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Name: Invisibility Cloak
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05/19/12 19:19 · For:
Nice! Thanks for the lovely tale, Arnel! It's a nice little treat to find well-written missing moments and that sort of tidbit. I really really liked the attention your detail (eckeltricity and such); it makes the story seem very much in the present and helps the reader experience everything firsthand. The flashbacks when Arthur is pondering his relationship with Ron at the latter's bedside are very well chosen and helpful- they keep Arthur's ideas from presenting themselves as merely paper-and-ink emotion. All the interactions between the characters, as well as the characterizations, were very realistic, giving the story a nice flow. I noticed some reviewers found Arthur's intuition as to his children's romantic lives surprising- however, you did such a good job of building Arthur up as a very perceptive person (starting with his realization, when his wife yells at him to "shut that thing off" (perfectly Molly!), that something was seriously wrong; I thought at first that he would think she was just annoyed at the noise :) ) that his insights seemed natural enough. Ooh, more details! You had Fawkes the Phoenix play the messenger again in this story. It seemed a bit curious at first to have the majestic creature act the common barn owl (I know he did it in OotP, but I though "extenuating circumstances "), but perhaps Fawkes, wise as he is, wouldn't mind lending his services- after all, he already helped in two other perilous situations involving a Weasley: Ginny's sojourn to the chamber and Arthur's attack. Maybe they're growing on him! Speaking of those situations, your theory that a few of the Weasleys now owe Harry a life totally bowled me over; I'd never have thought to take Harry's deeds as such! I like the way the Weasleys take it in the end: saying that it doesn't matter much as they consider Harry a son anyway. Lovely! Just goes to show how much can be gleaned from small comments in the series- Yay for cannon story fodder! Well, sorry for the rather muddled review, and once again, thank you for the nice story- and may your quill stay sharp ;) !
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02/10/07 23:51 · For:
I can't believe that you have so little reviews! The story is amazing. Really, I thought that you captured every character perfectly. Seeing things through Mr. Weasley's eyes was also very interesting. I've always seen him as a very wise man. Anyways, I loved this story. 10/10
Author's Response: I'm really glad you enjoyed my story. I love to write looking through the eyes of the "lesser" characters and it was fun to write about this serious situation through the practiced eyes of a parent. Thank you for your review.
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08/13/06 0:15 · For:
I thought this story was simply marvelous. You brought up a good point to do Ron, Arthur, and Ginny owe Harry a life debt? I've never really thought about that myself. Keep writing! Cheers!
Author's Response: First off, I apologize for not responding to your review sooner. I wasn't expecting any reviews for this story and don't log in to this site very often. I appreciate the time you took to tell me what you thought of my story.rnrnAs for the question of whether Ron, Ginny and Arthur owe Harry a life debt, my understanding of them is that once a person saves your life, you are obligated to do the same for them. Now whether the opportunity presents itself or not is another question altogether. In some ways, Arthur saves Harry's life each summer when he allows him to spend all or part of the holidays at the Burrow, thus saving Harry from a dreadfully dreary existance in Privet Drive! Also, from reading DH, Ron does find the opportunity to save Harry's life when he pulls him from the freezing water of the forest pool. In my book, two out of three ain't bad! And who knows... maybe someday Ginny will get the chance to return the favor as Harry's wife.rnrnI'm glad you liked my story.
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04/14/06 0:15 · For:
Wonderful. Well-written, nice voice, interesting setting (I liked the inter-linking with the books). I was surprised that Arthur picked up on Hermione's (and others') state of mind as he was arriving to see Ron... I'll admit that it seemed a little out of place for a distraught parent. But I've never been there, so it's hard to know! Overall, very enjoyable without being too fluffy. Generally good editing. 10
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing my story. I apologize for not responding in a more timely manner. I'm glad you liked what I wrote. Almost everything I write in the HP universe is tied someway to the books, whether it's a missing moment, or a look at a certain situation from another character's point of view. For this story, I started thinking about what it would be like to be either Arthur or Molly or maybe write as both characters. One of my favorite male characters is Arthur and I've always seen him as one of those people who sits in the background and watches people. Therefore, it wasn't too much of a stretch to imagine him noticing the state of mind of Ron's friends; as a parent you pick up on a lot of things having to do with your children and their friends, just because your love and concern for these little (or not-so-little) people is so great. Again, thank you for your review. I'm glad you liked my story.