Reviewer: Vorona
Date: 10/24/10 18:40
Chapter: Practice

Oh, this is cute! It's a nice little moment tucked away in the romance of Ron and Hermione, and it really works. I don't see them lasting, but I can still enjoy their simple moments. I'll admit that I did figure out that Hermione wasn't talking about Ron when she was talking to Padma. My first thought was that it had something to do with Neville, though, so I did have some surprise. It didn't matter, though.

I thought you did a great job of portraying Hermione and Ron. Ron is so worried and willing to practice the kissing. His conversation with Harry about the pillow was great. I particularly liked Harry's line about imagining Cho, and now being worried she'd bite him. The part where Ron can really "see" Hermione in the pillow is great, too. Hermione was also well portrayed, I thought. Her worry about Ron's "confession" was very much in character. I liked the overall plot arc, too, as you move from one kiss to a second kiss. That frames the rest of the story very well.

The only thing I can think of to mention is that when Ron is talking to Dean, he says, "A sight I still have not forgiven." That doesn't really sound like Ron to me. Everything else, though, was great.

Overall, it was a charming interlude. I'm not a Ron/Hermione shipper, at all, but I enjoyed this little look at what might have happened their sixth year. Great job!

Reviewer: Hermiones BFF
Date: 04/17/08 23:00
Chapter: Practice

Totally loved it!!!

Reviewer: ginnyrulz13
Date: 01/29/08 14:39
Chapter: Practice

lol!!!! that was SO SO SO funny!!! lol ive never heard of guys kissing there pillows tho.... lol

Reviewer: Tigerlily3
Date: 09/22/07 14:38
Chapter: Practice

HILARIOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Ebony14
Date: 08/31/07 10:33
Chapter: Practice

rofl rofl rofl!!! it's so cool! loved it. :-D

Reviewer: greeneyedbeauty
Date: 07/09/07 1:16
Chapter: Practice

omg, i laughed so hard when i read this , it ws really funny though harry was a bit, well harry didn't make sense but great job

Reviewer: madam_rosmerta
Date: 07/08/07 23:49
Chapter: Practice

awww...cute and funny...interesting plot...

Reviewer: happyday
Date: 06/18/07 21:39
Chapter: Practice

LOL, that's cute! I like it.

Reviewer: Crows
Date: 05/11/07 22:31
Chapter: Practice

Awww, how cute!

Reviewer: DracoLuva4684
Date: 02/01/07 18:08
Chapter: Practice

Aww!
That was so cute!
Loved it!

Reviewer: Mina44
Date: 12/28/06 19:50
Chapter: Practice

lOVE iT!!! iT'S SO CUTE AND SWEET!!! i HOPE TO READ MORE OF YOUR STORiES

Reviewer: Mina44
Date: 12/28/06 19:49
Chapter: Practice

lOVE iT!!! iT'S SO CUTE AND SWEET!!! i HOPE TO READ MORE OF YOUR STORiES

Reviewer: wierdsister
Date: 12/21/06 8:28
Chapter: Practice

*drools over keyboard*

I absolutely love Ron/Hermione fanfics, and this one was extra sweet! Great job capturing the characters, and the ending was fantastic. Short, but lovely.

Reviewer: Hermione_K
Date: 12/20/06 19:54
Chapter: Practice

I love it!

Reviewer: fiestazvezda
Date: 12/13/06 7:04
Chapter: Practice

Roll on the floor laughing! I honestly didn't expect that! It was sooo funny! Nice idea! But the way you did it - sounded so ambiguous.. :)) Liked it very much!

Reviewer: nysuperstarz
Date: 09/06/06 22:41
Chapter: Practice

Oh my gosh, that was hilarious. Oh yeah, cograts on making the featured list. I t was amazingly funny but I think it was a bit patchy and it didnt flow together as well as it could have. Some moents were kinda akward and you know it would never happen in canon, but im sure you have to stretch canon a bit for the humore so it wasnt bad, it was pretty good actually. Just my two cents, dont take it personally, ill just a hard-core critiquer. :)
-hugs,
-Roop.

Reviewer: _Hermione_Granger_
Date: 09/04/06 21:16
Chapter: Practice

aw! that story was so cute and funny! A+!

Reviewer: A_Pink_lady
Date: 09/04/06 15:30
Chapter: Practice

v good. Like the idea. It was funny

Reviewer: SpottedOwl
Date: 09/04/06 10:16
Chapter: Practice

absolutly laugh out loud funny! the harry/cho comment you worked in there was side-splitting. good job!

Reviewer: Yammo
Date: 09/04/06 1:01
Chapter: Practice

Nice. I liked the part where Ron was practicing on the pillow. Brought a smile to my face to see Ron in his element... haha! (:

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