Reviewer: charlie_the_moose
Date: 06/28/07 10:42
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

I do like your SS one-shots - I think that (if you ever were to write one) you would be the perfect person to write about his life after the murder of Prof. Dumbledore.
Charlie ;)

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 06/25/06 14:40
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

This was really great. I particularly liked the idea of Voldemort having Severus punish Draco. Punish them both in one shot, that seems so like him. Really, really well done.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I do like to write Voldemort--I think because he's just such a classic baddy. :-D

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 06/11/06 14:10
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

a bit vague, and I think you should continue! good story!

Author's Response: Sorry it seemed vague--hopefully in the future, if I ever get around to continuing, I can clear things up! Thanks for your comment!

Reviewer: songbook99
Date: 05/16/06 18:35
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

Wow, N, what a great look into the mind of Severus Snape. You do a wonderful job examining his character in this story. Of course, you do a great job with all of the other characters as well. Your rendition of Voldemort is really spot on. He would definitely lull his Death Eaters into thinking he was truly merciful only to pull them back in by making one torture another. Likewise, you do a good job with both Draco and Narcissa as they would only be willing to offer themselves in place of the other. Neither one would make that offer for anyone else. My favorite part about the whole opening scene, though, had to be the little twist you have there about Severus' two masters being Voldemort and Narcissa. I never saw that coming.

The only thing I noticed which might've enhanced that opening scene was an order from Voldemort to Narcissa about having to watch Severus torture Draco. That just seems like the type of thing Voldemort would do to ensure she saw it and didn't turn away. He would want that type of vengeance as well for her going to Severus to help her save her son. Plus, I think it would've added a nice little twist to the whole bit about Severus having to be the one to torture Draco. Other than that, though, I couldn't see any possible improvements on anything else.

Your ending was also really great. I really enjoyed the way you brought Fawkes into the story. Having Fawkes fly to where Severus was to heal his body so that he would be able to withstand whatever was to come really is a fabulous idea. Of course, you raise the question about what exactly Fawkes' role will be in what is to come by writing that he will have a crucial role. It really leaves a lot up to the imagination of the reader at the end of the story. What a really magnificent way to end. I thoroughly enjoyed this story and am glad I read it. I'm just sorry it took me so long to finally read and review some of your material. Now, it will be hard to keep me away!

Author's Response: And I'm sorry it took me so long to say thanks for reviewing! I really appreciate your comments, though. So thank you!

Reviewer: Nostalgic128
Date: 04/30/06 18:17
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

oh excellent!!! i loved it! please continue this story!!! its written very very well and it's really interesting to read a story from snape's point of view.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm trying to get back to it, but I'm a bit stuck about where to go from here. Lol, hopefully the plot bunny will return when I'm done with the two other stories I've obligated myself to write. Thanks for the kind words!

Reviewer: Grainne
Date: 04/19/06 14:07
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

I'm so pleased to see this posted! The emotional impact is still there for me, even after the third or fourth reading. As SIW said, I feel lucky lucky lucky! ;-)

Author's Response: You're the best, Grainne! I can't wait to meet you at Lumos!

Reviewer: SeaIsleWitch
Date: 04/18/06 19:49
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

Excellent! The ending was soothing. I was afraid Draco's punishment was going to be the death of Narcissa. Whew! I'm so glad you didn't go that route! *smiles* Well written, as always, Lunafish. Grainne is one lucky pirate-witch! - SIW

Author's Response: Thank you you so much for reviewing, and sorry for me taking so long to respond. About Narcissa: the thing is, I can't believe that Voldemort would start killing off his followers without a pretty good reason. I think a better way for him to maintain order would be to rely on a combination of intimidation/punishment and reward--with punishments being reasonable enough not to alienate his other followers. My evidence? Snape is still alive after the end of Book 4.

Reviewer: SomeGuyFawkes
Date: 04/18/06 19:44
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

Thanks for the story but if we have to believe that Snape is working for good, we should at least get to see Draco tortured!

After all the insidiously twisted torments that Snape inflicted on Harry, Draco's reward should be described in exquisite detail.

(Or at least have him doing lines, or something ... "I will kill my teachers in a timely manner.   I will kill my teachers in a timely manner. ...".)

Anyway, your fictions are always good for an enjoyable few minutes, thanks again.

Author's Response: LOL! I very much enjoyed your review! Thank you for taking the time to comment; I'm just sorry it took me so long to respond!

Reviewer: PuppetPal
Date: 04/18/06 18:13
Chapter: What Follows Betrayal

Interesting story about Snape and his views. I didn't really get the ending, though.

Author's Response: Yes, I did leave things pretty up in the air with this story. Sorry about that. Sometimes it's fun to leave things open, though--esp. with Snape, who is already such an ambiguous character.

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