Wow, Amanda! I donít think Iíve ever read a Hagrid/Maxime story before but this one really works. I like the characterisation of them both, and I think that youíve written the dialect of both characters in a very realistic way.
One of my favourite things about this story is the way that it does not focus simply on one event Ė Madam Maximeís birthday, but also mentions other things/events that are happening. The context of the story is kept correct and consistent; I like the way that their size is constantly being referred to, such as with Hagrid squeezing out of the fireplace, the table set out for what seems to be six people, and of course, the table breaking at the end!
It didnít matter that it was July and that it was downright cold outside.
I like the way that this paragraph contrasts to the rest of the story. Itís effective in that it reminds us of the setting, and that the war is still not over. By Hagrid stating that he knows this, and wants to forget it for a day, it makes the whole situation much sweeter and shows how hard he has tried for her birthday, and how caring he is.
ďI wrote yeh an acoustic poem, to tell yeh what I think of yeh.Ē
I thought that this line was really nice! The idea of the Ďacousticí poem is very sweet and just like Hagrid to get them mixed up. The poem itself is lovely, the rhyme is simple and perfect for something that Hagrid would say. However my one criticism about this section is that for me, Hagrid didnít seem as anxious as I would have expected. There is a degree of hope that Olympe would like the poem, but we donít really see this reciprocated in his actions Ė I didnít feel that he was nervous or embarrassed enough about the poem. Just a thought. :)
Several hours later, a very dishevelled Hagrid stood in the doorway of the small parlour, blushing furiously as he tried to explain to Tom exactly how the table had broken.
I love this ending; itís clever, itís class, itís simply awesome. I really like the humour in this and the way that it makes the ending very tasteful.
Fantastic story! The characterisation and atmosphere is great and youíve done a good job with the difficult speech styles and tones. :)
That was funny! Excellent poetry, I especially liked the ending :P!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, this was a lot of fun to write, I'm glad you liked i!
I burst out laughing the moment I read that the table was broken! Well done!
Author's Response: He he he, Elysa inspired that one!
The tackling bit was hilarious. The poem was very Hagrid-like. The only thing I would think of to criticize is maybe put in some more description of Madame Maxime through Hagrid's eyes?
Like: "Her square shoulders, so strong and womanly, paired with her stone grey eyes that could sometimes look so fierce made Hagrid's heart melt."
Or something equally ridiculous as that. Just for laughs.
Author's Response: LOL, thanks for the ideas!
Ah, that was sweet. At first when I read the poem, I was like "That is acrostic, no acoustic" But then I read you A/N. Good job to all of those who helped on the fic! I especially like the poem.
Author's Response: :) I'm glad you picked up on that. Last spring I taught my 5th graders a poetry unit and we covered acrostic poems. I thought it would be funny for Hagrid to get it wong. I'm glad you caught that!
hahahahahahahahahahaha that was CUTE i loved it
Author's Response: Thank you! I always appreciate your kind words and willingness to be patient with my slow updating skills!
*Plugs in acrostic guitar to sing review* Broken tables! Naughty half giants! You ladies did a wonderful job on this, it brought a big smile to my face! And a big giggle when she pulled the hanky from her dress! Yay!
Author's Response: Ahhh! Thank you! I think there's more to Hagrid and Maxime than meets the eye- and thay's saying something!!
Very entertaining! The poem was well thought out, and appropriate. This was a nice, light-hearted bit of reading in the midst of so many fics where things always go wrong. Very enjoyable.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Really the inspiration came from Rob himself. I managed the Covert Cupid project and most people wanted the typical (Harry/Ginny, Ron/Hermione, Hermione/Draco...) But Rob wanted something different. Although his original suggestion of Dumbledore/Ginny was quite amusing... and disturbing... I hope that REALLY was a joke....
So, so cute, you guys! It really made me smile. It was a really sweet poem and I liked the part about how her attire wouldn't acknowledge her desire ...
If there was a cute rating, this would top the chart. Very, very sweet and a nice little read.
Author's Response: LOL! Thank so much CA!!!
This is a really cute story! I am a devout Hagrid/McGonagall shipper, so I usually don't read Hagrid/Madame Maxine, but I really really like this story! It made me smile the whole time! One thing I noticed was that you got Hagrid and Maxine's accents down really really well. The only thing I didn't like was the line "It didnít matter to her that he buy her something expensive, but that he thought she deserved it was flattering." I found that line, especially the beggining part, sort of confusing. Once you fix that line, you have an absolutely perfect cute little story!
Author's Response: Hagrid/McGonagall huh? hmmm... never really considered that one... But I'm happy that you decided to step out of your prefered OTP and enjoyed this! As for the accents, I actually had help with that one from my beta. Between the two of us we managed to get it to sound right! Thanks Little Winky!
That was excellent!! It was so sweet and I loved the funny bits. Well done!!!
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! Much of the credit also goes to Katie and Elysa. It wouldn't be nearly as entertaining without them!