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Reviews For Little Loony

Name: Muggle in the Know (Signed) · Date: 03/02/10 22:57 · For: Chapter 1
I have a few things to mention.

First was this fragment : "She sauntered off the room" I think you may mean "She sauntered out of the room" or "She sauntered off to her room"

Second, is that Luna had blue eyes not brown eyes.

But I think that's it. Other than that this is very well written. You have amazing writing skills.

Name: rpjrains61 (Signed) · Date: 04/23/08 12:33 · For: Chapter 1
Awe...sweet. I love stories that are spin offs of events from the original books. This one is one of my favorites!

Author's Response: Yay, glad you liked it! :)

Name: KASK (Signed) · Date: 08/01/07 20:37 · For: Chapter 1
Preethi! :D
I really liked this. I thought it was very cute, and was lighthearted, something I didn't expect (since it was about Luna's mother's death). Luna was portrayed excellently. It's exactly how I pictured her at age nine. I thought you did a good job with Marvin, although I always pictured him more like Luna -- more out there...

Great job, I really enjoyed it :D


Author's Response: Aw, Keri, thank you so much! *squishes*

Name: Hansolohpfrk (Signed) · Date: 07/19/07 16:30 · For: Chapter 1
Ahh! Preethi, this is a wonderful fic that I read over and over and over again when I'm sad. It cheers me up.

One of my favorite things about this fic is the portrayal of Luna's father, Marvin. You took such a minor character and just completely made a realistic, 3-D character out of him. I would never have expected that he invented The Quibbler from an idea of Luna's.

I have one teensy nitpick. Luna doesn't seem to be affected much by her mother's death, much less than her father, anyway. Why is that?

Oh, Preethi, I loved it so much!


Author's Response: Oops, double post!

Name: Hansolohpfrk (Signed) · Date: 07/19/07 16:29 · For: Chapter 1
Ahh! Preethi, this is a wonderful fic that I read over and over and over again when I'm sad. It cheers me up.

One of my favorite things about this fic is the portrayal of Luna's father, Marvin. You took such a minor character and just completely made a realistic, 3-D character out of him. I would never have expected that he invented The Quibbler from an idea of Luna's.

I have one teensy nitpick. Luna doesn't seem to be affected much by her mother's death, much less than her father, anyway. Why is that?

Oh, Preethi, I loved it so much!


Author's Response: Aw, Hanni! The first line made me smile -- definitely the best compliment I've ever received. *grins* I'm glad you thought Marvin was realistic. =] About Luna not being very affected by her mother's death, well, she is affected, but she doesn't let it show. Ditto with Marvin who pushes away his feelings to concentrate on Luna's happiness. And because we see the story through Marvin's eyes, we don't really get to see Luna's reactions to her mother's death. Thank you so much for reviewing; it definitely made my day! :D *hugs*

Name: helgaandgodric (Signed) · Date: 07/18/07 12:46 · For: Chapter 1
Preethi! Overall, I really enjoyed this story. At times, I felt that Luna was acting a bit young for her age, but other than that she was lovely. I especially enjoyed reading about Mr. Lovegood. We’ve always considered that he was the “weird” one, but it was nice reading it the other way, where Mrs. Lovegood was a little different. Also, reading about the effect and control Luna has over her father was funny, and very refreshing. This is the first fic in which I’ve read the Quibbler being started because Luna wanted her father to publish stories proving magical creatures existence!

I really enjoyed this, Preethi, and had fun discussing it in the SBBC.


Author's Response: Kate! I'm so glad you enjoyed this story. :D Oh, and I'm thrilled you liked reading about Mr Lovegood too. Thanks for the awesome review, dear! *huggles*

Name: LadyAlesha (Signed) · Date: 07/09/07 4:17 · For: Chapter 1
I really liked this glimpse into Luna’s childhood. She is so calm after her mother’s death, it’s almost creepy, but I love that you showed how much she believed in seeing her mother again one day. It’s very much like Luna to be able to comfort her dad in such a situation and not be upset herself, because she takes him by his word.

The little you told us about Luna’s mum was very unexpected. I would have imagined her dad to be the ‘strange’ parent, while her mum was a normal woman and Luna to be taking more after her dad, but this way works just as well. While I’d like to think of Luna’s weird jewellery as her own personal quirk, having the mother have the same habits was ok, too.

I absolutely love Luna’s dad! Their relationship was perfect. I especially liked how he called her ‘Princess’ all the time. Most often nicknames like that become annoying after a short while, but somehow calling Luna ‘Princess’ fit in with this story and showed how precious she is to him. I love how he started the Quibbler because Luna wanted him to, now that’s devotion!

One thing about your descriptions of Luna: Nearly every time you described her you used the same words to refer to her hair. It’s always ‘straggly blonde’. I would suggest either varying your descriptions a bit or not putting this in as often, because it gets a tiny bit repetitive.

“Princess,” he said, talking her hand and leading her into her room opposite the study. I think you meant to write ‘taking’ here.

After about a week he had begun to employ this tactic, Marvin was found in his study, studying his way to glory, as his wife would put it. The first half of this sentence, up until the comma, is slightly confusing. How about you change the word order to this: ‘About a week after he had begun…’? The way it is now suggests that he started to employ this tactic a week after his wife died, but the way I understood it is that the following scene is set a week after he started employing the tactic, so you need to change the word order.

He rummaged through the set of drawers, and five minutes later, found the bad underneath a book of his wife’s special recipes. This should be ‘bag’.

Keep up the good work, Preethi darling.

