Wow, that was pretty good (sorry, I'm really bad at being descriptive).
Author's Response: Thanks. Appreciate the review :)
Ah yes, a sonnet. I really enjoyed this one. You did a really good job conveying Narcissa’s emotions here. You also really seem to have to meter down, which I personally find next to impossible for this kind of poem. I consider that an accomplishment in and of itself. I liked the recurring lines, or portions of lines, throughout this poem. It helps tie the whole thing together nicely and also added to the impact. I thought you did well there. The only real constructive comment I can think of would have been no more than a matter of opinion/interpretation. So, it isn’t worth including. Overall, very nice job.
Author's Response: Thanks Vader, your opinions and insights are always appreciated.
This sonnet was very nice in terms of Narcissa's thoughts. She was very in-character, very Narcissa, especially the last two lines."I held no great influence or power, Only desperation of a mother." I like how you separated her from her "former colleagues," like it being a sacrifice to abandon your friends for family.
I must add the downfall is one word, not two.
There's not much more I can say about a sonnet. Be satisfied; it was very nice!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'll go correct that, and thank you for the review :)