Reviews For The Bad Girl
Reviewer: Xain
Date: 12/08/04 13:34
Chapter: New Girl in Town

this is great

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: Atarwyn
Date: 12/08/04 13:02
Chapter: New Girl in Town

Hey Daniela. Do you like Humor Fics? I just wrote me 1st one and I want to know what you think. It's called "The Fellowship of the Granger." Please tell me what you think and what I can do to make it better! :-D

Author's Response: Sure. I luv Humor fics. I'll read it right now. I'm sure it'll be good.

Author's Response: Further respone: I really liked this. I left a review, but in case you're looking here, it's really good. It was pretty funny, and with a little more editing, it'll be even better. Good luck!

Reviewer: Atarwyn
Date: 12/08/04 0:24
Chapter: Chapter 4

Bravo! I liked it. But not as good as your last one. I have faith that the farther you go the better the story will be, and thats the way you want it! So that means your doing good! Keep it up! A 9 I think would be good for this page!

Author's Response: Thanks. I actually didn't think I wrote as well as the last chapter earlier, but I tried! I hope the next one will be better!

Reviewer: LavenderMoon
Date: 12/07/04 19:46
Chapter: First Date

sweet, sadly even though draco is hot he would never be sooo guiless with a girl, lets face it few even real guys are. remember to keep with the characters original theme, but it does stand for alteration here and there....keep up the good work!

Reviewer: Jules
Date: 12/07/04 9:44
Chapter: First Date

Shows improvement... Keep it up ^^^

Reviewer: Atarwyn
Date: 12/06/04 21:14
Chapter: First Date

WOW! Sooooo much better!! I would think that you write fics all the time! Keep it comming!!!! I think a 10 for this page!

Author's Response: Yay!! Thank you. More is coming soon so stay tuned!

Reviewer: Loonylovegood426
Date: 12/06/04 19:56
Chapter: First Date

Oooh! That story was H-O-T! I wanna kiss Draco and have a 'surge of passion through out my veins' (or however you said it)! Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks! And that's about how I described it!!!!!!

Reviewer: Loonylovegood426
Date: 12/05/04 14:22
Chapter: First Rule Broken

I'd have to say, it's pretty good, I like it, I just wanna know what happens on their date (lol)

Author's Response: Well, you'll find out in the 3rd chapter which I'm working on. You'll have to wait and see!

Reviewer: Versaci
Date: 12/05/04 9:00
Chapter: First Rule Broken

Good job! Keep it up. And Alanna is Right, Draco is drop dead gorgeous

Author's Response: Thanks, and LOL! (I Know, he is drop dead gorgeous!)

Reviewer: Versaci
Date: 12/04/04 18:35
Chapter: New Girl in Town

I agree with the others, a lot more describing and slowing down should do the trick!

Author's Response: Thanks. I'm working on that as I'm working on the 3rd chapter!

Reviewer: leslie8907
Date: 12/04/04 14:55
Chapter: First Rule Broken

Good story! Keep going!

Author's Response: Thanks, I will. Look for the second and third chapters soon!

Reviewer: leslie8907
Date: 12/04/04 14:44
Chapter: First Rule Broken

Reviewing for chapter..

Reviewer: Jules
Date: 12/04/04 12:00
Chapter: New Girl in Town

It's rather rushed, and lacks of background for your character... otherwise, I think it's going to be pretty interesting. I'll await your 2nd chapter with much anticipation ^^

Author's Response: Thank you for your comments. This is my first fic and everything, so it'll get better I promise! Keep reading.

Reviewer: Atarwyn
Date: 12/03/04 15:34
Chapter: New Girl in Town

I like it so far. Keep up the good work. And like Vampired_Veela said slow down and tell us a lil' about the people you're writing about. I want to know why Alanna ran away!? I give you a 8 on this round. Cheers -Atarwyn

Author's Response: Thanks for the comments. This is my first fic, so I'm still trying to get the hang of it! Keep reading - I'm just rewriting the 2nd chapter, should be up soon.

Reviewer: vampired_veela
Date: 12/03/04 14:38
Chapter: New Girl in Town

Its not a bad story but it seems like its a little rushed. Try to add more into a chapter like background info, detail, maybe a little less talking, ect. I have always been told that the best storys are very describtive(sp). Keep writing though, you'll get better them more you practice.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for your constructive comments. They helped, and I will slow down in future, as I'm working on the 3rd chapter. Hope you stay tuned!

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