Reviews For A Game of Wizard
Reviewer: Lylian
Date: 08/08/07 4:55
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

WOW.. that was super weird. But in a good way. What a tease!

Reviewer: BlackClaude
Date: 06/24/07 15:00
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

This is a very cute story! I really like what you did with Cho and Ron. This was a nice, realistic way to get them together, starting with Cho's insecurities about Hermione and ending with Ron's insecurities about himself. I love the way you had Cho talk him up without sounding patronizing, and the kiss was perfect, short and sweet. Anything more than that would have been too disloyal to Harry, so that was just the right touch of attraction to put into a compassionate gesture.


As for the mechanics, I found some sentences to be a bit choppy and fragmented. For instance, I would turn these two into one sentence by joining them with a comma: She was, by all standards, perfect. From her shiny raven mane to her delicate figure. Also, there were several sentences in the dialogue that need question marks, like "Have you missed the fact that she's probably the most clever student in the whole school." and "You really sell yourself short, don't you." There were some misspellings and grammar errors too, so I would recommend getting a beta to help with those. You have a great writing style and story, so cleaning up the mechanics will really let that come through more.


Great job with a rare pair, I really enjoyed this!

Reviewer: hpfreak519
Date: 07/16/06 19:31
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

that was really good. i'm an R/H shipper, but now i might be aa R/C shipper. that was really cute =]

Reviewer: Harrison West VH
Date: 07/13/06 2:30
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

OMG! Okay, so maybe I don't hate you anymore. *adds you to my AUTHOR'S favourites now instead* Well. For someone who is in love with Hr.R, H.G, and Hr.G, you really got me with this one. I hope you feel loved, you know, since you're the only author with a Harris!Review. And I'm Reviewme!Stalin back on my FF site.

Reviewer: Avenger_of_Dumbldore
Date: 06/28/06 9:44
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

"From her shiny raven mane to her delicate figure." what do you mean by a Raven Mane?
First off, very good. I like the transition in the relashinship, how it went from stranger, to freind, to more then that. I like the way it wasn't to mushy, but was still about love. I also liked the way you made up the game, WIZARD. It was very creative. Other then that, a few mistakes:

"The guy who saved the very Wizard World before he was out of diapers, the hero of Hogwarts or his goof ball loser friend."
I think you mean every instead of very

besides that, great job. Keep it up!

Reviewer: Fly to Dawn
Date: 06/28/06 6:33
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

I love the guilty pleasure of this story...;)
Ron will have to take his secret to the grave indeed!
I assume that Ron still does like Hermione, but Cho likes Ron and......you know, I think this really reflects teenage relationships.
First Ron/Cho fic I've ever read, but it's very good. The 'Game of WIZARD' idea was very original too.
A sweet fic :D

Reviewer: 4evahpluva17
Date: 06/17/06 10:01
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

cute!

Reviewer: Phoebe Gruzelier
Date: 06/02/06 9:07
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

Wow!
Very thought provoking!
I really liked it and I'm a die-hard Ron/Hermione fan!

Reviewer: KenTuck
Date: 05/25/06 17:10
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

This is very interesting and intriquing. I think that this could maybe happen. Cho is very brave, although would she want to kiss two best friends? I really liked it.

Reviewer: KenTuck
Date: 05/25/06 17:09
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

This is very interesting and intriquing. I think that this could maybe happen. Cho is very brave, although would she want to kiss two best friends? I really liked it.

Reviewer: gingercat
Date: 05/20/06 20:08
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

aaaaaw. Ron is Wonderful. And I am a Harry Fan.

Reviewer: atkarid
Date: 04/17/06 16:33
Chapter: A Game of Wizard

Wow! I've never read a Ron/Cho fic, and I liked this, even though I'm not a shipper! Nicely written! The dialogue was perfect! Maybe you could add in some description on what they were doing in the middle. Maybe like "she smirked" or "he rolled his eyes". Also, "That's W-I-Z-A, two more and." should be hyphanated, but I'm being too critical, aren't I? Anyways, great job!

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