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Name: Cruciatus Love (Signed) · Date: 04/29/06 8:06 · For: one-shot
I really liked this piece as it showed the background of a character we don't really know about. Plus, it was funny!

Here are just a few things I picked up:

For this part, "I know I canít eat, but I donít mind. As long as I can smell the food, I can imagine the delicious taste in my mouth" you would think that if he can't eat, he can't smell. I always thought ghosts couldn't use any of their senses. Well, they can hear but...but...I still don't think they can smell.

When Hagrid says, "But it ainít fair! I hate my life." I don't think he would say the "I hate my life" part. I love how well his dialogue fits how it is in the book, but I just don't think it's in Hagrid's personality to say he hates his life.

For the last part about the lesson on the founders of Hogwarts, I think it is a little more likely that the first or second years should be learning about that.

Overall though, I really liked your characterization of Binns. I thought it was kind of amusing how his mind trailed off in different directions all the time, as that is how most people really do think. Great job!

Author's Response: Wow! I'm glad you like it. I'll try to fix it up. I think they can smell. The only reason they can't eat is because the food would fall right through them. I'll try to change the 'I hate my life' part to something more...Hagrid-ish. About the Founders Lesson, maybe they are learning more in-depth stuff. Like learning how they met, and their lives. The first and second years would just learn about their traits, if that makes any sence. Thanks for the review. HermyRox12


Name: Mind_Over_Matter (Signed) · Date: 04/22/06 20:18 · For: one-shot

^^ I love your Professor Binns! I don't suppose I've ever read a story about a ghost actually liking being a ghost. 'Cept Myrtle, but she's just weird. Nor have I ever read a story focused on Professor Binns.


In particular, I think the characterisation was very unique - I can just hear him telling jokes in the monotonous droning voice described in the books. The only thing was - does he actually ever talk to students? When Hedwig appeared at the window, injured and Harry wanted to take her to Hagrid, Binns called him Perkins and looked at him as though he'd 'never really seen a student before.' Just a thought.


Otherwise, I like this story very much. The lighter side of good Harry Potter fanfiction is fun ;)

~MOM

Author's Response: I'm glad you love him. Myrtle is quite weird, but you can't blame her. Well, it is up to the fan to assume that he talks/notices the students or not. Every once in a while, teachers do mix up names, but I think he sort of knows the students. I'm very glad you liked this story. It was really fun to write. ~HermyRox12



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