This is really something beautiful. I love the "A soul, virgin to the grandeur of our world" part... Very powerful.
Very clever use of wrd play. I saw alliteration as well as good imagery and dialouge. The adjectives were placed grandly. You didn't wander, you stuck to your theme. The length of your passages (for lack of a better word) was rather different, but it worked in this case. I enjoyed reading it.
This is a wonderful poem! While it only explores the theme of rebirth on the most literal, basic demention, it is made multi-dementional and a great poem by its vivid language and description. Great job on weaving your sophisticated knowledge of the English language into this great poem.
A soul, virgin to the grandeur of our world. This line really stood out at me, especially because of your usage of the word "virgin." "Virgin" usually has a rather negative and dirty connotation. However, I enjoyed how you put it to new use as a synonym to "innocence" in this poem. That was a very mature thing for you to do in your poem, and definitely will stand out to the judges. There are very few poets out there mature enough to overcome dirty connotatiations of words like "virgin" and use them in a mature, respectible way to describe beautiful innocence, and to show that maturity is a promising sign for you indeed.
Overall, this is a great poem. By pointing out your usage of the word "virgin", I drew your attention to one of the many phrases and word usage I liked in your poem. There are too many to count, in reality. Congrads on writing such an excellent poem!