Dun, dun duuunnn! OoooooOOoooo Juicy. Very well written. I like your style.
Author's Response: *evil grin* Thanks for reading!! HH
ahhhhh!!!! i had to re-read it!!!! omg its soooo good! i loves it! yet again it made me cry for no reason!
ah, so beautiful.....
Author's Response: It's supposed to make you cry, Kozi !!! ;o) I'm thrilled that you enjoy the story so much, and thanks again for all your wonderful and supportive reviews! HH
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading ! HH
Beutiful ending. I almost wish it would go on, but I like it how it is. That doesn`t mean I wouldn`t read a sequeul though :).
Author's Response: Thanks. It's been quite a journey, but I don't have any plans for a sequel. HH
AHHH! this is the prettiest scene ive read in such a long time! its awesome and i love it!!!!! it made me want to cry, for some reason....*thoughtful facade* well, keep it up, this rocks!!!!!!
Author's Response: *blushes* Thanks for reading, I'm so happy that you enjoyed the story.
Lol the end is the same as in the other story!! You did such a great job of revising it. I love it!! Too bad its over!
Author's Response: I know *hangs head* Does that make me bad to keep the final chapter? Those scenes/images were the impetus for the entire story and I thought it was important enough to remain virtually unchanged. Is that a cop-out? Thanks for sticking with both versions! ;o)
You have a very good writing flair, and a good visual writing style.
That said, I do understand this is your book, and you can write about whatever you feel like but.. you started out good with Snape mind f**king Harry, but after that...
Author's Response: Eh. I started with him 'mind-raping' Harry. Fuckage and rapage are two different things! If you want the original gritty version of this story, check it out my author page on SycophantHex http://erosnsappho.sycophanthex.com/viewuser.php?uid=9983
It's wonderful, and I can see how you progressed as a writer from chapter to chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! I felt that I stretched myself more with chapters 4 & 5 because they differed significantly from the original story. Whether the original is better or worse depends on each individual, but I'm prouder of this version, mainly because it took more out of me. The original is at SycophantHex and can be found through this link http://erosnsappho.sycophanthex.com/viewuser.php?uid=9983
this is soo powerful, so moving. good work, keep it up!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Awwww...i cant wait! ^^ *is a yaoi fangirl* good chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review, and I'm happy you like the story.
omg neeeeeeeeeeeddd mooooooooorrrrre!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Wwwwwrrrrrrrriiiiiiting mooooooooooooooooore, my sweet!
omg neeeeeeeeeeeddd mooooooooorrrrre!!!!!!!
Author's Response: *grins* Thanks for your review! More is on the way!!
Things are getting interesting[er]lol.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Yeah, I never realized just how challenging it is to have emotional involvement instead of just pure sex. Sex is easy, this stuff wears me out!! *grins*
*squeeeeee* Best chapter ever.
Author's Response: *claps hands in delight* I'm so happy you enjoyed it. Chap 4 was a major rewrite and it was more difficult than I'd first envisioned. Working on Chap 5 now, and thanks for reading and reviewing! ;o)
I love your use of description in this story. I am not completely fond of these slash stories. I mean some of them are good but most are in bad taste and much too sexual. I like what you've done with this one so far. I would imagine a relationship between Snape and Harry would start out with anger and I just didn't picture Snape physically raping Harry. I like what you did because it is pretty much the same thing as rape only more mentally and emotionally exhausting. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks! My initial version of this story did include more physical violence and non-con sex, but the rewrite has taken me places that are much more challenging and exhausting! Thanks for visiting the slashy world and reviewing!
Wow! I wasn't sure how I was going to like this story, but it's fantastic. I felt my own heartbeat quicken through reading this whole chapter. It still hasn't slowed down. I love your character portrayal, what a fantastic story.
Author's Response: Woah! High praise indeed, quickening heartbeats and all that! Thanks for your review, i wasn't sure how well this chapter would flow, and I'm happy that it works. Ironing out Chapter 5 now, so stay tuned!
OOooh... i like!! This is such a cool story! I like the way you changed it from being an actual rape to a mental rape. That was a neat way to keep the same idea. You know, the idea of Harry and Snape actually doesnt appeal to me at all, but the way you write really captures me and makes me want them together!! You are a great writer!! Hurry with the next chapter, Im dying to see how the revised version ends!!
Author's Response: Y'know, I actually think I like this revised version better? I suppose because it was more challenging to write! LOL Am working on the amended 5th chapter now and hope to have it up soon. Thanks for sticking around! ;o)
Very Nice. Both people's emotions are very well portrayed! Two Thumbs up! Good-Job!
Author's Response: Thanks! That was a MAJOR rewrite! If you're a Lupin/Harry lover, u might want to check out my LiveJournal for a fic I just wrote for a challenge. http://hogwartshoney.livejournal.com/24040.html#cutid1 Appreciate your review :o)
Must... Subbmit... Next... Chapter... HURRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I must know.
Author's Response: I know, I know! MuggleNet rejected my first 2 versions of Chap 4, so I've changed the direction of the story and submitted a new chapter tonight. Hopefully it's more along the lines of acceptability and will be posted soon. Fingers and toes crossed!
good way to keep people at the edge of their seats ..nice ending...this was really good...It still bears resemblance to the characters of the book thus making it easier to get into the story ....well done :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, that ending was kinda stressful, wasn't it. I've just submitted chapter 4 tonight, so keep fingers and toes crossed that it gets through the Mods. They've been very patient with me, and the original plotline has changed significantly due to their input.