Author's Response: Yay, Ilka reviewed! :D I'm glad you liked Luna's childhood. Hee, I think it's a common perception that Luna's Dad was the strange parent, so I was sort of looking to move away from that. I love Luna's Dad too! :D Oh, and I completely see what you mean about the description getting repetitive -- I guess I never really noticed that until you pointed it out to me. And, good catch on the typos! They've been fixed now. :) *huggles Ilka for the awesome review*

Name: BringPadfootBack (Signed) · Date: 06/06/07 17:47 · For: Chapter 1
All for his little princess

Author's Response: Indeed. :)

Name: Ginny Weasley Potter (Signed) · Date: 03/30/07 8:15 · For: Chapter 1
Oh, it is such a cute sort of fic; father-daughter types, I loved it! It's really touching to read what Marvin can really do for his daughter and how special she is for him. Especially after Luna's mum died. Really nice... well done!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks, Ginny! :D

Name: SimplyCharmed (Signed) · Date: 10/24/06 19:05 · For: Chapter 1
That actually seems like what made Luna.. er- Loony. 10/10!

Author's Response: LOL, thanks SimplyCharmed! :D

Name: AKA Ginny (Signed) · Date: 10/22/06 6:56 · For: Chapter 1
Awww... That's so sweet!

Author's Response: Thanks, Ginny! :)

Name: HarmonyHeadmisstress (Signed) · Date: 07/22/06 16:28 · For: Chapter 1
Ah, soooo cute.

Author's Response: Looks like you double-posted, but thanks again!

Name: HarmonyHeadmisstress (Signed) · Date: 07/22/06 16:27 · For: Chapter 1
Ah, soooo cute.

Author's Response: Thanks, Harmony! *squee*

Name: kumydabookworm (Signed) · Date: 07/19/06 23:01 · For: Chapter 1
This is really cute. The perfect story of a doting father - and I love how Luna's delightfully quirky even when she's young.

Nice job.


Author's Response: Thanks, kumy for that sweet little review! And I'm in love with young! Luna too, man I love her!

Name: Viv (Signed) · Date: 07/19/06 18:03 · For: Chapter 1
Great one-shot! This is a part of Luna's life that we didn't know about, and it's really interesting to think that Marvin actually started to publish his magazine for his daughter. I like the way you wrote these characters, they're simple, real.

Author's Response: Thanks Viv! I like delving into parts of the character we don't know about 'cause it leaves a lot of room for imagination and character-development. Plus, it's fun!

Name: mgle_teacher (Signed) · Date: 07/18/06 22:55 · For: Chapter 1
You know. This story is sweet, and it really shows what a parent is capable of doing for the apple of his eye. I like how you went ahead and explained the Lovegoods to us. There were a few ommitted words here and there, as well as a grammar mistake or two. Other than that, it was well-written.
Good job. =]

Author's Response: Thanks, mgle_teacher for reviewing! I wrote this when my dad was really ill and hospitalised for a few weeks when I thought about how much I loved him and how much he loved me. So, I decided to base this story on the father-daughter relationship and that's how it all began. /rant

Name: Lainie xox (Signed) · Date: 07/18/06 20:07 · For: Chapter 1
Awww how sweet! I really enjoyed reading this fic. It's interesting, because I never really stepped into Luna's shoes very often. It's also very interesting that you don't think her father was bonkers either, and your story provided a very good explanation of why some people ... can do wacky things. That's so adorble.. and it certainly explains a lot.

As you might know, I'm reading this as an assignment for Flourish & Blotts class (summer school at the beta boards!), and it didn't feel like homework at all.

One tiny little thing though:
"...and lost himself inside the world of books that he did not notice time tick by.

After what seemed like ages to Marvin, Luna appeared by his side.."

You contradicted yourself there.. he didn't notice the time going by.. and then, what seemed like forever? =P

Good job writing this. It was a good read. =)

Author's Response: Lainie, thanks a lot for taking the time to review. It means a lot when I see a reviewer taking time to offer concrit. Thanks for pointing out that time issue, I'll fix it ASAP. Thanks again for the wonderful review!

Name: whittyleah (Signed) · Date: 06/16/06 19:26 · For: Chapter 1
aw...I love this story. It shows the relationship between Luna and her father so well. It also shows why she is the way she is. I loved it!

Author's Response: Thanks, whitty for that short but sweet review!

Name: FeatherTrader (Signed) · Date: 06/15/06 20:46 · For: Chapter 1
Wow. You really went through a lot of depth to explain why Luna is so loony. The story itself is relatively sad from my point of veiw, but also has a strong feeling behind it. I found it interesting also that you portrayed Luna's dad as a 'normal guy', but I liked the idea. It's very plausable and adds a lot to the story. That's dedication for him to quit his job like that for Luna. Through-out the story I liked how you had Marvin refering to Luna as "Princess", I think that is another good way you showed his love for her. Overall, it's wonderful!

Author's Response: Thanks, FeatherTrader for your wonderful comments. I've been having a really bad day and your review put a smile onto my face. Thanks a million!

Name: mugglenetdudette (Signed) · Date: 05/24/06 15:38 · For: Chapter 1
That was a good story! I wouldn't have thought tht Luna's dad would be so normal.
The first copy of ‘The Quibbler’ was published and with it came ridicule and scorn in the form of owls everyday. But Marvin did not care. It was for his little Princess, after all.

Fantastic ending!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing mugglenetdudette! Luna's dad was quite normal, yes, because we don't really know a lot about him and it's quite possible that he was a 'normal' guy. :D

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