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Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 08/19/07 17:57 · For: Bittersweet Revenge

This was such a great story, I loved that Neville was able to do what he did, but also to feel the remorse for doing it. You did such a great job writing his thought processes, and I wanted to let you know it made me proud of him. In the summary, you wrote about him being weak, stupid, and frail. In contrast to that, he was so strong to know what he needed to do next. Excellent portrayal of Neville.
I have a question for you that has nothing to do with this story, but with a banner you made for another one. SomberBallad__Point of no Return, Who is the girl in the banner? I know she looks familiar, but I canít place her. It is going to nag at me until I can either figure it out, or someone (you maybe) tells me who she is. Thanks ahead of time if you decide to answer.

Name: DogLover4Life (Signed) · Date: 02/03/07 18:50 · For: Bittersweet Revenge
That was wonderful. I had guessed it was about Neville when I read the summary. Your characterization of Neville was amazing. I felt as if I had stepped inside his mind and was watching the thoughts bounce off each other. Poor Neville, he's brave and no one cares. Except us I mean.

Author's Response: Wow! Good guessing! Thanks for the compliment! And yes, all of us care for Neville. *hugs Neville* Thanks for reviewing!

Name: Periwinkle (Signed) · Date: 08/01/06 10:32 · For: Bittersweet Revenge
What a great portrayal of Neville. I must admit that this is the first fic that I have read featuring him, and I am impressed with your skill. You write as if you really know Neville, which is lovely. Many authors think they know a character but when they write one, they'll find out that they're not as good as they thought they'd be. You, however, write Neville perfectly and that is refreshing to see as many author have a particularly hard time with him.

Your description is also noteworthy. You choose vivid words and place them in a place where they'll be most effective. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks, Anna! I sorta like character studies, so yeah... and most of the vocabulary credit has to go to my BETA. But I'm glad you thought the characterization was good. Thanks!

Name: DreamingOfRon (Signed) · Date: 06/05/06 16:41 · For: Bittersweet Revenge
Very lovely, I was crossed between feeling sorrow and happiness. A very, very good story.

Author's Response: Thanks!!!

Name: coppercurls (Signed) · Date: 04/29/06 11:11 · For: Bittersweet Revenge
This is very well done, you really have captured the spirit of Neville, rather than just showing him as a stereotype. Bravo.
A few nitpicks- You should go look back over the tenses, in some places it gets a little vauge as to what has happened when. Also, it seems like these two lines are in contridiction, "Maybe if he didnít get to hurt her the first time he fought her, she wouldnít have killed his parents." and "Not that he did feel her blood, but he had destroyed her in a gruesome way: the same way she had almost killed his parents.", or maybe it is just me and the way I read it.
You do an excellent job in presenting the way Neville is trying to reclaim his humanity, I particularly like the part where you say, " And reincarnate into the old Neville.", because I believe the old Neville was not the worthless boy many people thought. Besides, you do well at showing the (Griffendor) courage it takes to go back and face the past after a mistake.
This was truely a joy to read.

Author's Response: Thanks you! I guess I should've been more specific on those two lines... they were referring to two events that happened, that were almost the same thing. Thanks for the review!

Name: DARKEST ROSE (Signed) · Date: 04/17/06 13:59 · For: Bittersweet Revenge
I loved it. It was written very well. I would love to see Neville get his revenge. Bellatrix is so evil.

Author's Response: Thanks! Umm.. Neville sort of already got his revenge, but if you mean as a prequal... I was thinking about it. Maybe... but thanks for the review!

Name: DARKEST ROSE (Signed) · Date: 04/17/06 13:58 · For: Bittersweet Revenge
I loved it. It was written very well. I would love to see Neville get his revenge. Bellatrix is so evil.

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