Reviewer: Phia Phoenix
Date: 09/06/07 1:29
Chapter: Lazing on a Sunday Afternoon

I like this too! It's actually the first one from Fuddge's POV that I've read. The humour's good, and I like the way he both blames his misfortunes on others and accepts that they were his fault too.

Just a couple of things: continual use of the word "bloody". I don't think it's the type of word Fudge would use. He's more of a jolly English man, if that makes any sense. I know, English people use bloody, but not Fudge. He's the Minister, and since he doesn't ever say it it makes more sense that he wouldn't think it either.

And the use in one of the last paragraphs of "I guess". I don't think he'd say that either. "i suppose", maybe, but not "I guess".

Overall, great characterisation and Briticisms!

Phia

Author's Response: since he doesn't ever say it it makes more sense that he wouldn't think it either

I disagree. I think Fudge refrains from using the word in public, around other people, because he is the Minister. That doesn't mean it's not a part of his private vocabulary. Fudge is a politician. He knows which words are appropriate and which aren't.

I'll consider changing that "I guess" to "I suppose", though. You may be right about that bit.

Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed the story none the less! :)

Reviewer: Dumbledore Prince
Date: 10/19/06 8:54
Chapter: Lazing on a Sunday Afternoon

Good fic, Maia! I love your characterisation of Fudge; his long rant was an entertaining read.

This story evoked mixed feelings within me: I was chuckling and sympathising with him at the same time. All the same, he deserved the humiliation.

The pretty little witch in the reception area had even started returning my flirts lately! But of course she won’t want me now.

*snorts* A witch returning Fudge's flirts!? She must've been a clever woman. ;)

Undoubtedly, that was the funniest line in the story.

However, I do have some suggestions and nit-picks ...

In a couple of places, you've typed 'Weasley' as 'Weasly'. Also, 'Muggle' is always capitalised in canon.

What did he have to be so right for?

Just a little Brit-pick here: folks from Britain are unlikely to use the underlined word in that context. Even though my Brit-picking skills aren't that good (I've never been to the UK), I'm quite sure that the quote sounds like an Americanism.

Overall, Maia, this was really good mixture of angst and humour. I liked the way Fudge blamed everyone else, but finally accepted that it was his mistake.

~Mini.

P.S.: Can you kindly review my stories? [/begging]

Author's Response: Thank you for yet another wonderful review!

I'm glad you enjoyed it; I did enjoy writing a character that very few people think about. He's not really the most popular... All the same, I think he showed some redeeming features in The Other Minister, and I actually like him better than Scrimgeour.

I know I misspelled Weasley in a few places. When I wrote this short I was rather uncertain and kept mixing them.

As for the Brit-picking, seeing as I'm neither one nor the other, American and British expressions do confuse me once in a while, but I don't think that using "so" in that place is a horrible Americanism. Then again, that might just be me.

Again, I'm very glad you liked it, and if i managed to make you feel anything at all for the shallow Fudge, that makes my day!

P.S.: I'll see what I can do, but I'm short on time these days. Not enough time to read fanfiction... :( I will eventually, anyway!

Reviewer: FeatherTrader
Date: 06/13/06 21:26
Chapter: Lazing on a Sunday Afternoon

I don't think I've ever seen anything Fudge-centered, or at least not lately. Very unique. I liked how you had Fudge at first blaming others (bloody Harry Potter, bloody Dumbledore, bloody You-Know-Who) then slowly coming to relization that it was his own fault. My favourite part however was the "Maybe they’ll make Arthur Weasly my boss. That would be depressing." Short, humouress and gives us a direct link to what he's thinking. Overall, I love it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I hadn't ever read anything about Fudge either; the characters we mostly dislike are so easy to over-look, such as Fudge, or Professor Trelawny or Peter Pettigrew. It's much more fun to write about the characters we love, or those that we don't like as such but find intriguing, like Voldemort, Lucius Malfoy and Severus Snape. It was interesting to challenge myself with a character no one really writes, and I am glad that you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: muggleclaw
Date: 05/08/06 0:16
Chapter: Lazing on a Sunday Afternoon

I've never read a Fudge-focused story before... I really liked this. You seemed to get his character really well. Short and sweet--great job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for such a positive review! Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Zara Ravenwood
Date: 05/07/06 14:23
Chapter: Lazing on a Sunday Afternoon


Cute, totally in character and makes us feel both amused by and saddened for Fudge at the same time. I love how you have him thinking Percy shouldn’t have to get in trouble because of him, and admitting however reluctantly that he was wrong. I like it.


Author's Response: I'm glad I succeded in doing what I set out to do! Thank you!

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