Reviews For Betrayal
Reviewer: MercurysMaiden
Date: 06/08/06 15:41
Chapter: Torn

You know, I have to give you a lot of credit for having the guts to write this. Of course we all hate Peter, especially us Sirius lovers, right? Having said that, I find myself wondering what the motivations were behind the betrayal, and if there wasn't more to them than what we've been shown. There had to be. I've had similar thoughts, and I've even sketched them out, but they've never made it to any public archive.

I think you've done a good job of illustrating Peter's POV without making him sympathetic. Good use of emotional descriptives as well.

Reviewer: gbutlergirl
Date: 04/19/06 18:37
Chapter: Torn

Ooh, chilling! I didn't know that you had written another story... I guess I never really went on your bio page too often... but with the new options its a lot easier to see stuff like this. :-) So, anyway, great job! I loved how their wasn't any dialogue (is that how you spell that?) in the story. It added a whole new level that I'm not quite sure if you were going for, but it really worked for me. It would have been even more powerful and cool if the story had been written in first person. More memories would have been cool as well, but it was still good. I like this one-shot idea. Maybe I'll write one while waiting for my writer's block on my own fic to go away. Anyway, I lved your ideas and you fic!! 10/10 :-)

Author's Response: im glad u liked the no dialogue.. i wasnt sure if it would work out... thanx for the review!!

Reviewer: fireflower
Date: 04/15/06 9:43
Chapter: Torn

amazing mate, its true that Peter was weak and stupid and...well you get the point but i do kind of pity him now. He could have said no to Voldemort and killed himself so that Voldemort couldn't read his mind. But Peter didn't have the same strength as Sirius or Remus had. They would have given their lives for their friends but Peter was..weak. He was afraid of dying and.....oh dear i'm rambolling on as usual. Anyway, straight to the point. i loved the way you did this one shot. It was great. I loved it! 1000000000/10 (and its green with a dark mark flashin on it (cos technically even though your one shot was great it was about Peter so it was evil))

Author's Response: thanx... nd having one with a dark mark will go perfectly with the rest of my flashing, sparkling reviews... variety... lool well thanx for reviewing glad u didnt hate it

Reviewer: HP fanatic1
Date: 03/31/06 15:26
Chapter: Torn

I like the way you described his feelings towards what he was doing, but I think you might have gone a little overboard, but it's really cool, but "a whole new light" is better, really great job on both of them! ;) 10/10! ~Jess~

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