Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 01/09/08 22:47
Chapter: Part One

This is really well written and I can't wait for the next part. This is how I imagined it happening, as opposed to the quick account in DH. Oh and Happy New Year.

Reviewer: songbreese
Date: 08/30/07 20:26
Chapter: Part One

OMG that was amazing, I love it! Can't wait for part two.

Author's Response: Thanks again - actually, I don't think there will be a part two, unfortunately... Book 7 kind of made it a bit improbable... :(

Reviewer: songbreese
Date: 08/30/07 20:11
Chapter: Part One

OMG that was amazing, I love it! Can't wait for part two.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: Hansolohpfrk
Date: 06/03/06 18:22
Chapter: Part One

Tearjerker! It's so sad! I like how you capture Lily's feelings in a way that makes you understand what she's going through.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: notabanana
Date: 05/06/06 10:14
Chapter: Part One

Wow, very dramatic. The last sentence in the first paragraph is way too long, in my opinion. It was rather winding and confusing. The part right after that, where James shut the door softly, was perfect. It was perhaps the most touching part of the entire story. Generally I liked this, although it isn't my favorite of your fanficton works. Perhaps an eight out of ten.

Author's Response: The last sentence of the first paragraph... yes, I agree, it's quite long, but I worked really hard on it. I had been attempting to create a rapid, fluid movement - a panicked, bunch-of-things-happening-at-once, as opposed to one action after another, which I thought lacked the frenzied mood I was trying to convey. And then, it contrasted with the following line, so I didn't really consider it's readability, to be honest! I know that there are so many versions of this exact night out there, but I wanted to make one of my own. The next part is more... original, I think, but I don't mind if it's not as much to your taste as my other fics are.

Reviewer: GreyLady
Date: 05/01/06 15:02
Chapter: Part One

So THIS is what you've been working on while Red has been in a state of unupdatedness! I had been inclined ot think the worse, lol. But no hard feelings if you're not planning on updating. Wonderfully descriptive passages as always, although you could have broken it up with a bit of dialogue here and there. I noticed a couple of rather wordy sentences. Now, I like wordy, but sometimes it gets a little out of hand. Otherwise I don't have much to say because this is a familiar scenario, don't really have any strong feelings about it. But I can't wait to see how you'll shake it up!

Author's Response: Yes - this is why I haven't updated Red as quickly as readers might have liked, but this fic has been on my mind for quite some time! I know it's quite a typical fic, but this is my take on the familiar scenario - although Part Two has stuff that I have never seen in this type of fic, which I hope will be received well. Dialogue didn't really occur to me when writing this though - usually it would, as Red I think has a good deal of dialogue at times - but really I just wanted to focus on her emotions, and the atmosphere. As for wordy sentences - I do tend to get wordy (it's just my way!) - and probably shorter sentences are easier to read or are more appealing. But don't worry, Red will be up soon - I've been working on them simultaneously, so you've got two things to look forward to from this author!

Reviewer: Hokey
Date: 05/01/06 5:17
Chapter: Part One

Wow, this story is amazing! An interesting take on that terrible Halloween night, and extremely well-written. Lily's emotions were all very realistic and in-place, I could feel exactly what she felt when James died. You're really talented! Keep it up, and update soon! =)

Author's Response: Thank you - it was really important for me to make the emotions in this fic realistic, so I'm glad it worked for you! I hope you like the second part - when it gets up, of course!

Reviewer: Khrys
Date: 04/30/06 23:51
Chapter: Part One

Wow. I have to admit, I have tried not to think about that night. It seemed to sad to think about. To see it from Lily's POV was more heartbreaking than I thought it would be. What a wonderful beginning!

Author's Response: Thank you - yes, it is very sad, but I suppose it's the key event that propelled the plots of the entire series. I find it interesting to read other writers' takes on what happened that night, so I decided to write my own version - I hope you like the second part!

Reviewer: pri_87
Date: 04/30/06 23:48
Chapter: Part One

Its a beautiful story rock. Sad but beautiful. I could almost feel Lily's pain when she loses James. Keep up the good work! And bring out part two soon!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I even felt sad when writing that bit - it's such a horrible scenario. Part two will be out soon!

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