Reviews For Ashes
Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 01/29/08 13:20
Chapter: Ashes

Brilliant! I was in absolute panic until the last bit when they all turned on Lucius Malfoy. Got what he deserved really. Just goes to show that you should always be on the right side.

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it (and were surprised by the twist at the end)! I've always had trouble believing Draco Malfoy was irredemable.

Reviewer: Ritter
Date: 05/29/07 18:09
Chapter: Ashes

Wow. Great story. Awesome job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm glad that you liked it!

Reviewer: Mizu No Fukushuu
Date: 05/13/07 18:27
Chapter: Ashes

Very nice. I lked the ending. But, in the letter from Hermione you used 'currant' instead of 'current'. Ja, that's it.

Author's Response: Whoops, I should go fix that, thanks so much for pointing int out. Anyway, I'm glad that (other than the my typo) you liked the story!

Reviewer: LalyW
Date: 07/11/06 14:47
Chapter: Ashes

Interesting storry.Lucius got what he deserved-just thinking to kill your only son is abominable.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review, and I most certainly agree. It is sad what people are willing to sacrifice for their ambitions.

Reviewer: cmwinters
Date: 06/02/06 6:44
Chapter: Ashes

Ah, this was nice. Your detail and specifics here really make this story. Your portrayal of the Dark Lord is fabulous.

About Hermione's letter - there are some typos ("currant" should be "current", and "disapperation" should be "disapparation", and I believe canonically both Apparate & Disapparate are both capitalised, but I wouldn't swear to it.). Hermione is usually terribly formal, so I doubt she'd make such a mistake, and you do have it capitalised later. :)

What the devil did Lucius cast?

I like the twist at the end, that Draco (finally) shows himself to be a TRUE Slytherin, having subtlety and cunning, rather than the petty, spoilt brat he's been portrayed as.

I have no idea who that mysterious cloaked figure is, though...!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I will go and fix those typoes (they were mine, not Hermione's, she is way smarter than I am). Lucius cast a spell of my own invention. It is a searching spell which showed him where people were located within the grounds of Hogwarts. (But he forgot to check outside and missed all the aurors, tut tut Lucius). The cloaked figure was Draco who was waiting for Harry (I didn't want to make it too clear though or it would give the ending away). Sorry about the confusion.

Reviewer: Fae
Date: 04/19/06 11:07
Chapter: Ashes

Very nice. I especially like the tie-in of the title at the end. Dialogue very true to characters, and a very unexpected twist at the end. You've captured Lucius' character perfectly.

Author's Response: Thank you. I was really hoping the plot twist wouldn't be obvious, so I am glad that it seemed to succeed! I appreciate the comments.

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