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Name: enchantedsleeper (Signed) · Date: 07/29/11 14:12 · For: one-shot
Awww, excellent writing, truly heart-rending. :( "Do what you have to do little brother, but then you come back." BUT HE DIDN'T *bawls eyes out*

Author's Response: I know! I wish Sirius could have found out what his brother tried to do in the end.

Name: LunaforGryffindor (Signed) · Date: 07/23/08 8:41 · For: one-shot
You put into writing a scene I had always imagined and you did an incredibly good job of it!
Both Sirius and Regulus are perfectly in character, and you managed to portrait their tense relationship wonderfully in so few lines. I think you kept a good balance between the two brothers, neither one is 'stealing the scene'. Moreover, they are complex and believable, which is not easy to achieve!
I also like very much the glimpses of other characters, like the promise James demands from Sirius - that's so like Prongs - and that Sirius chooses to comfort his brother the way Lily comforts him...
It's the kind of story that makes you want to re-read it from time to time.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I am so pleased it lived up to your ideas of what would have happened. I suppose I could have kept it more canon by having Sirius obliviated at the end, but I wanted them to have that connection, to think that something lasting could have come of it. I hope that if you do come back to re-read it that it withstands further scrutiny.Thanks again for taking the time to review...you haven't quite made my day, since it's been a good one anyway, but finding your review was the perfect way to finish it!

Name: aub_1344 (Signed) · Date: 05/20/08 23:27 · For: one-shot
Wonderful writing! You included some really insightful and creative details that made it much more believable and interesting to read. The inner dialog of both brothers added a lot as well I think.

Author's Response: Thank you, you have made my morning. A "you have a review" e-mail is my favourite kind to get. I hadn't thought about the inner dialogue thing before, it just kind of happened. I think this is the only thing I've ever written where I can go back a year later and not cringe at the awfulness, which is good.

Name: mugglefan22 (Signed) · Date: 03/31/08 9:13 · For: one-shot
Wow i love the way this fic is written and how you show that even though they took differnt paths at the end of the day they were still brothers! 10/10 Well done i really enjoyed reading it!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you liked it. I wish we knew a little more about Regulus from the books, I think he would be very interesting.

Name: Biscuits (Signed) · Date: 06/10/07 4:41 · For: one-shot
I liked this fic, I think Sirius and Regulus interacted well with each other, and both were characterised well. It was a pretty dark fic in some respects, but that reflects well the atmosphere of the time it was set during. The thoughts of both were also well written to supplement their speech.

There were a few small errors, mainly in capitalisation, Order wasn't capitalised in a few places and Dark Mark should be capitalised as well. Other than that, it was a really nice fic and I liked it a lot!

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to read this and review - sorry for taking so long to respond. I'm glad you liked it, but I'll go back and change those capitilisations now.

Name: Aschere (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 17:48 · For: one-shot
This is actually very good. Very good. I love the tense relationship you've created between Sirius and Regulus. It's exactly how I imagined it to be. Fantastic story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm pleased that the relationship between them came across that way. Part of me thought that they wouldn't have seen each other for ages and ages so maybe they wouldn't have much in common. Or been close as kids. But whatever, that's how I wrote them. Thanks for your encouragement.

Name: Aschere (Signed) · Date: 05/02/07 17:48 · For: one-shot
This is actually very good. Very good. I love the tense relationship you've created between Sirius and Regulus. It's exactly how I imagined it to be. Fantastic story!

Name: MJ_Padfoot (Signed) · Date: 03/24/07 18:20 · For: one-shot
Amazing! I love this! I have always wondered how Regulus went to the locket. Amazing job! ~MJ

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you found my version believable. Looking back now I think it may be overly sentimental, but never mind.

Name: Madame Marauder (Signed) · Date: 12/02/06 13:20 · For: one-shot
I liked this side of Sirius; both rash and angry, but also forgiving and loving. You could truly tell that they were brothers, in their hearts, despite all the animosity that had come between them. I found it touching that Regulus-- RAB -- came to Sirius before his mission. I felt it to be a bittersweet ending for him, asking forgiveness, and getting it, before he died.

As to Sirius' characterization, I found it to be in character, one-hundred percent. The initial rage, the threat. The discussion, the advice and the forgiveness. All perfectly Sirius. In this one-shot, you managed to capture broody Sirius, without making him Angsty!Sirius. I loved how he was able to express emotion-- love and sympathy-- toward his brother. If only he had been able to show the same to Severus in Order of the Pheonix.

Very good story, I adored the narrative and imagery.

Author's Response: Oh wow!! Someone is still reading this! *does happy dance, then gets herself under control* Thank you so much for your very kind comments, they have made my morning. Personally, I'm not sure whether I would have wanted Sirius to forgive Snape - but I suppose if he had he might still be alive, which would be a plus.

Name: PadfootsGirl_722 (Signed) · Date: 04/26/06 20:35 · For: one-shot
i really liked this! it was a great little fic your a really talented writer have you written any other stories i could check out? keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks! This is the first thing I have written, and I'm really busy at the moment, but I may write something in the future if I have any ideas that seem worth pursuing.

Name: Blossomlily (Signed) · Date: 04/25/06 23:25 · For: one-shot

This was an incredibly well-written story. I'm surprised that it's got just one review. You've really got Sirius in character and your Regulus is the best one I've ever read. That was a powerful beginning instrumental in drawing the reader in. I enjoyed it from the beginning to the end, though the mood throughout was wonderfully morbid.

I do have a few nitpicks, though. “We’re brothers Sirius.” There needs to be a comma between 'brothers' and 'Sirius'. Also, words like Death Eater and Muggle need to have the first letter capitalized. Other than that, there were no technical faults, which is incredible. :)

I admit, I never thought it would be about Regulus's stealing the Horcrux. The lines where he was introduced and the way Sirius reacted on seeing him were very good. I thought the promise James forced Sirius to make was exactly what he would do. I liked the closing line Sirius was left with more to consider than simply who the traitor within the Order was. Overall, I think this was a superb fic, with many well-written twists. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review - I really appreciate you putting the time in to write such a well-thought out response. If I can work out how, I'll make the corrections you pointed out :-S.

Name: occlumens (Signed) · Date: 04/14/06 17:49 · For: one-shot
That's quite sad. Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks - I was originally going for vaguely uplifting, but somehow it didn't quite come out that way. Canon rather limits the option of having a 'happy' ending there though. Thanks for reviewing.

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