Reviews For Invictus
Reviewer: poisened_pink
Date: 05/03/06 14:12
Chapter: Invictus

u haft to write more

Reviewer: Khrys
Date: 05/01/06 15:56
Chapter: Invictus

Excellent bunny idea!

Reviewer: Hogwarts_chick
Date: 04/28/06 21:22
Chapter: Invictus

aww....adorable story. It's just incredibly depressing how all their (James' and Lily's) dreams were crushed. All in one night...

Reviewer: Potter Girl
Date: 04/25/06 18:37
Chapter: Invictus

But Lily only had Harry before she was killed, and Harry was 1.

Reviewer: tonks_667
Date: 04/25/06 4:19
Chapter: Invictus

Ohhhh...... So sad. Ohhhh..... or maybe it's this story and listening to a sad song at the same time shouldn't be done. You made me cry *sob*

Reviewer: myth_of_beauty
Date: 04/24/06 18:06
Chapter: Invictus

One word. WOW!

Reviewer: RedheadObsession
Date: 04/23/06 20:05
Chapter: Invictus

Aww I liked that..

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 04/22/06 19:42
Chapter: Invictus

Oh my gosh! My jaw completely dropped when Lily mentioned Harry! That is soo soo sad but it was really a lovely piece. I've wondered about the possibility before. Nicely written, I like how you started with James and the image of the three of them dozing on the couch together was very sweet.

Reviewer: Lilypudding
Date: 04/22/06 19:03
Chapter: Invictus

This is a really good story. I think it's a really original idea. You read a lot of stories where Lily is pregnant with Harry, but this idea is original. I think the story was absolutely great and error free, though the paragraph where James is babbling probably should have been split up into two or more paragraphs, as it currently isn't exactly easy on the eye. However, I really liked the nice twist where Harry could have been an older brother. At the same time, this story really saddens me that James and Lily never got to see their second child, and the baby never had a chance at life. Great job for a one-shot, though!

Reviewer: Winky
Date: 04/22/06 17:18
Chapter: Invictus

ah.. how exciting!! i always thought james and lily would have other kids besides harry, cuz i always think james wanted to have his own quidditch team.. lol. this just fits perfectly into it.. only they die.. thats one of the many reason i don't read fan fics about when they're married, it reminds me that they're going to die.. o well.. great story though!!!

Reviewer: i love prongs
Date: 04/22/06 16:25
Chapter: Invictus

wow i love it at fist i thought it was lily telling james she was preggers wiv harry and then it turned out harry had already been born wow

Reviewer: mugglegurl
Date: 04/22/06 14:35
Chapter: Invictus

When I first read that Lily told James her news, I thought she was telling him she was pregnant with Harry, but then you bring Harry into play. A really neat twist. I always wondered if maybe Harry had a sibling that he didn't know about. 10/10

Reviewer: teddy240b
Date: 04/22/06 14:17
Chapter: Invictus

A really good short

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