Sam, I've read all of your poems, and it's extremely difficult for me to review poetry (who knows why? Maybe it's one of my weird blind spots, like my inability to toast pop-tarts without burning them).
In any case, you're an excellent writer. You have a great grasp of rhyme and meter (lots of writers *cough* me *cough* tend to fudge that up), making it sound effortless, and this definitely works as a song. It has a rhythm to it, and it would be fantastic set to music.
You use words beautifully! I just wish, petty as it sounds, that you could write something happy, just for a change of pace! For example, a song for Peeves to sing? Just a thought!
I hope to see more from you soon!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks, Schmergo! Oh, that reminds me, I need to go review your stories. I've lost a lung laughing so hard.
lol, yeah, my stuff does tend toward the 'depressing' end of the scale. Hate to say it, but I have at least one more angsty poem to post on here. I don't start out writing something depressing, it just happens. That Peeves idea, though... I might just use that - and credit you, of course.
Thanks again! ~Sam
Clap, clap! I really liked your poem. 10/10!
Author's Response: Yay! Thanks, Monty! ~Sam
Awesome! Well, there's something you can do that I can't: You have the mad skills of rhyming. But seriously, it's really good! I like the last line- "I'll always be here- from darkness I'll hide you." I don't know why, it just... Hmm... Well, I just think it sounds a lot like Harry, and wanting to save his friends from danger.
Now, I'm not the brightest crayon in the box, but I'd say it's a 1000000000000/10.
Author's Response: *bows* Thanks! ~Sam
that was very good, it flowed well and the rhyming was good. is the title Latin?
Author's Response: Eee! Thanks! When I was first writing this, I felt the rhyming was a bit akward, but it really does flow well. Yes, the title's Latin, which reminds me, I was going to change it. Look for it now under 'Pax'! ~Sammy~
This is a really, really great poem! You have an ease at using the English language to create wonderful verse, and a sophistication that flows through your poetry. I really liked the first stanza the best. What does the title mean? Anyway, great poem!
Author's Response: Sophistication? Ease? That's quite the compliment. This isn't that great, just something I threw together during class one day. Even so, thanks! The title means 'peace and love in death and loss.' Kinda lengthy, yes... I think I'll shorten it. Anyway, thanks again! ~Sammy~