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Name: Vorona (Signed) · Date: 10/24/10 18:40 · For: Practice
Oh, this is cute! It's a nice little moment tucked away in the romance of Ron and Hermione, and it really works. I don't see them lasting, but I can still enjoy their simple moments. I'll admit that I did figure out that Hermione wasn't talking about Ron when she was talking to Padma. My first thought was that it had something to do with Neville, though, so I did have some surprise. It didn't matter, though.

I thought you did a great job of portraying Hermione and Ron. Ron is so worried and willing to practice the kissing. His conversation with Harry about the pillow was great. I particularly liked Harry's line about imagining Cho, and now being worried she'd bite him. The part where Ron can really "see" Hermione in the pillow is great, too. Hermione was also well portrayed, I thought. Her worry about Ron's "confession" was very much in character. I liked the overall plot arc, too, as you move from one kiss to a second kiss. That frames the rest of the story very well.

The only thing I can think of to mention is that when Ron is talking to Dean, he says, "A sight I still have not forgiven." That doesn't really sound like Ron to me. Everything else, though, was great.

Overall, it was a charming interlude. I'm not a Ron/Hermione shipper, at all, but I enjoyed this little look at what might have happened their sixth year. Great job!

Name: Hermiones BFF (Signed) · Date: 04/17/08 23:00 · For: Practice
Totally loved it!!!

Name: ginnyrulz13 (Signed) · Date: 01/29/08 14:39 · For: Practice
lol!!!! that was SO SO SO funny!!! lol ive never heard of guys kissing there pillows tho.... lol

Name: Tigerlily3 (Signed) · Date: 09/22/07 14:38 · For: Practice

Name: Ebony14 (Signed) · Date: 08/31/07 10:33 · For: Practice
rofl rofl rofl!!! it's so cool! loved it. :-D

Name: greeneyedbeauty (Signed) · Date: 07/09/07 1:16 · For: Practice
omg, i laughed so hard when i read this , it ws really funny though harry was a bit, well harry didn't make sense but great job

Name: madam_rosmerta (Signed) · Date: 07/08/07 23:49 · For: Practice
awww...cute and funny...interesting plot...

Name: happyday (Signed) · Date: 06/18/07 21:39 · For: Practice
LOL, that's cute! I like it.

Name: Crows (Signed) · Date: 05/11/07 22:31 · For: Practice
Awww, how cute!

Name: DracoLuva4684 (Signed) · Date: 02/01/07 18:08 · For: Practice
That was so cute!
Loved it!

Name: Mina44 (Signed) · Date: 12/28/06 19:50 · For: Practice

Name: Mina44 (Signed) · Date: 12/28/06 19:49 · For: Practice

Name: wierdsister (Signed) · Date: 12/21/06 8:28 · For: Practice
*drools over keyboard*

I absolutely love Ron/Hermione fanfics, and this one was extra sweet! Great job capturing the characters, and the ending was fantastic. Short, but lovely.

Name: Hermione_K (Signed) · Date: 12/20/06 19:54 · For: Practice
I love it!

Name: fiestazvezda (Signed) · Date: 12/13/06 7:04 · For: Practice
Roll on the floor laughing! I honestly didn't expect that! It was sooo funny! Nice idea! But the way you did it - sounded so ambiguous.. :)) Liked it very much!

Name: nysuperstarz (Signed) · Date: 09/06/06 22:41 · For: Practice
Oh my gosh, that was hilarious. Oh yeah, cograts on making the featured list. I t was amazingly funny but I think it was a bit patchy and it didnt flow together as well as it could have. Some moents were kinda akward and you know it would never happen in canon, but im sure you have to stretch canon a bit for the humore so it wasnt bad, it was pretty good actually. Just my two cents, dont take it personally, ill just a hard-core critiquer. :)

Name: _Hermione_Granger_ (Signed) · Date: 09/04/06 21:16 · For: Practice
aw! that story was so cute and funny! A+!

Name: A_Pink_lady (Signed) · Date: 09/04/06 15:30 · For: Practice
v good. Like the idea. It was funny

Name: SpottedOwl (Signed) · Date: 09/04/06 10:16 · For: Practice
absolutly laugh out loud funny! the harry/cho comment you worked in there was side-splitting. good job!

Name: Yammo (Anonymous) · Date: 09/04/06 1:01 · For: Practice
Nice. I liked the part where Ron was practicing on the pillow. Brought a smile to my face to see Ron in his element... haha! (:

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