Wow. Great imagery! Also, you have s great vocabulary, too. Most kids your (our, sort of) age talk like, "wow, cool, sup ya'll!" (That would be in real life, not in reviews or anything.) It is good to know some people actually use real words! (Not that anyone on this site doesn't...I mean, really, find me a poem with the word 'sup' in it and I'll give you a hundred bucks...it is just that the words you used were perfect.)
My favorite part:
Taking their time carefully,
Yeah. So, good job, and I hope you write more poetry! (Though if you don't, it's all right. I guess. :-))
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
This made me sob.
-adds to favorites list-
Author's Response: Oh, thank you sweetie. XD I'm glad you appreciated it that much.
Nice poem, I decided to read something else of yours after I liked the Sirius one. Who is she? Was she really guilty? I like the whole hopelessness of the poem, but it's really sad. It reminds me vaguely of Curley's wife in Mice and Men, how she is described towards the end, even though it's different. Great job!
Author's Response: No one knows who she is...not even me! Basically, she's a prisinor who's done something horrible, and now has to face the consequences. Thanks for your review!
The way you wrote this is quite powerful, and the wording demonstrates the meaning of the poem very well. My favourite part is "No one will listen to her,
No one will look at her,
No one will pity her,
No one will love her."
Simple, but very effective. It's straight to the point and makes the reader feel a bit of her pain. The ending ties in lovely with the tone you used throughout the poem. In addition, I love the imagery you scattered throughout it! From the tattered white gown down to the slippery golden pearls... very beautiful description. Overall, I thought this was an excellent read! Great work!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I'm very flattered and delighted at the moment. Thanks again!
This is such a great poem! I really like your descriptions of the maiden. This poem told a story perfectly. It differs a lot from the poems you often see (and the ones I'm guilty of writing) describing love. This was a great poem!
Author's Response: Thank you! You don't know how much I appreciate your review. I'm very happy that you enjoyed it! You can look for a new poem coming from me pretty soon! Thanks again!
I'll give you more than 30 seconds, my friend. Geez, I'll even take the time to use proper grammar and spelling. =) So, your poem. For the most part, I enjoyed it. I thought it was well thought out and easily read. I like how you kept the identity of this "innocent looking" woman a secret, and I also like the way you describe her thoughts and reflections. I think a 9/10, which from me is an extremely good review. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind review! I'm flattered that you took the time. Thanks again!