lol!!! but is that the end?!
there is nothing about ron and hermione getting to gether, its just planning!!
well.. where's the rest of it??
Great! And don't worry about updating...I'm taking a page out of Lisa_Lovegood's book and telling you to "hold the suspence"...
that's not the finished version is it???
This is really good!
Just a note: on the summary, it says this story is finished, but it doesn't look like it's done!
update soon! it's really good. i want to know what the plan is, and what Mafoy is going to do!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it! I'll try to get the next chapter out ASAP!
Cant wait for the next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!
I really like the idea for this fic, I think it has great potential. For the main part I like most of the characterization, but I think that maybe at times it is a bit too deep for sixteen year olds. I really don't think that Ron would admit to anyone, even himself, to being in love with Hermione, as that's a pretty big deal. It is fair enough for them not wanting to ruin their friendship, but I think some of the phrasings would be a bit too old for them. Just a note - when someone's thinking (eg: ‘It must be so easy,’ she thought), you don't have to put it in speech marks, but it is better to put it in italics to show it is thought and to distinguish it from ordinary narration. Also at times I felt a few of the comma's were unnecessary and could be cut out. Other than that I think this could be a really great story, I love the general idea and the interaction with Malfoy. When you said Crabbe and Goyle "had to mark the ends of their wands with different colors in order to know which way to point them" really made me laugh, as did the "Larry Roughter" excuse - the only person thicker than Harry for thinking of it would be Ron for believing it! But he didn't...so I guess it's just Harry then! A nice start, I'll be watching for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism, it's always helpful to know what needs improving so I can make the next chapters better!
Great! I love it. :)