this is a really nice poem, i can tell you worked on it. You can tell potter has matured but he still is a marauder at heart.

an excellent poem, if I do say so myself! (and I do, by the way.) It flows very nicely, and it made me giggle. =) Keep up the great work!

Good job! I really like this poem and how it is told from James' POV and how he sees that he needs to grow up. One thing though, instead of breaking the rhythm of the poem to tell the reader it is five months later, include that in a stanza. Having the last two stanza's broken away from the rest of the poem detracted from the emotion that was being conveyed. Good job and good luck!

Author's Response: Good point about the stanza! I never saw it like that. To tell the truth, I hate rhyming poetry, and I was trying to finish it as fast as possible. *hangs head* I'll try to improve that, though. Thanks for the advice and the review!