Reviewer: whittyleah
Date: 06/16/06 13:33
Chapter: Stream of Consciousness

oh...I like this a lot. It shows her emotion really well. One part seemed a little out of place to me though..."You’re always conscious of your surroundings.
You’re always alert." I didn't understand why that was there, but besides that I loved it. Your choice of words described the feelings very well.

Author's Response: Thank you for your nice review. I'm sorry for not typing more but I'm totally blank roght now :-)

Reviewer: Periwinkle
Date: 03/31/06 18:15
Chapter: Stream of Consciousness

Very nicely done, Foxy! I liked this because it showed her feelings for Harry in a different light. It's a bit estranged, but in a good way. It's not too close, but it's not too far away. Am I making sense? Like, Hermione's feelings for Harry in the poem aren't being shown as too close, but they're not of dislike. It has a bit of mystery to it, too. Great Job! 9/10.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your great review, and you make perfect sense ;-)

I didn't wan't her feelings to seem too direct because I didn't wan't the poem to be fluffy. I'm glad you noticed that.

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