you post more fics in the future...if they're half as enjoyable as this one, they'll be great. ;D

Name: ohgooshxpotter (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 23:14 · For: Epilogue
I just adore this ending. It was perfect. Horribly sad, as the story may as well turn up, but beautiful.

Name: I lovesmesomeHarry (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 22:40 · For: Epilogue
Beautiful ending, Beautiful Chapter! I feel honored to have been able to read your work. Thank you for writing!

Name: casiopeia (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 22:10 · For: Epilogue
You're a great writer! I like where you've left this story, too - leaves much to the imagination.
Thanks for a great story

Name: Ritter (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 22:04 · For: Epilogue
Wow...great story. From beginning to end...brilliant. You're a really great writer, you expressed everything beautifully, and the details and imagery was just amazing. I love your story and I hope you keep writing. Good luck!

Name: hpgirl_91 (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 21:57 · For: Epilogue
loved it- absolutely amazing. Your work is incredible and I look forward to reading more of it in the future!

Name: Glittering_Pheonix (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 21:10 · For: Epilogue
I cannot believe it is over!! At the beginning I though Hermione was dead, I was so surprised it wasn’t! This is a really good ending, I like it! I really love this story, you are a wonderful, wonderful writer and I am looking forward to reading more of your stories! = )

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 20:49 · For: Epilogue
I am so sad that this story is ending, but it’s a great finale!

That it really is an epilogue is interesting – the skip from Harry running, to the funeral. It’s an abrupt shift, but I like the slower, bittersweet tone, and it’s still wrapping everything up, so it works well.

...Ministry catered farewell to Kingsley Shacklebolt....
Being nitpicky, but there should be a dash in “Ministry-catered”.

The snapshots as Ron looks around are perfect. It’s fascinating to see familiar characters through each others’ eyes, as they always look so different. In this case, Ron sees clearly, and that more than anything conveys his maturity.
Harry’s healing was beyond words now. Only actions could mend his wounds. Only after Voldemort’s fall would he allow himself the luxury to mourn.
…he watched her stubbornly refuse Harry’s aide, standing solely on her own volition as she continued to weep silently, her fiery head held high.
It had been Charlie that he’d seen first upon arriving at the hospital, running the length of the halls, ignoring the Healers frantically dogging his steps as he methodically entered each family member’s room to check how they were doing.
Fred had been beside himself with jealousy at the fact that both of his eyes were still intact, claiming vehemently that George would get twice the girls now, being a bloke with one eye and all. It had felt good to laugh.

To me, running and being methodical (Charlie’s description) don’t go together, but it’s still a sweet idea – I’ve never pictured Charlie as the worrier of the kids.

Oh, you had me fully convinced that it was Hermione who had died, even though I knew it probably wouldn’t be who I thought it was…good job.

“She might not be dead, Ron. Snape was… I think he… Ron, if you let her go, they might be able to help her.”
It’s perfect. Harry isn’t at all coherent – after all, his idea of Snape has just turned inside out – but he’s still got his goal in mind.

So this whole last chapter (save the very end) is Ron’s PoV. Interesting. It works to slow the pace, though; no fast-shifting views and ideas. Simply enough, just the end.

The end is so sweet. My favorite part is this bit:
…Hermione’s hand started to move ever so slightly across the bed. It clearly took some effort, her face crinkling with concentration until her hand finally touched the edges of Ron’s robes. She took the material between her fingers, tugging on it almost imperceptibly until Ron finally noticed….
It’s such a lovely little picture of love and caring.

Beautiful ending. The fact that the war is over isn’t even a big deal; it’s mostly been about the four of the kids. I wish I could be more explicit about why I love this story, but I’ll have to settle for just telling you that it’s got depth, it has realistic romance, it’s optimistic through darkness (though that’s a personal preference), and the characters are very real. And as for future advice, you’re doing wonderfully as it is. There are places where a single word seems out of place, but only a few, and nothing is flat-out bad.

Whatever you do, keep writing!

Name: Nairobidawn (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 20:42 · For: Epilogue
WONDERFUL!!!! You really had me going there for a moment at the funeral!! I thought for sure that Hermione was gone...but this was AWESOME!! I feel bad for the Weasley family, but I like Ron and Hermione better!!! Anyway, AWESOME story! I have really enjoyed reading it and can totally see something like this happening in Deathly Hallows! Keep writing, you are GREAT!!!

Name: Gin_Drinka (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 20:33 · For: Epilogue
This story is beautiful! You write so well, and it's so real. I love stories that show the acceptance of death in a bittersweet way. At first I thought it was Hermione, but Mrs. Weasley is alsmost as bad. poor Mr. Weasley. But that's life. Well, anyway, it is great. You're writing is great. Please write more!

Name: femmefetal (Signed) · Date: 04/23/07 18:33 · For: Sensing the End
oh, this was an absolute joy to read! can't wait to see how it ends! : )

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