Omg..... I just found this story, and I LOVE it! Its not the typical Lily/James story. It adds a lot of depth to how they became friends. I must admit this last chapter made me sad :(
Keep up the good work though! :D
Your very talented at voicing the way people trully feel.... Well done! :D
Thank you so much for the update! I can understand your need for a break, but I'm glad you're back.
Poor James! I was waiting for Lily to mess up. Can't wait to see what happens! (update, please)
Author's Response: Haha...the irony. Normally we're waiting on James to mess up. XD
BAH! *cries* Why is Lily being so blatantly oblivious to the fact that Michael doesn't really love her?!
I was so excited when I saw that you updated. I was like YAY ^_^ I missed this story :[ Anyway, I can't wait to read your next chapter because this one was great!
[[ vicky ]]
Please, I need to know what Micheal will do to Lily when she goes after James!
Author's Response: Michael's not going to do anything. It's James you should be curious about. :)
This is really getting good! I feel awful for James though, I bet Micheal set it up.
Author's Response: Haha, no, Michael didn't set it up. James was just worried about Lily and followed her. But, that's a good theory.
Poor James. Lily should've talked to him before running off to Michael. He's such a good friend.
I can't wait for L & J's next interaction!
& to see what about Mic.
Whoaaa.. Great chapter! I can't wait till next chapter. THis is soo different from the other stories about Lily and James! I like it. It seems so real. When are you going to get Lily and James together? I can't wait!
Author's Response: I really couldn't tell you when. It's probably just going to happen. I have some plans for this story and where I intend on taking it, but most of this was just .. spur of the moment writing.
Oh no! Plz plz plz update soon!
crying for Lily
& her very believable pain.
wow' this is dark like i haven't seen before.
Author's Response: I was trying to go with something different with this story :)
wow. just wow. i have been stunned by ur superb writing. your charecterization of michael is so excellent, and i can actually see why lily doesnt want to leave him. poor girl. agh but you left me with a slight cliffie!!!! eill james forgive her? will she continue with michael?
Lily Evans had never seen James Potter look more crushed than he had on that evening. And, it was that look on his face that allowed her to pull away from Michael Crouch and follow him down those stairs, hopefully to catch him before he ascended up those stone steps to his own dormitory, shutting her out as she’d unknowingly done to him.
Shutting her out as she'd unknowingly done to him. such emotion! okay, i sound overly dramatic, but its true. please, let this be a happy ending *sobs for lily and james's possibly ruined relationship...)
Author's Response: I liked that excerpt of the chapter most, but I thought I was writing a little too simple compared to the rest of the chapter. However, it seems to have worked out nicely :) I was looking on thesaurus.com for another word to use other than crushed, but I ended up just going with it. Glad you enjoyed & of course Lily will choose James in the end! :P This is a Lily/James. But, it's just a matter of when *grins deviously*
Author's Response: "Oh, Lily" is right. I believe I was shaking my own head when I wrote that.
OH my goodness! Poor James! Evil Michael! Delussional Lily! It's back, yay! Great job, that was very well-written! I can't wait to see what James will say to her. And by the way, them climbing the tree together was really touching.
Author's Response: Thank you :) I was really hoping to just strengthen the bond between the two of them and I really love the idea of climbing a tree, since I, myself, have never really climbed one. I would probably fall and break my neck, so I thought it'd be fun for them to help eachother through it :) Keep reading & hopefully I'll have an update, soon.
Even though I haven’t read chapter eight yet (and I’m still waiting for it to be validated). I’m actually giddy to find out (did I just say that?). I’ve looked at your other work from finding this piece, and I have to say you have improved.
This story is excellent, because it’s so different from the typical love/hate relationship between James and Lily. And it does get old after awhile. You’ve officially gone against the grain, and succeeded. I commend you for that, not many people can do so at mugglenet.
The thing that strikes me about Lily is how you portray her in a subtle light, compared to other James/Lily fics. She doesn’t have glowing red hair with flicks of golden highlights, flowing like a fabulous waterfall. Her eyes aren’t emerald, gold, and brown, captivating everyone who passes by. She’s not the most popular girl in school. She’s not even a virgin. She’s real.
And I love how you make James realistic as well. None of the regular hogwash of him trying to make her jealous by dating another girl (I can’t stand those). He doesn’t immediately sweep Evans off her feet. He’s not a jerk to her. He’s just (so far), a good, loving friend.
I definitely think Mrs. Rowling would approve of this. Keep it up!
The Dancing Carrot.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you :) I certainly hope you'll enjoy Chapter Eight, as I feel it's a huge leap from what I've been building in the previous seven chapters. It's over 3,000 words, so it's not by any means a "short" update. I put a lot of effort into it and hopefully it'll be validated soon. Since starting to write fan fiction, I've realized a LOT of trends in Lily/James fics that takes away from the originality of a piece. Although this concept isn't the "most" original, since Lily's certainly been paired with an abusive boyfriend in other stories, I hoped to add my own touch to it and make it my own. Of all my work, this one truly shows how much my writing has evolved since the Lily and James : Their Story of Love/Potter's Charm days. I absolutely cringe when I look back at those stories. But, they've helped me establish myself and grow as a writer, so I'm finally happy to present everyone with something I actually approve of now. Solace is definitely my baby :)
love it! is there More? I NEED MORE! IT WAS AMAZING!
Oh my goodness, this story is just awesome! PLEASE (pretty please, with a cherry on top) update soon! I like other sotries of yours, but I think this is my favorite fanficiton [ever]! Keep up the amazing work!