Great poem! Your sophisticated knowledge of the English language is evident in this poem. I really don't know what to say, but great poem! I'll tell you more when I turn around in my chair to talk to you in approximately two seconds! 'Till then, my awesome twin sister, congradulations on writing poetry A LOT better than I do!!!!!!!!!!!!! ~Lexi~
Aww, poor Neville... :(
Author's Response: Yes, it is very sad. I'm thinking about doing one about Remus or Luna, they're very stoic in plights.
Understandable. Thanks for all 5 reviews you left for me =). Ah well, this IS MNFF, after all. They do screw up a lot, ha ha. You're right about nobody reviewing poetry, and to tell the truth I think that it's just sad. Poetry is as much a legitimate genre as any other, although friends of mine with chapter fics DO look down on the poetry.... hmm.... must ponder...
Author's Response: I've actually gotten more reviews for this one and the other poem than for my chapter fic...odd.
In the very beginning you had a nice rhyming pattern, but towords the end you sort of broke away from it, making it less effective. To tell the truth, that's the reason I prefer writing and reading free-form. You did a decent job of showing Neville's emotions, but you didn't really dig down deep inside of him and find out what makes him that way. You didn't show your audience what really made him tick. Generally I like it, but It'll only get a 6/10 from me. Keep working at it, because you've got a great start there!
Author's Response: Yes, in the beginning I started writing it in class, and the bell rang and I was interrupted. That disrupted my flow. Once I lost my flow, I really couldn't get it back.
