A suggestion... don't ryme 'life' and 'lowlife', it's repetative. Also, you use the phrase 'once again' twice in the third part. But bonos puntos for the difficult format! Pax.
Ah, that was sweet. Sad, but sweet. Since Ginny is a Weasley, wouldn't the baby have red hair? Green eyes from Harry, red hair from Ginny? It's not that big, I just sort of like that tradition. I like it.
I loved this short thing,i dont know what to call it,id like to see more especially in a long story :)
My favortie lin here is "What was lost was recovered once again."
Do my eyes deceive me, or is this almost a sonnet? Have you tried it without the isolated line to see how you like it? I've always loved the sonnet form myself, but have never succeedes in writing one...Hmmm, maybe I should try again...Thanks for the inspiration to attempt a difficult format!
Author's Response: Yes. Its a Petrarchian sonnet. I studied it at school, and decided to give it a try. I am so glad you liked it.