Reviewer: Seer_Witch
Date: 10/16/08 16:13
Chapter: Moony, Padfoot, Prongs and Wormtail?

That was....so fucking amazing. How do you write like that? I loved that soo much. I liked the line about Remus especially; "James will be gone, Sirius will be jailed, Remus's life will be lifelessa and failed, the one always doubted, the one always teased, will be the betrayer, the Dark Lord he'll please." The one about their fates...THAT was my favorite line. Keep it up, babe! You rule!

Reviewer: Seer_Witch
Date: 12/11/07 19:26
Chapter: Moony, Padfoot, Prongs and Wormtail?

Ahh, loved it! I wish I could write poetry (or anything else) like that!!!! Keep writing; you rock at it!

~Aya Braxton~

Reviewer: HermyRox12
Date: 04/23/06 20:53
Chapter: Moony, Padfoot, Prongs and Wormtail?

This is a mix of emotions. Parts like 'the coward who wet his pants' make you laugh, while others 'will be the betrayer' bring a tear to your eye. A good poem includes all of these. YOu did a great job. I think that you could change the part where they say 'That what they do is always wrong.' to 'That what they do is usually wrong.' This would be better because they can't always be wrong. Usually would make more sense. That is the only thing I could find. Over all this was a great poem and I really liked it.


Author's Response: thank you so much for the review! I'll try to remember that if I'm ever writing another marauder poem...=)

Reviewer: mcclure_512
Date: 04/18/06 16:28
Chapter: Moony, Padfoot, Prongs and Wormtail?

I definately enjoyed this poem. The line about Peter wetting his pants made me laugh, and what more can I ask for? Just a suggestion that you might like to consider, is to group the poem into stanza's. I think it could read better that way, and it also helps to lay emphasis on rhyme in a poem like this. Anyways, thank you for the enjoyable read, and good luck with writing more poetry.

Author's Response: thank you so much for your review...it made my day! =)

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