this is great
Author's Response: Thank you.
Hey Daniela. Do you like Humor Fics? I just wrote me 1st one and I want to know what you think. It's called "The Fellowship of the Granger." Please tell me what you think and what I can do to make it better! :-D
Author's Response: Sure. I luv Humor fics. I'll read it right now. I'm sure it'll be good.
Author's Response: Further respone: I really liked this. I left a review, but in case you're looking here, it's really good. It was pretty funny, and with a little more editing, it'll be even better. Good luck!
Bravo! I liked it. But not as good as your last one. I have faith that the farther you go the better the story will be, and thats the way you want it! So that means your doing good! Keep it up! A 9 I think would be good for this page!
Author's Response: Thanks. I actually didn't think I wrote as well as the last chapter earlier, but I tried! I hope the next one will be better!
sweet, sadly even though draco is hot he would never be sooo guiless with a girl, lets face it few even real guys are. remember to keep with the characters original theme, but it does stand for alteration here and there....keep up the good work!
Shows improvement... Keep it up ^^^
WOW! Sooooo much better!! I would think that you write fics all the time! Keep it comming!!!! I think a 10 for this page!
Author's Response: Yay!! Thank you. More is coming soon so stay tuned!
Oooh! That story was H-O-T! I wanna kiss Draco and have a 'surge of passion through out my veins' (or however you said it)! Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks! And that's about how I described it!!!!!!
I'd have to say, it's pretty good, I like it, I just wanna know what happens on their date (lol)
Author's Response: Well, you'll find out in the 3rd chapter which I'm working on. You'll have to wait and see!
Good job! Keep it up. And Alanna is Right, Draco is drop dead gorgeous
Author's Response: Thanks, and LOL! (I Know, he is drop dead gorgeous!)
I agree with the others, a lot more describing and slowing down should do the trick!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm working on that as I'm working on the 3rd chapter!
Good story! Keep going!
Author's Response: Thanks, I will. Look for the second and third chapters soon!
Reviewing for chapter..
It's rather rushed, and lacks of background for your character... otherwise, I think it's going to be pretty interesting. I'll await your 2nd chapter with much anticipation ^^
Author's Response: Thank you for your comments. This is my first fic and everything, so it'll get better I promise! Keep reading.
I like it so far. Keep up the good work. And like Vampired_Veela said slow down and tell us a lil' about the people you're writing about. I want to know why Alanna ran away!? I give you a 8 on this round. Cheers -Atarwyn
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments. This is my first fic, so I'm still trying to get the hang of it! Keep reading - I'm just rewriting the 2nd chapter, should be up soon.
Its not a bad story but it seems like its a little rushed. Try to add more into a chapter like background info, detail, maybe a little less talking, ect. I have always been told that the best storys are very describtive(sp). Keep writing though, you'll get better them more you practice.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for your constructive comments. They helped, and I will slow down in future, as I'm working on the 3rd chapter. Hope you stay tuned!