Wow! This is a great poem about Fawkes! I've never have read a poem like this! Good job! MJ
First of all, bravo on writing an excellent poem! You read a lot of poems about Fawkes, but none of them really have captured my attention like yours have. You have a flow with your language that really adds to this poem; your sophistication and rhymes make this poem great. Its obvious you are a person who knows the English language well and is very confidant with its usage. You're a great poet, and this peice shows your talent well.
The only thing I would suggest about this poem is to watch the capitilazation in the beginnings of the lines, as it had no set pattern. Because you followed such a simple, but nice pattern on this poem, that sort of caught my eye (ok, I'm nitpicky...)
I know when you respond to a review, you usually say "thanks for the review," but this time, I'm going to say "Thanks for the story, Vader!" It was a pleasure to read.
Thanks very much, Lilypudding. You're far too kind. I really appreciate you taking the time to review and make some suggestion for improvement. Though, I must admit that anyone saying that I know the English language very well makes me laugh. Trust me, I never majored or concentrated on English during any part of my schooling. Anyway, thanks for the compliment.
Right, getting on to your other thoughts. I always debate the capitalization thing. I've even looked it up a time or to and haven't found much in the way of a concrete rule. My justification is the caps always follow periods at the end of lines. Now that you mentioned it, however, I will have you know that the next time I write one of these, I will be conducting an exhaustive search for the rule (ha ha!).
One question I do want to ask you. Is this poem about Fawkes? I had to go back and re-read it when I saw that comment. Interesting, indeed. I can say that I can certainly see where someone might think this poem is about Fawkes. I can also say that's not what I mean it to be about. Hmm. It brings up an interesting subject for debate in regards to poetry. Is a poem good/great if two people read and get completely different meansing? Or, is a poem actually poor if someone reads it and doesn't get the writer's intended meaning? Food for thought.
Well, have another look, if you have a few minutes, and see who else you might think the poem is about. In terms of depth, maybe this one is not a puddle, but it's not much more than a kiddie pool either.
At any rate, thanks so much for the review, with such interesting comments. It's given me the chance to write a response to a review that is actually longer than the work itself. Thanks again. :)
Author's Response: You know something. I've just read this thing a few more times and it may actually work better as a poem about Fawkes than it's intended meaning. LMAO! Okay, I know netspeak is bad ... it is appropriate. That's too funny. Thanks again for your review.
Good stuff... good stuff, I'm not one to write long, indepth reviews, as I tend to get to the point. I remember reading one of your previous poems which had short rhyming verses. I really like the rhythm it creates having just short rhyming lines, and it makes me read it really fast for some reason (I had to go over it twice before figuring out what was happening). Anyways, thanks for a great read, and I hope to see more from you soon.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, mcclure. As always, I appreciate your feedback. It doesn't matter if it is an in depth review or not. Just taking a second to tell me what you thought is good enough for me. Thanks very much.
I haven't yet read any poetry on this site. I am neither a connoisseur of poems. But I really like this poem. It was nice, short, but with a punch. I can't review it anyways, but just wanted to let you know it was a job appreciated.
Author's Response: Hey, Wendol! Thanks for the review. I think you'll find a number of good poems by several different authors here if you poke around. I appreciate you reading mine and dropping me a quick line to let me know what you thought. Thanks!