WOW!! its amazing.. im at a lost for words! wow is about all i can say! i love it and WOW! LOL :)
WOW!! its amazing.. im at a lost for words! wow is about all i can say! i love it and WOW! LOL :)
-calls Ron a bad name- How dare you! Grrrr!
Really great poem, very sad.
RON DUMPED HER?! 0.o
I love that line "You've killed me. So long. Goodbye."
that was a very sad poem
you made me cry !!!!!!
Very powerful last words, the way they rhyme suggests humour or jollity but what they actually say contradicts that. Does that make sense? I think it reads more like a song than an actual poem, but I like it anyway.
Just one tip on your formatting; it might a be a good idea to break up your authors note from the actual poem because it's quite confusing!
Well done, xxxDquillxxx
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I liked this poem. It instilled a lot of sympathy in me; I felt for both you and Hermione. It is a poem written on raw emotion. You can see the jumble of Hermione's mind, and it seems likely that she wrote this poem. However, it is kind of disorgainized. There isn't much rhythm in this poem. However, you definitely connected on the emotional factor. If they still had the rate story button, I would give it a seven or eight. This sort of eerily reminds me of a poem I wrote this morning. You've captured Hermione's emotions well, even though I doubt she would be so crushed by a break-up. Maybe this poem would b better under the premises of Ginny's reactions to her break-up with Harry or something like that. I liked this poem though, and with editing, it has a lot of potential to be a great poem.
