Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 11/01/07 21:15
Chapter: One-shot

Woah. Creepy. That would have been so scary! And it was so sad, this fic! But the ending was hopeful, sort of. So great! Poor Percy, poor Mrs. Weasley! A really interesting, and very well done fic!

Author's Response: Wow, thaks. This was the first story I posted on this site and I'm quite fond of it. So imagine my surpise to find a lovely new review. Thanks so much for your thoughts.

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 12/26/06 16:41
Chapter: One-shot

That was a very good read, Gonz!

I really liked the plot. Molly Weasley among Muggles? *shakes head* That was a very good idea you had with Percy, and tying it all together.

The minister killed Harry? *gasps!* He's terrible! That's also a very good aspect of this story, the creativity.

I love the way that you tied all of it together.. Percy coming back, The Minister's Betrayal, The Healer... everything.

And when Percy and Mrs. Weasley get back together as a family again (and they're the only ones left! What happened?) it was just priceless. And the way that you did it, through the sending back the sweaters!

I really like the emotions, and the portrayal of the characters that you dealt with while writing it. That must have been some plot bunny, I never could have pulled off a Percy fic.

Miriam turned and looked at the man standing behind her, “Are you sure there are no other options, Minister?”

"She watched her family die, she is clearly insane. You saw her.”


That's beautiful writing. And SAD. I would have hated to be in that position...

Your summary is what drew the story to me. No one wants to read a bad summary, and you wrote one for this story wonderfully. Great!

This was a very great read. Te he, and guess what? *whispers* I'm your Secret Santa...LOL! If this wasn't a good enough review for you, I would be glad to do another for you!

I just would like to say, again, that I loved it. Very creative, well-written... I'm just might check out some more of your stories! (And Review! Te he!)

I hope that you had a great and Merry Christmas, and have a nice rest of the day!

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: *Gives big Badger hug to Secret Santa* Thank you for a wonderful present! As for the rest of the Weasley family they died in the Final Battle. I needed them dead for the plot to work and that was the simpliest solution. I glad you liked the Minister killing Harry because that was a aspect I thought of after the fic was almost completely finished. Now I'm glad I did because I can't picture this fic without it. Thanks again for a wonderful present and I hope you have a great new year!

Reviewer: Roxy Black
Date: 05/31/06 12:48
Chapter: One-shot

Oh My! Scrimgeour killed Harry? That is shocking!

Ok, and into my review... I really liked the plotline, government conspiracies and the war seem like a good pairing. The set up was great, splitting the dialogue with the details about the war worked well, although personally I would've liked to see a bit more discription in this section. Just any details that could help create the image clearly in your readers head would be great!

The whole fiction was very fast paced and I think a bit more detail would help to slow it down a little and let the reader become attached to your characters. Molly is a very warm character and Percy is less so, to make Percy's discovery of his mother even more profound we need to feel what he is feeling.

Overall, a very good story! The ending left me wondering what Percy would do about Scrimgeour and the twist was truly unexpected! Poor Molly, seeing what she did and then being thrown out of the wizarding world! Congratulations on your great fiction!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing my fellow Badger! I will definately take note of your advice about adding description and slowing down for future stories. Maybe I also shoudn't write challenge fics at the last minute, if the rushed feeling is showing through. Some of my favorite stories are were the author leaves you thinking, so I glad you are.

Reviewer: Khrys
Date: 05/12/06 14:39
Chapter: One-shot

Phew. It made me cry a bit. I wish you would do a bit of a follow up. I would love to read more about the connection between the Minister and Harry. I would also like to see Percy's actions after he promises his Mum not to leave. Excellent Story!!

Author's Response: More? Oh gosh I don't know. As for the connection I kind of see it this way. The minister has been begging Harry to support the ministry all his 6th year. I think this is because it would help him gain more power in the wizarding world. Now if Harry deafeats Voldemort he is now considered the most powerful person out there. The minister knows Harry's veiws on the ministry, which don't bode well for him. So to protect his own power he kills Harry. As for Percy I left that open ended on purpose. What do you think he is going to do? Can he learn from his mistakes?

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 04/08/06 19:20
Chapter: One-shot

This was a wonderful story. It was sad in that everyone died. I was wondering about the minister asking the Healer to take Molly's memory. You definitely answered that. I'm glad that Molly and Percy were able to find each other and show how much they loved each other.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I find Percy an intriguing character so I enjoyed writing the Percy/Molly moments.

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