Oh...my...god. What a great way to describe rain. A lot of people associate it with sadness, but your descriptions were new and amazing and I just loved them. Great job. What an amazing poem.
And you said Well, not really 'drip, drip, drip.' So true. So many people describe rain as 'dripping' when it really doesn't.
Great job!
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
That's all right, how you rhymed same with came...you could have used tame, lame, or fame though, but none of them make any sense with what you are talking about, so came is good. It still makes sense.
In the third stanza you wrote the word "smuther". Were you thinking of "smother"? Just wondering.
Very well done. All of your poems have great repetition.
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I haven't updated in so long it's good to know people are actually reading still. Yeah I did mean "smother" I'll go back and fix that. Lol I didn't even realize that I repeat things a lot, I went back and read each one and well what do ya know pretty much every one repeats Kaci
Wow, that is such an interesting way to write a poem! Can I try it? It is so cool!
This poem was so sad, but very canon and IC - all Harry wants to do is to protect Ginny. He has his doubts, but he has to forget them, move on, so she can live...
Well done!
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Wow, that is depressing, but so is most of the other stuff I read. I like the repetition in this, how every stanza began the same way.
I'm dying,
It's as if it was the only thing she could think of - she was dying without him. So sad!
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
I really liked both of your poems. The first one is sad but really good. I liked how in the second one it made sense if you read it normally and it made sense if you read all the first lines, then second, and last third. I hope to hear more poems from you.
Author's Response: I just submitted the third poem and I have a whole notebook full of poems so I hope to update alot. :)
Oh my gosh that was really sad! It made so much since though.
Oh my gosh that was really sad! It made so much since though.
Author's Response: thank you!!
